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The Craven

feeling sort of Poe-ish

15 total reviews 
Comment from Pamusart
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This was a fun and smooth read. I am not familiar with Poe's "The Raven" so I can't compare what you wrote to it. If it is autobiographical (I don't), then your dad was not very nice. Thank you for sharing. Well done and entertaining

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
    no, this was strictly fun fiction - just a bit of silliness.
    thanks for reading.
    Katharine- pome lover
Comment from humpwhistle
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Silly is underrated these days. Poe-ish, indeed. And a bit more eerie, you ask me. Riboflavin salesman at my door? Quoth my baseball bat, "Nevermore!"
Great bit of fun. I pity the Avon lady who rings your bell! Or mine.

Peace, Lee



 Comment Written 18-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
    total fiction fun.
    thanks for reading. glad you enjoyed it - oh! muchas gracias for the six!
Comment from Elizabeth Joanne
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This was quite hilariously cute! I began to read, then my head began to ditty-bop as I read more and more! I think this is a great piece. Very unique and upbeat. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 18-Apr-2018
    and thank you for your neat comments.
    Katharine - pome lover
Comment from lyenochka
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Lol! Thanks for the giggles, Katharine! I think riboflavin is in most peoples' diet and probably in all the multivitamin pills. Good stuff - B-vitamins. But they shouldn't be offered over the phone! Love the way you wove in the solicitor, the memory of the health-conscious dad plus the writer's right to write!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 17-Apr-2018
    thank you! it's total fiction. just fun silliness.
Comment from karenina
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A fine humorous and clever parody of Poe' s The Raven with an uncanny knack for artfully mimicking the familiAr meter of a poem once voted "most memorized." Just perfect and if I had a six it would be yours!

Karenina

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
    thank you so much. I appreciate it.
Comment from Cmelton
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You really wrote a very nice and witty piece here. I like the internal rhyme scheme and the very nice wit. You did a beautiful job and I can't wait to read more. Keep on writing and I will keep on reading.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2018
    thank you. that's a lovely compliment.
Comment from Mark Valentine
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Anyone who takes on the task of matching the rhyme and meter of "the Raven" gets my respect. Add to that, some fantastic rhymes (riboflavin and New Haven a pretty original pair, as are import and wart), and you've got yourself a six!

Loved bouncing through this one on the sound alone, the pushing-back-against-the-health-food craze only added to my enjoyment. Brilliant!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
    Mark, you've made my day!
    Many thanks for your much appreciated review and the elusive 6!! I'm flattered and delighted that you liked this silliness.
    Katharine
Comment from Marvin Calloway
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I don't know how this could have been any better, but why should I know? You're the one with such amazing talent that Poe should be worried you're about to take his place. (Except for that nasty old grave business.)
Simply amazing. What ever prompted you to tackle this intriguing and difficult task? So glad I was notified.
Marv

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2018
    well that is the nicest thing I ever heard. thank you very much!
    The other night, for some unknown reason, the first line of Poe's poem was in my head and i thought it'd be fun to play around with it, and that's what ended up. just a bunch of silliness.
    thanks again and many thanks for the stars!!!
Comment from judiverse
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Oh, this is a delight. If only I had a 6 remaining, which I don't. The idea of your dad returning to you in the form of a salesman. You do a great job of connecting the call with memories of your father, who was a health nut. And he dares to criticize your choice of subjects to write about, as well. You do manage to give the salesman/father the brush-off. Love your Poe-like internal rhyme. You're consistent with the use and do a great job with it. You have so many things going in this, and you bring them all together admirably. Wonderful poem. judi

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
    thanks, Judi. It isn't MY father, just imaginary. Heaven forbid - my father was a doctor of the old school who believed that enemas cured everything!!!!
    I appreciate you great review.
    Katharine
reply by judiverse on 14-Apr-2018
    You're welcome. I take liberties myself when I'm writing. It just seems easier to say you than "narrator." Great work. judi
Comment from Supe
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What a fun read. I loved the fast flowing pace of your words from start to finish. I like the presentation. Silliness is good for the soul. Nice job.

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2018


reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
    thanks so much. appreciate it.