Free Verse Collection
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Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I loved the photo and the story that you shared about the reasoning behind it. "Calcified remains on which to build" was a standout line. I enjoyed reading this so much. Do you have a follow-up to this story?
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I loved the photo and the story that you shared about the reasoning behind it. "Calcified remains on which to build" was a standout line. I enjoyed reading this so much. Do you have a follow-up to this story?
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Cindy. Thank you for picking out the line you found most compelling. No, there's no follow up to the story. It is generic, rather than specific. I wrote it shortly after a devastating bushfire in a small coastal community in New South Wales last week that swept through the township destroying 70 homes. All the best, Tony
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Awesome job and great pic to accompany. The look in her eye and your words mesh in such a profound way. Great job with the whole overall poem and format. Good Luck!
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Awesome job and great pic to accompany. The look in her eye and your words mesh in such a profound way. Great job with the whole overall poem and format. Good Luck!
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Wendy. I appreciate your kind words and good luck wishes. All the best, Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
-just out of curiosity is there woman you know, that is like this? Why I am asking, is because you describe it so vehemently.
-You described a woman that is very strong both physically and mentally. Anyone who appeared much in her life even scrape the bottom to rebuild her soul, "a melted pot, and bones; calcified remains on which to build the framework of a life again."
-Quote on physical and mental drive is so strong, as you even stated in your second verse, "She gripped her spade, and then began to dig; such strength as this our women have."
-On a second opinion of understanding of your poem I realized the following;
-After reading it many times there is a woman who actually lost everything and now is rummaging through her ashes of her home with a spade looking for some valuables.
-Much more looking at it this way makes more sense.
-Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alice
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Cheers, Tony;
-just out of curiosity is there woman you know, that is like this? Why I am asking, is because you describe it so vehemently.
-You described a woman that is very strong both physically and mentally. Anyone who appeared much in her life even scrape the bottom to rebuild her soul, "a melted pot, and bones; calcified remains on which to build the framework of a life again."
-Quote on physical and mental drive is so strong, as you even stated in your second verse, "She gripped her spade, and then began to dig; such strength as this our women have."
-On a second opinion of understanding of your poem I realized the following;
-After reading it many times there is a woman who actually lost everything and now is rummaging through her ashes of her home with a spade looking for some valuables.
-Much more looking at it this way makes more sense.
-Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alice
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the six stars, Alex. No, I didn't actually know this woman. The poem was inspired by a TV interview with survivors of a recent bushfire in New South Wales that swept through a small coastal township destroying 70 homes.
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That something special knowing a woman who is been Involved with a brushfire. She must've been shaken, intensely. Take care and hope everything there is much better as a guess it's end of summer or August there now, is in it?
Take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment from karenina
Super impactful poem. There comes a time in life...regardless of age but all the more impressive with those who have lived through more than their fair share of disappointments....when damn it all, they will not be defeated.....no mater the power of nature's fury they have the will and fury to defend their turf! So love this!
Karenina
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Super impactful poem. There comes a time in life...regardless of age but all the more impressive with those who have lived through more than their fair share of disappointments....when damn it all, they will not be defeated.....no mater the power of nature's fury they have the will and fury to defend their turf! So love this!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Karenina. As always, I appreciate your review and comments. All the best, Tony
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Good...we're even ...for I appreciate your poems!
Karenina
Comment from strandregs
Very dramatic Tony
Before I read your expla,
I thought it was a description of a woman who has reached the end of her life.
and is digging her own grave.
very well done.
try reading it without the knowledge that her house burnt down,
you will see it is a description of her.
confounding... Is that ther right word?
:-))Z.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Very dramatic Tony
Before I read your expla,
I thought it was a description of a woman who has reached the end of her life.
and is digging her own grave.
very well done.
try reading it without the knowledge that her house burnt down,
you will see it is a description of her.
confounding... Is that ther right word?
:-))Z.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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You are right - there could certainly be more than one interpretation here.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. When life gives us a blow to force us to our knees. We have to stand up and building again if we still have life left to do so.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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A very well-written poem. When life gives us a blow to force us to our knees. We have to stand up and building again if we still have life left to do so.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Very true. Thanks for the review, Sandra.
Comment from Swampfox1
I love this poem. I can just imagine the annealed face. Many old women are like that after going through life's battles. Yep, calcified remains on which to build. Great job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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I love this poem. I can just imagine the annealed face. Many old women are like that after going through life's battles. Yep, calcified remains on which to build. Great job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Many thanks, Swampfox. I appreciate your review and comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
The resilience required of a survivor of some major catastrophe in which so much is lost is almost beyond comprehension, and yet so many are forced to go through it, some on many occasions. Fire, flood, the deprivation of war, whatever the cause the result is all important.
"To stoop and build 'em up with worn out out tools" wrote Kipling. the physical labour is one thing, the mental toughness to cope with that while traumatised by loss is something else again. This short poem brings it all together.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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The resilience required of a survivor of some major catastrophe in which so much is lost is almost beyond comprehension, and yet so many are forced to go through it, some on many occasions. Fire, flood, the deprivation of war, whatever the cause the result is all important.
"To stoop and build 'em up with worn out out tools" wrote Kipling. the physical labour is one thing, the mental toughness to cope with that while traumatised by loss is something else again. This short poem brings it all together.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the six stars, Jim. The poem was inspired by a TV interview with survivors of a recent bushfire in New South Wales that swept through a small coastal township destroying 70 homes.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A good poem Tony, inspired by the bush fires of March 2018. When I see it on TV, I marvel how people buckle down and get on with life afterwards, even though some have lost everything. 'I saw her face, annealed by fire,' - a good line. That word 'anneal' - so appropriate in this context. 'and ash concealing just the twisted knife' - good use of metaphor. Well written poem - regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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A good poem Tony, inspired by the bush fires of March 2018. When I see it on TV, I marvel how people buckle down and get on with life afterwards, even though some have lost everything. 'I saw her face, annealed by fire,' - a good line. That word 'anneal' - so appropriate in this context. 'and ash concealing just the twisted knife' - good use of metaphor. Well written poem - regards Dorothy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the review, Dorothy. The poem was inspired by a TV interview with survivors of a recent bushfire in New South Wales that swept through a small coastal township destroying 70 homes.
Comment from Halfree
Had some probs. with this poem. Took me a day and three reading to come to a conclusion. When I read the second verse first and then the others, the poem was better, stronger ... the poem had a voice.
Hope this makes some sense, I do enjoy your poems... think you have a gift.
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Had some probs. with this poem. Took me a day and three reading to come to a conclusion. When I read the second verse first and then the others, the poem was better, stronger ... the poem had a voice.
Hope this makes some sense, I do enjoy your poems... think you have a gift.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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That's an interesting suggestion. I put the two versions side by side on a piece of paper for comparison. You may be right. I've post the amended version on site for the remainder of its promotional period and will be interested to see the response to it. Thanks very much for your input. Best wishes, Tony
