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Penitence

A Naani

15 total reviews 
Comment from Bill Schott
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This naani, Penitence, uses twenty-three syllables in these four lines to create an internal dilemma. Got some thunder down under but no rain for the pain.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2018
    Hello Bill, I appreciate your time and the wonderful/thoughtful review; thank you very much and enjoy the weekend my friend.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello ameen
It looks like Clouds of remorse (Guilt)
reverberate deep within
as Autumn approaches,
accepting impermanence. The season of autumn symbolizes the time of self reflection
Hoping that ones soul
be relived of guilt
Gert

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2018

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    Hi Gert, I appreciate your visit and thank you very much for a wonderful review; take care my friend.
reply by Gert sherwood on 16-Mar-2018
    You are so welcome ameen
    Gert
Comment from N. Rabwar
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I like your imagery, "clouds of remorse". The poem packs a punch. Is your soul unquenched because you haven't forgiven yourself or because you have not processed what happened? You do not have to answer this question. It is simply a question your poem raises.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2018

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    Hello Rabwar, I appreciate your visit and am pleased that you like the write; thank you very much.
Comment from BeasPeas
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It seems to be human nature to carry guilt around with us. Unfortunately we can't do anything about it, so eventually we have no choice but to let it go. A thoughtful piece. Marilyn

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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    Hello my friend, I appreciate your visit and the thoughtful comments; thank you very much.
Comment from LIJ Red
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Unquenched, not satisfied, hounded by remorse as Autumn's chills come on, a message that I would suspect is the idea of the Naani form. Excellent.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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    Hello my friend, I appreciate your visit and am pleased to read your wonderful review; thank you very much.
Comment from Debbie Pope
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This is a powerful Naani poem. You say so much in those four lines. My bet is on your poem to win. I think that it is a perfect entry. The image adds so much to your carefully chosen words. Good luck.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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    Hello Debbie; my friend I appreciate your visit and am glad that you like the write; thank you very much.
Comment from jppoet
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This is an excellent NAANI poem which perfectly fits the requirement of that difficult scheme of 4 lines and 20 to 29 syllables. Wish you success in that contest. john

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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    Hello my friend, I appreciate your visit and am pleased to read your wonderful review; thank you very much.
Comment from Sherman541
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Guilt is a very heavy burden to carry and unload, often the remains take almost as long to unload, as the guilt itself. I think this is a fantastic picture for the visual. Very nice statement! Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2018

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    Hello Sherman, I appreciate your time and the thoughtful insights; thank you very much.
reply by Sherman541 on 13-Mar-2018
    You are very welcome ;)
Comment from Pamusart
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This is a good entry for this contest. I am seeing some pretty good poetry for this contest. Thirsty souls are not happy ones. Good luck in the contest. Haunting. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2018

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    Hello Pamusart, I appreciate your visit and the insights; thank you very much.
Comment from victor 66
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Yes, Autumn is definitely beautiful but "it is the calm before the storm". Depending what state you're from, the snow and cold can wear you down and I can feel "my soul remains un-quenched." Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
    Hello victor, I appreciate your time and the kind review; thank you very much.