Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

I think your poem has a very interesting concept. The origin of the universe and "all there is" has been pondered since the beginning of man. We may never know. And what's more, it's suspected there are other universes. That poses more food for thought. My husband used to say that God was probably like Johnny Apple Seed, sowing planets with potential life helter-skelter, then moving on, never to return. Some seeds "took" and some didn't. Earth is one that "took." Marilyn

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018

An interesting idea your husband had, Marilyn. The multiverse idea does complicate things, that's for sure, but it's a fascinating concept. Many thanks for the thoughtful review - Craig.

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Nice job with this poem, rhyming, pace and theme all flow together well.

Thoughts as I went:

we love to contemplate cosmogonies.
(that any every subject under the sun, A nice start to this poem of the day, sets the pace and theme of universal contemplation and humanity with the sense of from evolution to now)

us as the product of a magic wand.
(The earlier tone of evolution continues with a dismissal of creationism)

creation, just some virtual event?
(I watched a neat black mirror sci-fi episode where by the end the characters realized they were a simulation. It was pretty neat, though I wasn't surprised they were living in a virtual event. I would be surprised to find this a virtual event)

is difficult, it was so long ago.
(this might be a comma splice...)

and what are we, that we should cause such fuss?
(Ha. I thought of the song ... you're so vain. The universe singing that song about humanity)

and, without us, will cheerfully roll on.
(The worlds might keep on spinning for awhile, but ... without humanity--the center of the universes' center ... ; p will it really count? (I'm being a bit snarky on that)

Nice job with this poem.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2018

I enjoyed the Black Mirror series on Netflix. It's funny you mention Carly Simon's great song. I referred to it in a review of my own only yesterday. We do seem to be on the same page much of the time. Always grateful for your thoughtful and constructive comments, Turtle. Thank you - Craig

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

I do believe you're right (but I've been wrong).
The universe was here so long ago!
Of course there always was that heavn'ly throng.
But I'm still new; there's no way I could know. (*grin*)

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018

LOL Thanks, Dawn, for a fun review. Very much appreciated :) Craig

reply by Dawn Munro on 29-Apr-2018

It was my pleasure. :)

Comment from Harry Smith

Excellent

This is a very interesting poem that is filled with lots and lots of both imagery as well as emotions. The reader really enjoyed the read

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018

Thanks for reviewing. Craig

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Excellent piece. There always has been and always will be stuff. My view of the universe does not include a beginning, just an expansion of what was there. There are many such expansions going on all the time, many of them small, such as in Horton Hears a Who.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018

Thanks for the great review, Phyllis :) Craig

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

Man is truly egocentric. I went to several sites just to attempt to understand cosmogony. My head explode... sort of like the big bang. Fun stuff and looking forward to posts. yours, diana

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018

Thanks very much for reviewing, Diana, and for the kind words. Craig

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a great poem to question the way the Universe began. I like the possible 'theories' you give readers. I like that you added your own idea of what you like/don't like. In addition I like the way you concluded that it will 'cheerfully roll on'. Thanks for sharing a great thought-provoking poem. Jan

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018

Thanks very much for the lovely review, Jan. Glad you liked my poem. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem about the beginning of the universe, we will not be able to know when exactly it starts it was there from ever and will exist for ever in the future.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018

Thanks very much for reviewing, Sandra. Most appreciated - Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Superb poem, Craig. You're always asking the tough questions, even though I'd never given a thought to the fact this might all be virtual reality of a loving alien. As long as it isn't like that one in Alien 1 - 10.

Perfectly metred and rhymed and a delight to read. New word's great!

Gloria

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018

I've never given that idea serious thought, Gloria. Bill brought it up in the forum recently, so that's probably why it stuck. Many thanks, Craig

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

Your well written and well rhymed verse addresses the question for the ages.
Cosmogony, where did we come from and how do we fit in the creation of all?
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon

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 Comment Written 27-Apr-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018

Thanks very much for the great comments, Sharon. Your kindness is much appreciated. Craig