Perennials of War
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Comment from Sis Cat
This chapter recaps the beginning of your novel and describes Shana's mounting guilt over the danger and havock that her painting quest has wrought:
"I'm so sorry; I've brought all of this upon your family."
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"I just wanted to surprise Grandma by getting the painting back. I never imagined it would cause this much trouble.
As it has been a while since I have read an installment, I am also introduced to the new character of Anderson's younger brother Zachery.
Much of the themes continue as before but grow more complex with each challenge--culture, romance, tradition, danger.
This is an engaging, episodic read well told. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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This chapter recaps the beginning of your novel and describes Shana's mounting guilt over the danger and havock that her painting quest has wrought:
"I'm so sorry; I've brought all of this upon your family."
and
"I just wanted to surprise Grandma by getting the painting back. I never imagined it would cause this much trouble.
As it has been a while since I have read an installment, I am also introduced to the new character of Anderson's younger brother Zachery.
Much of the themes continue as before but grow more complex with each challenge--culture, romance, tradition, danger.
This is an engaging, episodic read well told. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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I have missed you. I hope you've just been busy and not any health issues. Thank you for the kind review.
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No health issues. Just figuring out where to go from here as a writer. I've published five poems online and in print so far this year and am vaction in Mexico to write more.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara
Your chapter flows well. I hadn't gotten the history of how this all started as I came quite late into this novel. I appreciated that.
I think the stinkin' Russians have met their match in the Anderson family :)
Well done!
Bev
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Hi, Barbara
Your chapter flows well. I hadn't gotten the history of how this all started as I came quite late into this novel. I appreciated that.
I think the stinkin' Russians have met their match in the Anderson family :)
Well done!
Bev
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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I sure hope so. Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from Swampfox1
This is very well written. It flows well, it holds the interest, and it reads so very well. I particularly like this line: " "I obviously made a good decision. God was in charge." I love that you mention God in this way. Great job, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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This is very well written. It flows well, it holds the interest, and it reads so very well. I particularly like this line: " "I obviously made a good decision. God was in charge." I love that you mention God in this way. Great job, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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you're welcome
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Barbara;
Don't apologize for the length of this chapter - it was chock full of information and it conveyed the whole saga of Shana and Drew's journey. I feel so bad for Shana - her nightmares sound horrific.
Well done and I look forward to more,
~patty~
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hi, Barbara;
Don't apologize for the length of this chapter - it was chock full of information and it conveyed the whole saga of Shana and Drew's journey. I feel so bad for Shana - her nightmares sound horrific.
Well done and I look forward to more,
~patty~
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from meeshu
I have been your story for some time and I find it to be a compelling read. I want to find that painting but I know I have to be patient. next segment about nightmares I'm guessing. well done, Barbara.......meeshu
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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I have been your story for some time and I find it to be a compelling read. I want to find that painting but I know I have to be patient. next segment about nightmares I'm guessing. well done, Barbara.......meeshu
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the continuation. So the question begs, as you wrote, Why is Kuznetsov so upset over this painting? Amidst all this you have mini crisis's like Shana's guilt and
the unusual relationship that continues down it's own unique path with Anderson.
Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed the continuation. So the question begs, as you wrote, Why is Kuznetsov so upset over this painting? Amidst all this you have mini crisis's like Shana's guilt and
the unusual relationship that continues down it's own unique path with Anderson.
Well done.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Zue65
I enjoyed reading this post as Shana is getting familiar with Drew's family, mom and dad and Zachery . I have a feeling Shana will eventually be at home in Drew's home in Texas. Thanks for sharing your novel. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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I enjoyed reading this post as Shana is getting familiar with Drew's family, mom and dad and Zachery . I have a feeling Shana will eventually be at home in Drew's home in Texas. Thanks for sharing your novel. Keep writing.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm sure the people who have put a 'hit' on Shana and Anderson, will find them. They usually do. I would hate to be in that situation, scared all the time. At the same time, I would rather be with Anderson if I was to find myself in that position, than with anyone else. He has 'friends' everywhere. Another excellent part, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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I'm sure the people who have put a 'hit' on Shana and Anderson, will find them. They usually do. I would hate to be in that situation, scared all the time. At the same time, I would rather be with Anderson if I was to find myself in that position, than with anyone else. He has 'friends' everywhere. Another excellent part, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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I think Anderson will be able to handle the problem, but there may be a few mistakes. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from apky
Neat write, Barbara. I thoroughly enjoyed this post and look forward to the next. I only have a little suggestion below to "strengthen" rather than to correct.
As tears streamed down her cheeks, she got up and left. ~ to underscore Shana's character - well-bred, traditionalist - you may want to do this:
As tears streamed down her cheeks, she got up with a choked "'scuse me" and left.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Neat write, Barbara. I thoroughly enjoyed this post and look forward to the next. I only have a little suggestion below to "strengthen" rather than to correct.
As tears streamed down her cheeks, she got up and left. ~ to underscore Shana's character - well-bred, traditionalist - you may want to do this:
As tears streamed down her cheeks, she got up with a choked "'scuse me" and left.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the help. I made the correction. You're correct it does work better.
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Gald I could assist in any way, Barbara.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, good additional chapter for your novel, and Shana had it particularly tough in this section. Whenever I read your story, I'm always impressed with your effortless dialogue, and that one thing is such a good strength to have as a writer. I noticed no errors, but you have probably got all those ironed out now with these reviews, thanks for sharing your story, Ana.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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Hello, good additional chapter for your novel, and Shana had it particularly tough in this section. Whenever I read your story, I'm always impressed with your effortless dialogue, and that one thing is such a good strength to have as a writer. I noticed no errors, but you have probably got all those ironed out now with these reviews, thanks for sharing your story, Ana.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
