Dancing till dawn
Old age sucks11 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This six-line poem, Dancing till Dawn, uses forty-four words to dance the reader down a memory lane that is now to fast to pass in. It was fun though.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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This six-line poem, Dancing till Dawn, uses forty-four words to dance the reader down a memory lane that is now to fast to pass in. It was fun though.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2018
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Thanks Bill.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Yep writer there comes a time when you have to wind down to some of the wild things that you used to do that dancing you can moderate yourself in that but this other stuff dancing naked and all of that you grow up from that I would think. But to each his own conviction and if that's what you want to do on the line is dance naked then do your thing sometimes the mind has to catch up with the body because the mind can go with beyond what the body can do LOL
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Yep writer there comes a time when you have to wind down to some of the wild things that you used to do that dancing you can moderate yourself in that but this other stuff dancing naked and all of that you grow up from that I would think. But to each his own conviction and if that's what you want to do on the line is dance naked then do your thing sometimes the mind has to catch up with the body because the mind can go with beyond what the body can do LOL
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Many thanks for your comments
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My pleasure
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a good response to the writing prompt for a six-lined poem. This is a good topic and you did a great job describing everything in your 6 lines. A good entry! Good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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What a good response to the writing prompt for a six-lined poem. This is a good topic and you did a great job describing everything in your 6 lines. A good entry! Good luck.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Many thanks Cindy for your great review.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
The body keeps saying enough is enough. Boy it was fun while it lasted though wasn't it. The memories seem to have lost their glow though as I age. I could have used my time more wisely but I think I did in the second part of my life.
Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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The body keeps saying enough is enough. Boy it was fun while it lasted though wasn't it. The memories seem to have lost their glow though as I age. I could have used my time more wisely but I think I did in the second part of my life.
Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thank you Nancy for your comments.
Comment from sunnilicious
That poem came out fantastic. And I'm out of 6er's. So please forgive me. Good alliteration with B-D-S words. Good internal and external rhyming. Good flow from a varied assonance. Good repeat to end. Great visual imagery. Creative. Strong. Enjoyable to read. Exceptional work.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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That poem came out fantastic. And I'm out of 6er's. So please forgive me. Good alliteration with B-D-S words. Good internal and external rhyming. Good flow from a varied assonance. Good repeat to end. Great visual imagery. Creative. Strong. Enjoyable to read. Exceptional work.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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What a great review. I really appreciate it. Thank you Alicia.
Comment from GustavVaz
I felt a bit of energy reading the first 3 lines, but when I got to the last three, that energy turned to sadness to the realization of old age. Very well written.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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I felt a bit of energy reading the first 3 lines, but when I got to the last three, that energy turned to sadness to the realization of old age. Very well written.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much for your comments
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks simply what at old age a dancer says dancing till dawn, 'enough is enough'; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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This speaks simply what at old age a dancer says dancing till dawn, 'enough is enough'; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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Many thanks mate.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, I loved this write and it made me smile and I wish you luck with the contest, you can do all this, including the naked thing when you are young, but as you age, it is not a pretty sight! He he he, I am still laughing and I loved your great rhymes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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He he he, I loved this write and it made me smile and I wish you luck with the contest, you can do all this, including the naked thing when you are young, but as you age, it is not a pretty sight! He he he, I am still laughing and I loved your great rhymes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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Thanks a lot dolly for the super 6. So glad you liked it. I cam still do a lot for an old bird. Love J
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Six Line Poem writing prompt.
You tell us a sad truth. I too have those memories. Old memories.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Six Line Poem writing prompt.
You tell us a sad truth. I too have those memories. Old memories.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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Thanks Sharon
Comment from humpwhistle
I can relate. Almost.
Aging isn't pretty, but it's only as restrictive as you allow it to be.
We dance slower, we sag lower, we snore louder.
But we still make our own choices.
We don't have to say 'No more'. We can always say, 'Tomorrow'.
Peace, Lee
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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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I can relate. Almost.
Aging isn't pretty, but it's only as restrictive as you allow it to be.
We dance slower, we sag lower, we snore louder.
But we still make our own choices.
We don't have to say 'No more'. We can always say, 'Tomorrow'.
Peace, Lee
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2018
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I agree Lee, I can still do all those things just not quite as fast. Thanks for the comments. Have a nice night/day wherever you are.
