Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

I really enjoyed this part, Rhonda. Sorry I missed the previous two posts; it would have helped me understand this a bit better. I love Greek Mythology, so this is right up my alley.

Looking forward to more,
Russell

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018

Thank you, Russell. I'm glad you jumped back in. I always appreciate your point of view.
I'm glad you like Greek Mythology. I'm afraid I'm taking a few liberties with their legends, but hey, I do that anyway.

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from Pam (respa)

Exceptional

-This is quite a story, Rhonda.
-It held my attention
the whole way through.
-It certainly had a lot of suspense
as to why Nara was taken, and
why she wouldn't be safe with
the triplets, but safer with Thanatos.
-It seems ironic that since he is the god
of death, she would be better off with him.
-Also interesting is his telling Nara she
will understand when she remembers things.
-Now, I want to find out what is next, my friend!


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 Comment Written 16-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018

Thank you so much for the stars and comments, Pam.
Actually, Nara is safer with the triplets, but Death has his own agenda, and sort of sees things through his own distortions (occupational hazard).
I'm glad it held your interest. I have more fun once I get to the real fantasy part. The rest was just setting the scene and character development. I need to learn to blend them more.

Thanks again, my friend,
Rhonda

reply by Pam (respa) on 17-Mar-2018

You are very welcome for the stars and review, Rhonda. I was wondering about Thanatos, but he seemed pretty believable, but the triplets seemed nothing but kind. So I guess the plan now
will be to get Nara back somehow.

Comment from rspoet

Exceptional

Hello Rhonda,
Aught oh, Mr. Death himself.
Hopefully, Nara doesn't turn out to be a Persephone,
doomed to spend six months with Death (albeit Hades) and six on earth.
She better not eat anything in the underworld.
But then, Thanatos is associated with natural death, and is seemingly gentle
as you have portrayed him here, in his crimson robes.
Now what did the brothers three do to incur the wrath of Thanatos?
This is an excellent chapter, a bit calmer than the last one,
if going underground with Than can be described as calm.
Very well written with convincing dialogue.
I don't know if stars shine underground,
but here are six for Nara to calm her nerves.
Robert

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018

Awww, Nara says thank you. She'll need the stars where she's going, that's for sure.
You're right on Thanatos and natural death. He's a bad-guy, but he has his merits.
You'll see the argument between the brother sets. It's sort of across time sort of thing.
I will tell Nara to fast. haha.

Thanks for the comments and stars,
Rhonda

Comment from mbroyles2

Exceptional

So Nara appears to be more than she started out being and she doesn't know it.
Now I know what a manticore is and things are starting to get clearer.
I even wonder if the greek names the Hanks, Harry, Henry. are using are in fact their real names.
Only time will tell.
Great storytelling.
Michael

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018

Thank you for the wonderful six stars, Michael.
Nara is going to get pretty curious about all the to do, but she's got some disbelief first.
Thank you for the review. I helps fuel the next chapters.

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Good premise for your story. I think the picture so suits the work. I felt like it might turn ugly if she told them no one was coming for her. This was a good read. Descriptive and entertaining. I have no suggestions for improvement and thanks for sharing your story. Ana.

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018

Thank you for the wonderful review, Ana.
She was a bit afraid he would hurt her, too, but he knows they will come.

I appreciate you stopping by to review. I hope you can do so again,
Rhonda

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Intriguing that Thanatos (Death) speaks so gently. And why is he after the triplets? Cool landing and the appearance of the stone staircase.

"out in ernest confirmation." (Earnest)

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018

Hi, thanks for dropping by to read. Thanatos has his reasons for both being nice and wanting the triplets, which will become more evident later.

Thanks for finding the mistake.

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is well written and interesting. I was able to follow along well. I'm glad Lightning made it safely to the trees although injured. Thanatos snatches Nara and takes her on a ride to his home in the earth. We don't know yet what he looks like. It seems Nara is valuable to somebody, but she doesn't know why. Marilyn

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018

Thank you, Marilyn. Yes, she has value, though low self-esteem. She will learn her own inner strength.
Thanatos is a bad-obviously, but has his charms (don't the all).

I'm glad you were able to follow it well, and I'm ever so glad you read!

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

So Than lives underground... like the Devil! Is there a connecttion? Hope not. I don't want Nara mixed up with Satan. She does not yet realize that these gods' names don't refer to myths, but to the actual gods. I would think flying pegasus horses would have given her a clue! LOL! :)

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018

Yeah, Nara is having some denial issues. Satan he's not, and that will be made clear later. He is, however, not quite the good-guy he may think he is.

Thanks for reading, and keeping an open mind.

Take care,
Rhonda

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 13-Mar-2018

Darn it! The software turned my two spaces into one space, auto-correcting. Grrr....

But you can see it in your post. The spaces between sentences look wide and white. Just hit the space ONCE before typing the next sentence. Do you understand what I mean?

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 13-Mar-2018

Rhonda, ignore that last reply. It was not meant for you but for another writer. I used the wrong box. Sorry.

Comment from emptypage

Excellent

Oh, wow...again, another unexpected turn. I love it. I knew Thanatos as soon as you mentioned his name (my fear of death--thanatophobia--made certain of that).

Nara is strong and bold. All women should be.

Great chapter.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018

That's funny, but I have the same phobia, or at least did when I was younger. I used to have a real problem with it.
He was my best shot at a bad-guy.

Thanks for the review, my friend!
Rhonda

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I love the way you weave your fascinating characters into your stories, the mythical horses, gods, and allsittingnso comfortably in your plot. Nara has been kidnapped, (although Thanatos describes it almost like an invitation) apparently he wants to lure "the three" to come to him. Loving this story, a little different from, but still with the intriguing mythological characters, well done Rhonda, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018

Thank you, Roy. I like to mix the unusual with the usual. Nara isn't going to bring that up, too. It lets me have a little fun with Greek history/mythology.

Thanks for the review.
Rhobda

reply by royowen on 13-Mar-2018

Welł done Rhonda