A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
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Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Craig;
You have expressed some honest opinions here, and I can relate to not wanting to be saddled with 'Original Sin,' because it wasn't anything YOU did. It is a problem I wrestled with for quite some time.
Thank you for sharing your opinion, and your new word. Great job,
~patty~
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Hi, Craig;
You have expressed some honest opinions here, and I can relate to not wanting to be saddled with 'Original Sin,' because it wasn't anything YOU did. It is a problem I wrestled with for quite some time.
Thank you for sharing your opinion, and your new word. Great job,
~patty~
Comment Written 09-May-2018
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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My son used to get terribly upset every time I belted him for something his sister did. Don't know why - most unreasonable of him (I'm joking of course). Thanks very much, Patty, for the great review :) Craig
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
I wholeheartedly agree with the sentiments you've expressed in this very well written poem, Craig. This poem has excellent rhyming and a smooth flow, and great choice of picture to complement your write. I love it all, but especially this stanza:
Perhaps it suits oppressive folk
to make us think we're full of sin;
by making us heed their advice
the outcome is, we lose, they win
It's always good to learn new words. ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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I wholeheartedly agree with the sentiments you've expressed in this very well written poem, Craig. This poem has excellent rhyming and a smooth flow, and great choice of picture to complement your write. I love it all, but especially this stanza:
Perhaps it suits oppressive folk
to make us think we're full of sin;
by making us heed their advice
the outcome is, we lose, they win
It's always good to learn new words. ~~ Connie
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thanks very much, Connie, for the kind and supportive comments. Glad you enjoyed my poem :) Craig
Comment from lyenochka
That really is a rare word because I could not google dedititious. It only came back suggesting sedititious. Good rhyming quatrains well expressing a doctrine that is foundational to Christian faith. That was just the setting for the reason for Christ's sacrifice.
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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That really is a rare word because I could not google dedititious. It only came back suggesting sedititious. Good rhyming quatrains well expressing a doctrine that is foundational to Christian faith. That was just the setting for the reason for Christ's sacrifice.
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks very much, Helen. I did find a few instances show up on my Google listing - but not many. It's categorised as "ancient" - a bit like me :) Most grateful -Craig
Comment from Dawn Munro
sigh... (lol)
No comment on your content, Craig
I'm far too weary for debate,
but rhyme and meter are bang-on,
and that, my friend, I cannot hate.
Okay, I lied, I have to say,
Old Testament the man doth quote -
who told you all this nonsense, eh? (That's Canadian for "eh"? LOL)
Our Jesus died to save the day.
Just focus on the latter truth -
I know, I know, you know it all, (Scripture, I mean)
but please don't show me as uncouth
or you will surely make me bawl. (and question more than I already do, not if God exists - I know He does - just why and how and when and where and if and so and...) *smile*
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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sigh... (lol)
No comment on your content, Craig
I'm far too weary for debate,
but rhyme and meter are bang-on,
and that, my friend, I cannot hate.
Okay, I lied, I have to say,
Old Testament the man doth quote -
who told you all this nonsense, eh? (That's Canadian for "eh"? LOL)
Our Jesus died to save the day.
Just focus on the latter truth -
I know, I know, you know it all, (Scripture, I mean)
but please don't show me as uncouth
or you will surely make me bawl. (and question more than I already do, not if God exists - I know He does - just why and how and when and where and if and so and...) *smile*
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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I think it is a sign of a mature person that can appraise a piece of work, and while disagreeing with whatever the content might suggest, find some value in the construction and style of it. This seems to be a feat beyond many, but not you, Deb. There, I called you mature -- what sort of terrible character assault is that on someone who was kind enough to give such a lovely review? ;-)
My perception of things is quite different from what would appear to be the majority on this site, but when I write about such topics (which I must, because they are important issues), I try to concentrate on my own understanding, rather than criticise someone else for theirs. Not everyone can make the distinction, and sometimes, I probably fail at it.
Anyway, thanks for the wonderful review :)
Craig
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Old. I'm old. Let's face it. Worm fodder. That's me.
HA! But I am NOT. I plan to be cremated. (*silly grin*) Gotta go. I've been onsite too long and I'm punch-drunk. LOL) You're very welcome. Thank YOU for such a fine compliment.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Celebrate free will! If we have it, we must be meant to use it. However, we ought to use it for good, not to cause harm. If we didn't have free will, our lives would be predictable, like movies we could watch to see what happens at the end. That might be interesting, but I think I'd rather not know. :)
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Celebrate free will! If we have it, we must be meant to use it. However, we ought to use it for good, not to cause harm. If we didn't have free will, our lives would be predictable, like movies we could watch to see what happens at the end. That might be interesting, but I think I'd rather not know. :)
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Speaking of movies, Free Will was a great one. I don't think Seaworld will ever live down the shame :) Many thanks, Phyllis - much appreciated. Craig
Comment from Gloria ....
A most finely rhymed and metred poem, Craig. It is an odd thing to supposedly have a free will to make a choice, but only if you choose what the magistrate wants you to, otherwise you will be punished forever. Clearly that is not a choice. It just isn't. But when I look around and see what the religious do to each other, it's astonishing, shocking really in its nastiness. They most definitely set out to hurt people and cause pain with injustice and lies.
