The dead letter
Saying farewell forever11 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Dead Letter, has a lot of images, but I can't pin them to a theme. There's a letter to Santa as the image (let's say it's supposed to just be a letter from a girl). Then there's doing stuff, becoming things, and differing comparisons. The sense of loss is introduced in your tag note, so I will somehow see these others as a good and vital thing becoming something less. Heather to heath, hill-top to something below that. I will find something as I read it some more.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
This poem, The Dead Letter, has a lot of images, but I can't pin them to a theme. There's a letter to Santa as the image (let's say it's supposed to just be a letter from a girl). Then there's doing stuff, becoming things, and differing comparisons. The sense of loss is introduced in your tag note, so I will somehow see these others as a good and vital thing becoming something less. Heather to heath, hill-top to something below that. I will find something as I read it some more.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you for read and thoughts.Thank you
Comment from Harry Smith
The picture selection was excellent for this beautiful poem that is very well written and with a lots of meaning. The reader really enjoyed the read and will be coming back to read more of the poets work.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
The picture selection was excellent for this beautiful poem that is very well written and with a lots of meaning. The reader really enjoyed the read and will be coming back to read more of the poets work.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reading and your gracious remarks. It is my pleasure to bring you enjoyment.Thank you
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Everything seemed just right until we find out your bonny maid is not there but has left her forwarding address. The picture is a very suitable choice for the poem, and the only thing I did noticed was one word that I've never heard of before, circumferentially. I must look it up. Thank you. Ana.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
Everything seemed just right until we find out your bonny maid is not there but has left her forwarding address. The picture is a very suitable choice for the poem, and the only thing I did noticed was one word that I've never heard of before, circumferentially. I must look it up. Thank you. Ana.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much indeed.
Comment from Sugarray77
THis is a complicated read and you have done a good job with this presentation. Your depth and balance was good and supported your theme. Well done.
THis is a complicated read and you have done a good job with this presentation. Your depth and balance was good and supported your theme. Well done.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
Comment from His Grayness
Quite rare and unique in subject matter, but very well delivered indeed! The artwork presents the work brightly and with great coloration and sets the stage very well for the delivery of the poetry, which is also beautifully delivered in all ways. I cannot offer any suggestion to improve this work and thank this author for a really delightful work! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Quite rare and unique in subject matter, but very well delivered indeed! The artwork presents the work brightly and with great coloration and sets the stage very well for the delivery of the poetry, which is also beautifully delivered in all ways. I cannot offer any suggestion to improve this work and thank this author for a really delightful work! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
Comment from Sherman541
Rose hip is the fruit of the rose, I did not know this until my rose bush produced them. This reminds me of a "Dear John" letter, though not quite the same. I would say, in leaving a forwarding address, she must have hoped you will either, send a letter or follow her, to her new place of rest. Sherman541
Rose hip is the fruit of the rose, I did not know this until my rose bush produced them. This reminds me of a "Dear John" letter, though not quite the same. I would say, in leaving a forwarding address, she must have hoped you will either, send a letter or follow her, to her new place of rest. Sherman541
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
Comment from royowen
This is a lovely lighthearted, articulate offering, a sort of related imagery in delicate literary alignment, to project the sensual effect of the language on human senses, beautifully written in expressive language, well done, good job, blessings, Roy
Typo : of a summer(')s love.
This is a lovely lighthearted, articulate offering, a sort of related imagery in delicate literary alignment, to project the sensual effect of the language on human senses, beautifully written in expressive language, well done, good job, blessings, Roy
Typo : of a summer(')s love.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
Comment from Henry King
This is an excellent verse. The oral rhythm is there except when saying the word circumferentially. The internal rhyme is good. The turn in the last verse would have been better, if the bonnie lass didn't leave a forwarding address.
This is an excellent verse. The oral rhythm is there except when saying the word circumferentially. The internal rhyme is good. The turn in the last verse would have been better, if the bonnie lass didn't leave a forwarding address.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
Comment from jlsavell
Sergeant Floyd,
So she did not leave a forwarding address or it was false? Your poem takes us on a philosophical path of right conditions. Excellent write and the ending quite a surprise..
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Sergeant Floyd,
So she did not leave a forwarding address or it was false? Your poem takes us on a philosophical path of right conditions. Excellent write and the ending quite a surprise..
jlsavell
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
Comment from Sis Cat
A fine poem about a final farewell reminds me of Elvis' song "Return to Sender." What is more devastating in your poem is that
my bonny maid
left a forwarding address.
But she still will not open and reply to her ex lover's letter. This action lends the end of the romance a finality.
You poem is earthy, as if it emerged from the soil itself. The poem follows not only the seasons, but geologic time as rocks become sand and ferns combust as coal. Everything in this garden grows except love. It is at a standstill.
Your middle stanza is my favorite because of your rich, earthy language, but the anaphora (repetition) of beginning words in your final stanza sets up a final farewell and the realization that the two lovers will never love and meet again.
A fine poem. The only suggestion is to add the possessive apostrophe to
dandelion's
summer's
I love the directness of your poem and the way your words roll off of my tongue. Your slant rhymes of rose, snow, coal, and grow are musical. You tell a story and you deliver, although the postal carrier did not deliver the man's letter.
Thank you for sharing, for entertaining, and inspiring.
A fine poem about a final farewell reminds me of Elvis' song "Return to Sender." What is more devastating in your poem is that
my bonny maid
left a forwarding address.
But she still will not open and reply to her ex lover's letter. This action lends the end of the romance a finality.
You poem is earthy, as if it emerged from the soil itself. The poem follows not only the seasons, but geologic time as rocks become sand and ferns combust as coal. Everything in this garden grows except love. It is at a standstill.
Your middle stanza is my favorite because of your rich, earthy language, but the anaphora (repetition) of beginning words in your final stanza sets up a final farewell and the realization that the two lovers will never love and meet again.
A fine poem. The only suggestion is to add the possessive apostrophe to
dandelion's
summer's
I love the directness of your poem and the way your words roll off of my tongue. Your slant rhymes of rose, snow, coal, and grow are musical. You tell a story and you deliver, although the postal carrier did not deliver the man's letter.
Thank you for sharing, for entertaining, and inspiring.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018