Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Such a clever 1-6-1 with an adorable picture! Great rhymes of spied-side-hide. And a wonderful description of what the little frog was doing underside the flower. Congratulations!

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Thanks so much. I appreciate your comments!!

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This 1-6-1, Hide, uses the allowed syllables and required rhyme to show us one of the many surprises that await the perceptive seeker.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018

Thank you!!

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Excellent

Perfect response to the photo of the frog hiding beneath the flower. Seems nature can offer us a thousand inspirations each day. What a fun 1-6-1 poem you have written.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018

Thanks so much. Thanks so

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

There's the one, the six and the one and they rhyme, and taken with the art, it makes sense. Should be a valid entry for that contest prompt.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018

Thanks s much!

reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018

Thanks s much!

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

This is whimsical and clever. I love the picture - speaks volumes! The poem is a perfect pairing with it. Did you find the picture first? Fine rhymes. Good flow. A great entry, with no nits, but I do have suggestions (optional) that I feel would improve it.

1) don't cap line two, since it continues the sentence from line one:

Spied
down on the underside
Hide

2)

Consider using punctuation to sculpt dramatic pause effect further:


Spied
down on the underside.
Hide.

Or, parenthesis could also work with a subtler pause effect:

Spied
down on the underside.
(Hide!)

Just a thought.

You captured the poor frog's POV well~

Good luck!


Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018

Thanks so much!, I love your suggestions.

reply by rama devi on 28-Mar-2018

So glad you love the suggestions! :-)))

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks the special type of frog knows how to hide under or at the flower plant; a fun to watch over; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us, wish you good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING -DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018

Thanks so much for your comments and encouragement.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Such a cute picture, a frog under a flower umbrella! Fabulous. Your words could double for other scenes too, very clever write, best of luck love Dolly x

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018

Thanks so much, Dolly. I appreciate your comments.

Comment from Artasylum

Excellent

Love it you made me laugh... thanks for that. great imagery and love the compact and funny read. perfect. thanks so much for your inspiring economical read. yours, diana

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018

Thanks. I appreciate your comments and taking the time to review.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

This is a good entry for the 1-6-1 Poem writing prompt.
Your short verse is nicely matched by the picture.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018

Thanks so much.

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Nice, it is hard to really judge or review such a short piece, but I believe you done well on this. good luck and have a great day

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018

Thanks you for your review.