I've come to conclusion many people do not know what envy is and that envy arises from within. But if they believe another caused that feeling, they'll project their extreme discomfort onto the other and punish them for what they, themselves think. What could be more galling to them than to have someone actually use their free will to make real choices which they, by definition, cannot make because of their own choice. It's a real paradox, isn't it? And that puzzle is responsible for much of the world's grief. It's the classic Hobson's choice which is a so-called free choice in which only one thing is offered.
Anyway great job and a fine, fine poem.
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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A most finely rhymed and metred poem, Craig. It is an odd thing to supposedly have a free will to make a choice, but only if you choose what the magistrate wants you to, otherwise you will be punished forever. Clearly that is not a choice. It just isn't. But when I look around and see what the religious do to each other, it's astonishing, shocking really in its nastiness. They most definitely set out to hurt people and cause pain with injustice and lies.
I've come to conclusion many people do not know what envy is and that envy arises from within. But if they believe another caused that feeling, they'll project their extreme discomfort onto the other and punish them for what they, themselves think. What could be more galling to them than to have someone actually use their free will to make real choices which they, by definition, cannot make because of their own choice. It's a real paradox, isn't it? And that puzzle is responsible for much of the world's grief. It's the classic Hobson's choice which is a so-called free choice in which only one thing is offered.
Anyway great job and a fine, fine poem.
Gloria
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks for a most thoughtful review, Gloria. Yes indeed, the ultimate Hobson's choice. I love the late Dave Allen's skit on the subject. "Which tree shouldn't I eat from?" asks Eve. "That one over there. Don't eat from THAT tree," replies God. LOL Much appreciation, Craig
Comment from Elizabeth Brown
Well, you did it, not an easy word to include in anything really, especially a poem. This is the first of yours I've read I think, and I enjoyed it. I think I agree with your sentiments - a good way to live one's life I feel. Well done. Elizabeth.
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Well, you did it, not an easy word to include in anything really, especially a poem. This is the first of yours I've read I think, and I enjoyed it. I think I agree with your sentiments - a good way to live one's life I feel. Well done. Elizabeth.
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks for the kind assessment, Elizabeth. Please feel free to revisit often! Much appreciated - Craig
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. The fear of God is not to fear someone that may harm us when we don't obey. It is more a fear not to disappoint God in what we do. He gives us a choice to choose either the blessings, or the curse.
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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A very well-written poem. The fear of God is not to fear someone that may harm us when we don't obey. It is more a fear not to disappoint God in what we do. He gives us a choice to choose either the blessings, or the curse.
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks for reviewing, Sandra. "Give me all your money, or I'll shoot you" is a choice too :) Cheers, Craig
Comment from Kerry Wanstall
You've hit that nail right on the head CD Richards. Goodonya mate from one Aussie to another. You've written an excellent witty and astute commentary on this subject.
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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You've hit that nail right on the head CD Richards. Goodonya mate from one Aussie to another. You've written an excellent witty and astute commentary on this subject.
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks very much for the lovely comments, fellow Aussie. Most grateful :) Craig
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CD Richards, I've just realised that you are the author of Dead Sure. No wonder I liked it so much. It could not have been penned by anyone other than an Aussie, and one from the bush, to boot.
There is nothing like the Aussie sense of humour.
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Hi Kerry, I'm not the author of that - unless I wrote it and forgot (that's not entirely impossible lol) Is it a contest entry? You've piqued my curiosity now :) Cheers, Craig
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Sorry. A compatriot calling herself Aussie.
Comment from Scarbrems
Well, that's a delicious word, isn't it? You're certainly extending my vocabulary. It's got a good rhythm and pace to it, with some good, strong words besides your WOTD. I particularly liked this line:
'if we may not dissention voice.'
It's got a great cadence to it, I can imagine it being part of a rousing speech at a rally.
Now, you know I'm no expert, but I do read these things sort of aloud in my head, if you understanding my meaning. I've not counted anything, or anything, so I could be talking from the proverbial posterior, but this bit,
'When somebody suggests that I've
been broken ever since since my birth'
Asides from accidentally having 'since' twice, to my ear it sounds a bit off. I'd leave the 'ever' out, but like I say, I'm no expert.
Anyway, thanks for another great word and thoughtful piece
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Well, that's a delicious word, isn't it? You're certainly extending my vocabulary. It's got a good rhythm and pace to it, with some good, strong words besides your WOTD. I particularly liked this line:
'if we may not dissention voice.'
It's got a great cadence to it, I can imagine it being part of a rousing speech at a rally.
Now, you know I'm no expert, but I do read these things sort of aloud in my head, if you understanding my meaning. I've not counted anything, or anything, so I could be talking from the proverbial posterior, but this bit,
'When somebody suggests that I've
been broken ever since since my birth'
Asides from accidentally having 'since' twice, to my ear it sounds a bit off. I'd leave the 'ever' out, but like I say, I'm no expert.
Anyway, thanks for another great word and thoughtful piece
Comment Written 07-May-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks so much for pointing out the double-up there, Emma - I've corrected that. Removing "ever" would get rid of a redundancy, but it would break the 4-beat rhythm, so until I can think of a substitute, I'll have to leave it. I'm very grateful for the kind comments. Craig
