Perennials of War
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Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara
Rats! Gunshots just when Shana and Drew are sharing a beautiful moment that is about to be capped off with a kiss! Anyway, it keeps the suspense which is something you do so well.
:) Bev
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Hi, Barbara
Rats! Gunshots just when Shana and Drew are sharing a beautiful moment that is about to be capped off with a kiss! Anyway, it keeps the suspense which is something you do so well.
:) Bev
Comment Written 04-May-2018
reply by the author on 05-May-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Barbara;
I wonder if their closeness will cloud Drew's thinking, and allow Shana to be in danger. You know how men just lose their heads when it comes to romance.
I like the direction you've taken the story in -- but I hope that sound wasn't gunfire,
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Hi, Barbara;
I wonder if their closeness will cloud Drew's thinking, and allow Shana to be in danger. You know how men just lose their heads when it comes to romance.
I like the direction you've taken the story in -- but I hope that sound wasn't gunfire,
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Let's hope it's not gunfire. LOL It will be revealed on Sunday. Drew is head over heels in love with Shana. Can she keep resisting his charm? Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. It seems like Anderson's and Shana's feeling towards one another are reaching a new level of involvement. One heck of a hook at the end. Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. It seems like Anderson's and Shana's feeling towards one another are reaching a new level of involvement. One heck of a hook at the end. Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, This was again a well written chapter. The only thing is that Shana is starting to annoy me. I think she draws things out a bit too much, and it was not clear to me why she suddenly reversed to Anderson. Otherwise a fine chapter. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Hi Barbara, This was again a well written chapter. The only thing is that Shana is starting to annoy me. I think she draws things out a bit too much, and it was not clear to me why she suddenly reversed to Anderson. Otherwise a fine chapter. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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I think Shana has a self-esteem issue. That should be coming out a little more. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Artasylum
I started to read this and it captured me... It is so well written that it was over before I started it. Great and Fast read. Thanks so much for this fun story and looking forward. Yours, Diana
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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I started to read this and it captured me... It is so well written that it was over before I started it. Great and Fast read. Thanks so much for this fun story and looking forward. Yours, Diana
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent, six star work. Poor Shana still can't get comfortable around Anderson. She's still having nightmares, and she's very sensitive about that. Interesting that Anderson's mother likes to do her own cooking. Now that they're in Texas, things are more relaxed. Shana and Anderson's romance will get nowhere if someone keeps trying to kill them. What an exciting way to end the chapter. Never a dull moment. Shana must be wishing for things to be dull again. judi
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Excellent, six star work. Poor Shana still can't get comfortable around Anderson. She's still having nightmares, and she's very sensitive about that. Interesting that Anderson's mother likes to do her own cooking. Now that they're in Texas, things are more relaxed. Shana and Anderson's romance will get nowhere if someone keeps trying to kill them. What an exciting way to end the chapter. Never a dull moment. Shana must be wishing for things to be dull again. judi
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome. It's always something with Shana and Anderson. Never a dull moment. judi
Comment from Ric Myworld
Bad guys around every corner, a love affair that just can't happen, yet. And now, you leave us wondering if someone has been shot, or if there's to be another battle royal. Thanks for sharing, great job. :-)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Bad guys around every corner, a love affair that just can't happen, yet. And now, you leave us wondering if someone has been shot, or if there's to be another battle royal. Thanks for sharing, great job. :-)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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I agree we've got to get rid of the bad guys. I hope we can do that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Wonderful read really enjoyed this wanted it to keep going so I can find out what happens next. Characters are interesting and somewhat relatable.goid job!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Wonderful read really enjoyed this wanted it to keep going so I can find out what happens next. Characters are interesting and somewhat relatable.goid job!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from apky
"Just fine. Thank you for asking, Anderson."
His eyes widened as he took her hand and called, "Mom, we're going out for a little while. We'll eat later." He took out his cell, pushed a button, and said, "We're walking to the lake."
~ This surprised me as much as it surprised Drew. I had to read it from the beginning again. In the end, the answer Shana gives isn't satisfactory for the reader. Not after you made the reader stop in surprise, and anticipate something drastic, if you know what I mean.
That's the only weakness in an otherwise strong and excellent chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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"Just fine. Thank you for asking, Anderson."
His eyes widened as he took her hand and called, "Mom, we're going out for a little while. We'll eat later." He took out his cell, pushed a button, and said, "We're walking to the lake."
~ This surprised me as much as it surprised Drew. I had to read it from the beginning again. In the end, the answer Shana gives isn't satisfactory for the reader. Not after you made the reader stop in surprise, and anticipate something drastic, if you know what I mean.
That's the only weakness in an otherwise strong and excellent chapter.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review. I will recheck that area.
Comment from karenina
I must fnd time somewhere to go back a nd begin at the beginnng! You've such a natural flow to your writing I felt welcomed at once!
Admittedly I barely had time to meet each character, but I wilk
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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I must fnd time somewhere to go back a nd begin at the beginnng! You've such a natural flow to your writing I felt welcomed at once!
Admittedly I barely had time to meet each character, but I wilk
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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