On Waves of Deepest Blue...
Cinquain: Second place winner...47 total reviews
Comment from MissMerri
A beautiful work that deserved a ribbon in this contest.
Congratulations for placing second in the cinquain contest. I loved this poem.
I especially liked The phrase Memory's cherished nights, which is so original and creative.
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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A beautiful work that deserved a ribbon in this contest.
Congratulations for placing second in the cinquain contest. I loved this poem.
I especially liked The phrase Memory's cherished nights, which is so original and creative.
Comment Written 01-May-2018
reply by the author on 02-May-2018
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Oh my goodness, Friend!
I am so honored by your exceptional rating and complimentary review.
I truly enjoyed penning this piece.
Thank you for your kind words...
diane
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your creating a love poem in the form of a cinquain and paying due attention to a substantive title, which is often overlooked. Congratulations on having the ensemble so well recognized in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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I admired your creating a love poem in the form of a cinquain and paying due attention to a substantive title, which is often overlooked. Congratulations on having the ensemble so well recognized in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 30-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-May-2018
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Hello Joan,
I truly enjoyed penning this offering.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review...
diane
Comment from Rasmine
Aw! This is so romantic. I wish you all the luck with your romantic poem in the contest. It's perfect for the competition.
Have a great weekend, first, rest of week.
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Aw! This is so romantic. I wish you all the luck with your romantic poem in the contest. It's perfect for the competition.
Have a great weekend, first, rest of week.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from robyn corum
Diane,
I always enjoy your beautiful poetry, sweet girl. But I have to admit that in this particular case, I am a bit lost. My small brain isn't capable of wrapping around the whole picture.
I ADORE the ending -- 'when all life needed to make sense was us...'
but I don't get how it relates to the beginning. Why the writer would bother drifting in those old memories, when he/she seems to have all he/she needs NOW?
I'm sure it's just me, but I'm missing the most important part of the poem! And I'm sad about it. I've read many of the other reviews and no one else has mentioned what I'm seeing. I don't know if you'll even understand what I'm saying...
Since this is so subjective, I won't adjust the rating. Thanks!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Diane,
I always enjoy your beautiful poetry, sweet girl. But I have to admit that in this particular case, I am a bit lost. My small brain isn't capable of wrapping around the whole picture.
I ADORE the ending -- 'when all life needed to make sense was us...'
but I don't get how it relates to the beginning. Why the writer would bother drifting in those old memories, when he/she seems to have all he/she needs NOW?
I'm sure it's just me, but I'm missing the most important part of the poem! And I'm sad about it. I've read many of the other reviews and no one else has mentioned what I'm seeing. I don't know if you'll even understand what I'm saying...
Since this is so subjective, I won't adjust the rating. Thanks!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Hello Robyn,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
The narrator is remembering the past... "adrift (reminiscing before she falls asleep, perhaps) of cherished nights with the one she loved/loves...when all that was needed to make sense of life was the two of them...Perhaps there has been a rift in the relationship. Perhaps the loved one is deceased or gone from the narrator's life. But there is now a void as life no longer makes the same kind of sense than it did when all that was needed to do so "was us."
Hope this helps!
diane
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Very helpful. Thank you!
Comment from Joy Graham
This is lovely, Diane :) You are really taking fanstory by storm and winning lots of contests with your terrific poetry. You are flourishing here and blessing us with your excellence in writing. This cinquain is lovely. I can feel the mood and nod my head in agreement. you nailed it. Best wishes in this contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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This is lovely, Diane :) You are really taking fanstory by storm and winning lots of contests with your terrific poetry. You are flourishing here and blessing us with your excellence in writing. This cinquain is lovely. I can feel the mood and nod my head in agreement. you nailed it. Best wishes in this contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Hello Joy,
Thank you for your lovely comments and excellent rating and review.
If I hadn't been absent for so long, no one would even know I was here! There was a really long stretch where I didn't write much of anything due to my professional and family responsibilities. So to be unleashed, if you will, is just the most glorious feeling, and I am enjoying writing once again...
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from antonieta
Hi,
I enjoyed reading your poem. I liked the metaphor "adrift on waves deep..." and "the all life needed to make sense." I wish you good luck in the contest.
Antonieta
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Hi,
I enjoyed reading your poem. I liked the metaphor "adrift on waves deep..." and "the all life needed to make sense." I wish you good luck in the contest.
Antonieta
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from MelB
Beautiful artwork and Cinquain poem you've written, Diane. This definitely looks like a view where wonderful memories could be made between two people in love.
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Beautiful artwork and Cinquain poem you've written, Diane. This definitely looks like a view where wonderful memories could be made between two people in love.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
Comment from WalkerMan
These indeed are the kind of memories to be cherished. As life goes on, it gets more and more complex, and time for such moments dwindles. You capture the scene and feelings well here with relatively few words. I especially like:
"when all life needed to make sense / was us..."
Lovely, and aptly illustrated.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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These indeed are the kind of memories to be cherished. As life goes on, it gets more and more complex, and time for such moments dwindles. You capture the scene and feelings well here with relatively few words. I especially like:
"when all life needed to make sense / was us..."
Lovely, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2018
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Hello Friend,
I am so honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
This poem is very special to me...
Thank you again, Mike...
diane
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You are most welcome, Diane. I can understand how it would be. -- Mike
Comment from Violet WolfChild
So much emotion is so few words. Wonderful job Mrs. KT. The image you chose compliments this piece well. I found myself drifting on the waves of lost in a sea of emotion. Well done.
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So much emotion is so few words. Wonderful job Mrs. KT. The image you chose compliments this piece well. I found myself drifting on the waves of lost in a sea of emotion. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
Comment from mermaids
There is a light, dreamy feeling in your words. I can see myself sleeping upon the waves. Excellent poetic form that is vivid and appeals to the senses. Your poem takes the reader to another place.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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There is a light, dreamy feeling in your words. I can see myself sleeping upon the waves. Excellent poetic form that is vivid and appeals to the senses. Your poem takes the reader to another place.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Hello again!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
