Comment from Spitfire

Exceptional

Wow! I didn't realize it was genetic. Your poem about your dad sounded much like what I would say about mine. I never thought of him as an alcoholic because he had self-discipline and had a good reputation as a teacher. But come summertime and away from the city, he drank beer, two six-pack away. He would get all gooey-sentimental, and I hated that. He abused my mother emotionally (I learned after his death). But he's the only one in our family line that really relished the taste.

Many fine images in this:

I was that person with a toothache who subconsciously trains his tongue to go where the pain is. I spent the entire trip pushing the replay button.

how many members were wrapped up in its tentacles

six-hour drive had been peppered with bits and pieces of her own rehab experience

Great choice of verbs. I felt your sorrow, discomfort, and fear.

Reread your post on the new FS site. The Classic shows this line in the poem:This family-man fa�?�§ade;

Also the last three lines are disconnected. But maybe that's what you intended.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Thanks for the great review, Shari. Can't access classic from my phone. Will check it out later. Never go to classic. Think I wll just be posting random excepts from book as I think some of the poetry may have already appeared on Fanstory.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

This is a wonderful chapter, well written (one little slip:
A quick prayer couldn't't hurt.
Otherwise, well written, well said. And oh so painfully true.
I look forward to reading the next part.
Sharon

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018

Thanks for following. The last capter is out there. It is called The Unveiling. I eill try and post a chapter once a week.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

At least your family has found a solution to the problem. So many just continue on with the destructive cycle.
Words of wisdom here, Dallas. I saw nothing that
needed attention in the essay. Good Job. Happy Easter. Nancy

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018

Thanks, Nancy. Appreciate the kind review

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written chapter. Not everyone are lucky to have support from for family and friends and go through their struggles alone with no hope of recovery.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018

Thanks for reviewing. You are so right. It is an important part of recovery.

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Your sister sounds like the family savior. I do believe that addiction can be an inherited trait like cancer and other illnesses. So far, the cancer bug has not bitten my family. My dad did get prostrate cancer around age 68. But caught early, he recovered. I feel so badly for in laws and friends whose families have the cancer gene. My brother in law died of liver cancer. He lost parents, siblings, nephews, nieces, uncles and aunts to cancer. So sad. But, your sister is a rock. She even paid for the treatment. How nice! Bless you. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

It runs rampant in our family too. We have a double whammy. Thanks for reviewing

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

This is a poignant story about your family and your own personal history. I especially liked the phrase ... "I felt like I was flailing around in a festering pool of toxic sadness without any floaters". I know it's a sad subject, but what a vibrant, colorful description you gave us with those words. Well done.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018

Thank you for the great review. Will be trying to post a chapter once a week

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

Pur Alma Mater was better than a "Baked Potater!"
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks and have a Blessed Easter!
Dr Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018

Thanks for the detailed review.

Comment from Swampfox1

Excellent

Addiction is a very bad thing and affects many people in this world and we either know of or we are tied to someone who is addicted, if not addicted ourselves sometimes. I was once addicted to cigarettes. I did some research, actually wrote a research paper while at the university , based on addiction. One thing that I found in a scholarly article is that sometimes the drug picks the person rather than the other way around. I did not find any errors in your story. Great job. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018

Thank you for the great review and the interesting bit of info re addiction choosing the victim.

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

America's (and of course the rest of the world's) heartbreak... people falling helplessly into a disease that is insidious...My heart is with each and every one of us either side of the fence. Great read. yours, diana

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018

Thank you for the kind review
We need more education about it and at a younger age, before it becomes a problem

Comment from Janilou

Excellent

If I were a betting person, I would say that odds are you would not have made it. I am so thrilled to hear you did though. I have a son struggling with addiction right now, and it is heartbreaking.
Thank you for this open and honest portrayal of the struggles and the pain.
I didn't see anything in your piece that needed editing or correcting.
All the best,
Jan

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018

Stay tuned. Will try to post a chapter once weekly. As long as one is breathing there is always hope. Sending up a prayer gor your son.

reply by Janilou on 06-Apr-2018

reply by Janilou on 06-Apr-2018

Thank you. Much appreciated.
Jan