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Comment from DALLAS01
What a wonderful metaphor for the human spirit taking flight. One engaged in chasing beauty and flying free. And above all observing and appreciating its God given ability to do so.
Beautifully worded.
reply by the author on 31-May-2018
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What a wonderful metaphor for the human spirit taking flight. One engaged in chasing beauty and flying free. And above all observing and appreciating its God given ability to do so.
Beautifully worded.
Comment Written 29-May-2018
reply by the author on 31-May-2018
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Thanks again for the six star review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem, it was fun to write, and many times, those are the ones that come out in the best light and are the most successful. Glad you enjoyed it estory
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:-))
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely poem about life as a bird - or perhaps the imagination flying free like a bird. I especially liked the line: Lost in the fabled magic of flight
Great use of alliteration and repetition!
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Lovely poem about life as a bird - or perhaps the imagination flying free like a bird. I especially liked the line: Lost in the fabled magic of flight
Great use of alliteration and repetition!
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and all your wonderful comments supporting this poem. That's it; imagination flying free like a bird, I think. Birds are a great metaphor. estory
Comment from Irish Rain
Yes, I was certainly sailing along with them, I just love this! A lovely poem for your niece, and all of us. I love to watch our birds. I counted 17 different varieties one day last summer. But nary a bluebird. They're in the area, I wish one would come to my kitchen window. This brings such pleasant thoughts!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Yes, I was certainly sailing along with them, I just love this! A lovely poem for your niece, and all of us. I love to watch our birds. I counted 17 different varieties one day last summer. But nary a bluebird. They're in the area, I wish one would come to my kitchen window. This brings such pleasant thoughts!
Blessings...
Comment Written 04-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and all the encouraging remarks and support. I am glad you enjoyed it, this one was fun to write. If you want bluebirds, you need a big field, and keep the grass cut. they love to come out for the insects near evening. estory
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Oh darn. No big field, just a teensy yard, ha ha!
Comment from Air Spirit
This is a lovely tribute to not only your niece Kaylynn, but to mother nature and all of her glory and bounty.. Birds have always held a certain fascination for me.. it is their birthright to freedom that they are given.. a way to literally and figuratively escape whatever keeps us weighted down, hurts us or haunts us.. My favorite line of yours is "...A life of open air And boundless horizons..."
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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This is a lovely tribute to not only your niece Kaylynn, but to mother nature and all of her glory and bounty.. Birds have always held a certain fascination for me.. it is their birthright to freedom that they are given.. a way to literally and figuratively escape whatever keeps us weighted down, hurts us or haunts us.. My favorite line of yours is "...A life of open air And boundless horizons..."
Comment Written 03-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Thanks for the excellent review and all the wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad you enjoyed it and found it so inspiring. I kind of like the ending, its like the birds taking off, and disappearing off in the sky. the distance unfolds in front of them with no limits. estory
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very true... thanks for pointing that out!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the birds and their song in the trees early in the morning and during the day. It is indeed joyful to listen to the birds singing their cheerful songs.
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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A very well-written poem about the birds and their song in the trees early in the morning and during the day. It is indeed joyful to listen to the birds singing their cheerful songs.
Comment Written 03-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Thanks for the excellent review and all your wonderful comments in support of this poem. Glad you enjoyed it estory
Comment from Ulla
Hi estory, I loved this poem about birds, and seen from their point of view. It has the same light feel when you see them flying from branch to branch. It also has great imagery depicting the impossible long flights as the emigrates. It's a very well written free verse and a joy to read. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Hi estory, I loved this poem about birds, and seen from their point of view. It has the same light feel when you see them flying from branch to branch. It also has great imagery depicting the impossible long flights as the emigrates. It's a very well written free verse and a joy to read. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Thanks for the excellent review and your wonderful comments supporting this poem; I am glad you enjoyed it and found it so inspiring. This one was fun to write and it is hopeful and optimistic, kind of like the spirit of life taking off for the wild blue yonder estory
Comment from Carol Ann Yasuhara
I really love this poem. I'm a bird lover. They are so amazing to watch. This captures the migratory voyage of birds that we really don't know much about but can only imagine. Thanks for sharing about one of God's masterpieces. I especially like your concluding statement: "Feet never quite touching the ground."
Carol
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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I really love this poem. I'm a bird lover. They are so amazing to watch. This captures the migratory voyage of birds that we really don't know much about but can only imagine. Thanks for sharing about one of God's masterpieces. I especially like your concluding statement: "Feet never quite touching the ground."
Carol
Comment Written 02-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Thanks for the excellent review and all your wonderful comments supporting this poem. I am glad you liked it and found it so inspiring. That ending was a favorite of mine, one of the better ones I've come up with, I think, to date. I like it when poems kind of take off for the wild blue yonder and drift off into the sky. estory
Comment from Harry Smith
Nice free verse poem that the reader really enjoyed. The poem is filled with lots and lots of imagery and it is filled with emotions as well
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Nice free verse poem that the reader really enjoyed. The poem is filled with lots and lots of imagery and it is filled with emotions as well
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Thanks for the five star review and all your wonderful comments supporting this poem. Glad you latched onto those images and they picked you up and carried you away....estory
Comment from rama devi
This is excellent. Unique. Captures the bird-view POV. Good use of flow and repetition for a sense of migration patterns and wind currents! Excellent insight and phrasing.
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Along the long(-)fabled migrations,
Nice phrasing and closing note 9favorite part):
A life of open air
And boundless horizons,
Feet never quite touching the ground
Enjoyed this!
Warmly, rd
PS - I feel like an ellipses after ground might be artistically apt...just a thought!
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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This is excellent. Unique. Captures the bird-view POV. Good use of flow and repetition for a sense of migration patterns and wind currents! Excellent insight and phrasing.
One suggestion (optional):
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Along the long(-)fabled migrations,
Nice phrasing and closing note 9favorite part):
A life of open air
And boundless horizons,
Feet never quite touching the ground
Enjoyed this!
Warmly, rd
PS - I feel like an ellipses after ground might be artistically apt...just a thought!
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Thanks so much for all your continued support and suggestions. I am glad you liked this and probably for the same reasons I enjoyed writing it...that feeling of taking off and drifting off into the wild blue yonder...estory
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Delightful! :-)))
Comment from Liz O'Neill
My favorite line is Fledglings fledged and flown . I like the alliteration in it and like your use of fledged, which I'm not sure I've ever heard. I like word play and use it frequently. You have drawn in with your boundless imagery. We feel as of we have taken wing ourselves and soar through the journey, with memory jogged of past resting places. You have set the pace and purpose with the varying cadences. Very effective. The final verse very effectively summarizes the whole poem. Well written
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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My favorite line is Fledglings fledged and flown . I like the alliteration in it and like your use of fledged, which I'm not sure I've ever heard. I like word play and use it frequently. You have drawn in with your boundless imagery. We feel as of we have taken wing ourselves and soar through the journey, with memory jogged of past resting places. You have set the pace and purpose with the varying cadences. Very effective. The final verse very effectively summarizes the whole poem. Well written
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 04-May-2018
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Thank you so much for this amazing review and all your comments supporting this poem. I think you got exactly what I was trying to get across... that feeling of taking off into the wild blue yonder estory
