A Child's Plight
when a child is sexually abused....free verse35 total reviews
Comment from emptypage
I like this very much, but.
I really think, I know, from living through it, that though memories do fade, the scars are there forever. The behaviors, the self-loathing, the everything... forever.
Child abusers make me hope at least one scripture is right in the bible: "Better for him who hurts a child that a millstone be placed upon his neck...."
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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I like this very much, but.
I really think, I know, from living through it, that though memories do fade, the scars are there forever. The behaviors, the self-loathing, the everything... forever.
Child abusers make me hope at least one scripture is right in the bible: "Better for him who hurts a child that a millstone be placed upon his neck...."
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks a lot empty page for dropping by and resonating with the message on child abuse. God bless.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written free verse poem about a very sad subject that happens every day to our children. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery with the picture. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it~ Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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This is a very well written free verse poem about a very sad subject that happens every day to our children. You used very good descriptive words and very good imagery with the picture. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it~ Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 07-May-2018
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Thanks a lot Teri7 for considering this piece a well written free verse. All the best.
Comment from Swampfox1
A very good poem it is and it touches the soul in a way and brings about thoughts of reality and that this actually exists in the real world, why I even went through some of it. It kind of slaps a person in the face with reality of what is important in the world. Thanks or sharing.
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A very good poem it is and it touches the soul in a way and brings about thoughts of reality and that this actually exists in the real world, why I even went through some of it. It kind of slaps a person in the face with reality of what is important in the world. Thanks or sharing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a profound and worthwhile topic to address and write a poem about. I loved that you weren't afraid to be raw and honest with how deep the pain goes for an abused child. Thank you for sharing this free verse!
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What a profound and worthwhile topic to address and write a poem about. I loved that you weren't afraid to be raw and honest with how deep the pain goes for an abused child. Thank you for sharing this free verse!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from johnwilson
This is deserving of a sixth star; however, my statement will have to do. This piece made me feel the pain, anguish, and total loss of hope. With your alliteration, and fine sense of wording, this poem stands tall! The last stanza tells the story! (The presentation--the painting of the girl is so perfect, as if you chose the picture first--your use of limited punctuation only serves to make the reading more intense. I would think this is publish-worthy.
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This is deserving of a sixth star; however, my statement will have to do. This piece made me feel the pain, anguish, and total loss of hope. With your alliteration, and fine sense of wording, this poem stands tall! The last stanza tells the story! (The presentation--the painting of the girl is so perfect, as if you chose the picture first--your use of limited punctuation only serves to make the reading more intense. I would think this is publish-worthy.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from estory
You have some vivid images in this poem of abuse, we see the child pulling the skin off of her hands, writhing in the pain of shame and defilement. And then in that last stanza, we see her forgotten. perhaps that's the biggest pain of all, to be erased from time, erased from memory, left alone in the silence and darkness. estory
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You have some vivid images in this poem of abuse, we see the child pulling the skin off of her hands, writhing in the pain of shame and defilement. And then in that last stanza, we see her forgotten. perhaps that's the biggest pain of all, to be erased from time, erased from memory, left alone in the silence and darkness. estory
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from ameen786
A strong verse phrased in hard-hitting, powerful verses that reflect a sad tragedy of child abuse, shame on mankind; nice alliteration and superb flow; thanks for sharing and highlighting upon this neglected matter.
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A strong verse phrased in hard-hitting, powerful verses that reflect a sad tragedy of child abuse, shame on mankind; nice alliteration and superb flow; thanks for sharing and highlighting upon this neglected matter.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, nassus, :)
Thank you, for writing this. :) It's beautiful and sad. Too many people 'don't want to get involved'. As a formerly abused child, I beg they do -- because it could be someone they love.
Take care,
Nome
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Hello, nassus, :)
Thank you, for writing this. :) It's beautiful and sad. Too many people 'don't want to get involved'. As a formerly abused child, I beg they do -- because it could be someone they love.
Take care,
Nome
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Susan,
Your free verse offering is incredibly moving and striking in its message and presentation. Child abuse is pure evil, and far too often society still does not want to recognize its existence as you so keenly write:
eventually,
history forgets
and memory fades
as time stops counting
the abused child's torture
in the devil's vile dungeon.
We are all doomed when society turns a blind eye...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
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Hello Susan,
Your free verse offering is incredibly moving and striking in its message and presentation. Child abuse is pure evil, and far too often society still does not want to recognize its existence as you so keenly write:
eventually,
history forgets
and memory fades
as time stops counting
the abused child's torture
in the devil's vile dungeon.
We are all doomed when society turns a blind eye...
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from robyn corum
N.,
I hate these images. They do make me cringe and wonder how - in a civilized society -- these things can still be happening. We just had a news report locally of a man and woman fighting near a car where their two yo daughter sat waiting in a car seat. At some point, the father, in his rage, threw a 2-pound dumb bell at the wife - but it missed, entered the car, struck the child and killed her instantly.
Where are these peoples' brains?
What I enjoyed especially about your poem - beyond the important message --
was the alliteration and consonance in the following lines:
--> flesh (d)ehydrates in (d)eflated (d)reams,
--> (b)rain atrophies in a(b)orted hopes,
--> in the (d)evil's vile (d)ungeon
as well as the assonance in 'devil' and 'vile'. Lovely work. Thanks!
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N.,
I hate these images. They do make me cringe and wonder how - in a civilized society -- these things can still be happening. We just had a news report locally of a man and woman fighting near a car where their two yo daughter sat waiting in a car seat. At some point, the father, in his rage, threw a 2-pound dumb bell at the wife - but it missed, entered the car, struck the child and killed her instantly.
Where are these peoples' brains?
What I enjoyed especially about your poem - beyond the important message --
was the alliteration and consonance in the following lines:
--> flesh (d)ehydrates in (d)eflated (d)reams,
--> (b)rain atrophies in a(b)orted hopes,
--> in the (d)evil's vile (d)ungeon
as well as the assonance in 'devil' and 'vile'. Lovely work. Thanks!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
