haiku (icicles burden)
a contest entry11 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your enchanting use of personification. You captured the mood and the freezing cold of the scene, and your use of alliteration intensified the sensation. Best wishes in the 5-7-5 competition with this splendid post. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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I enjoyed your enchanting use of personification. You captured the mood and the freezing cold of the scene, and your use of alliteration intensified the sensation. Best wishes in the 5-7-5 competition with this splendid post. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Joan my friend, I thank you for the wonderful, thoughtful comments; please have a wonderful weekend my friend, God bless.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the '5-7-5 Poetry' writing prompt.
Your short verse tells of icicles in the trees very clearly.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the '5-7-5 Poetry' writing prompt.
Your short verse tells of icicles in the trees very clearly.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Hello Sharon, very kind of you to stop by; I appreciate your time and the wonderful review; thank you very much my friend.
Comment from Joy Graham
This is a dainty little haiku :) I like it. You describe the scene and have a cute aha moment. I like the image of a mother tree and baby branch. Yes, she would cry in the winter if her baby branch was hurt or frozen. Very clever. Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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This is a dainty little haiku :) I like it. You describe the scene and have a cute aha moment. I like the image of a mother tree and baby branch. Yes, she would cry in the winter if her baby branch was hurt or frozen. Very clever. Best wishes in the contest.
Joy xx
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Hello Joy, I am pleased that you like the haiku; appreciate your time and the encouraging review; thank you very much.
Comment from rama devi
What imaginative personification, Ameenji! Love it. Excellent form, word economy and alliteraiton. Perfect satori. Love the dual-metaphor. Bravo.
Wish I had a six!
Fine presentation too.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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What imaginative personification, Ameenji! Love it. Excellent form, word economy and alliteraiton. Perfect satori. Love the dual-metaphor. Bravo.
Wish I had a six!
Fine presentation too.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Deviji, I am delighted and so pleased to read your encouraging comments; as always, I am grateful for your time and the wonderful review; thank you very much; namaskar.
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Namaskar!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the outcome and fruition of drug burden as it spreads and affect all the abusers as mother has to teardrop for her children; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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This speaks the outcome and fruition of drug burden as it spreads and affect all the abusers as mother has to teardrop for her children; well worded, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, INSPIRE CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Hello my friend, I appreciate your time and the thoughtful review; thank you very much.
Comment from BermyBye50
A perfect example of the simplicity of a Haiku. The 3 lines are enlightening and profound simultaneously while encapsulating the innate wonder of nature.
All the best in the contest
Eugene
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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A perfect example of the simplicity of a Haiku. The 3 lines are enlightening and profound simultaneously while encapsulating the innate wonder of nature.
All the best in the contest
Eugene
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Hello Eugene, I am delighted that you like the haiku and grateful for your generous review; thank you very much.
Comment from Pamusart
A good entry for this contest. Nice third line. Good luck in the contest. Nice metaphor with the mother tree, here small children (branches) and tears of icicles. Creates a memorable image. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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A good entry for this contest. Nice third line. Good luck in the contest. Nice metaphor with the mother tree, here small children (branches) and tears of icicles. Creates a memorable image. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Hello my friend, I am pleased to read your wonderful and thoughtful review; thank you very much.
Comment from jenintorre
Your excellent Haiku describes perfectly your very well chosen artwork. Your presentation gives a perfect feel of coldness.
I wish you good luck in the competition. Best wishes Jen.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Your excellent Haiku describes perfectly your very well chosen artwork. Your presentation gives a perfect feel of coldness.
I wish you good luck in the competition. Best wishes Jen.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Hello Jenin, my friend, I am pleased that you like the haiku; appreciate your time and the wonderful and encouraging review; thank you very much.
Comment from Sherman541
Very nice visual for you statement of the Haiku. That is how the ice covers the tree branches. They look so lovely until they melt. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Very nice visual for you statement of the Haiku. That is how the ice covers the tree branches. They look so lovely until they melt. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Hello Sherman, I am glad that you like the haiku; appreciate your time and the kind review; thank you very much.
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You are so welcome :)
Comment from sunnilicious
The artwork is good for presentation as it does not add any irony or personifications. Exceptional visual imagery created. Creative. Fun. I think it could qualify as a haiku. Fantastic work :)
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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The artwork is good for presentation as it does not add any irony or personifications. