Hungover
Just another day at the office21 total reviews
Comment from Mark Valentine
Great twist at the end which sheds a new light on everything that came before. The wine, women, and song lifestyle seems fun, unless your life gets cut short and you never get to enjoy the more real stuff of life. Well constructed -good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Great twist at the end which sheds a new light on everything that came before. The wine, women, and song lifestyle seems fun, unless your life gets cut short and you never get to enjoy the more real stuff of life. Well constructed -good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks Mark for your comments. It won the contest.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is excellent. Congratulations for winning the contest. Brings us back to the moment of that astounding and horrible event that transfixed the nation. It woke everyone up--we are vulnerable. Marilyn
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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This is excellent. Congratulations for winning the contest. Brings us back to the moment of that astounding and horrible event that transfixed the nation. It woke everyone up--we are vulnerable. Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks Marilyn for your comments. Love Jen.
Comment from Sherman541
WOW! Great Story!! So hard to get a really good story in 100 words, but you did it. I like the way you brought us in to the office with a hangover and then Poof! One of the biggest tragedies of the US. Sherman541
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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WOW! Great Story!! So hard to get a really good story in 100 words, but you did it. I like the way you brought us in to the office with a hangover and then Poof! One of the biggest tragedies of the US. Sherman541
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for your great review.
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you are most welcome :)
Comment from sandragee
It's an ordinary day for the character as he complains about the small things in life, not knowing that the day will go into the history books. Great ending. The last line is a shocker.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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It's an ordinary day for the character as he complains about the small things in life, not knowing that the day will go into the history books. Great ending. The last line is a shocker.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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So glad you liked it. Thanks.
Comment from Swampfox1
An excellent entry into the 100 word contest. You have a very good chance at this, I wish you luck. What a day to have a hangover. great job.Thanks for the share.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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An excellent entry into the 100 word contest. You have a very good chance at this, I wish you luck. What a day to have a hangover. great job.Thanks for the share.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for your comments.I'm glad you enjoyed it.. it won the contest. Love Jen.
Comment from Sugarray77
Congratulations for your win with this excellent short story. You definitely deserved it. I applaud your choice of theme and how you developed it without explaining all of the different pieces of background that go with this famous story. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Congratulations for your win with this excellent short story. You definitely deserved it. I applaud your choice of theme and how you developed it without explaining all of the different pieces of background that go with this famous story. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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I love your review. Thanks so much. Jen
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Mystery writer: I like your use of verbs with
"Banging, shouting, screaming, must be dreaming.
It's very hot, air conditioning must be broken."
I think now you know that it was 911 - twin towers
fell. Great entry. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Mystery writer: I like your use of verbs with
"Banging, shouting, screaming, must be dreaming.
It's very hot, air conditioning must be broken."
I think now you know that it was 911 - twin towers
fell. Great entry. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 26-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from emptypage
Interesting idea of someone's possible last day. Believable, real. I dislike the character/narrator. He sounds like a pig.
It's strange... I've watched three documentaries on September 11, 2001 in the last week. I have no obsession with the date, but it seems I'm finding it everywhere.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Interesting idea of someone's possible last day. Believable, real. I dislike the character/narrator. He sounds like a pig.
It's strange... I've watched three documentaries on September 11, 2001 in the last week. I have no obsession with the date, but it seems I'm finding it everywhere.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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That is quite weird as it was 17 years ago. Thanks a lot for reviewing.
Comment from frogbook
A jarring ending you have here. Well done. Great 100 word story, no doubt the winner I would say. The casual way it started made the end all the more shocking.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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A jarring ending you have here. Well done. Great 100 word story, no doubt the winner I would say. The casual way it started made the end all the more shocking.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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I appreciate the great review. Thank you.
Comment from kathleenspalding
Whoa! What a twist! Excellent story told in very few words is perfect for the prompt. Only one typo-
for ten minutes, [[meetings - meeting's]] not till
That's it. Great job!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Whoa! What a twist! Excellent story told in very few words is perfect for the prompt. Only one typo-
for ten minutes, [[meetings - meeting's]] not till
That's it. Great job!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for the stars and the great review..
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You're welcome :-)
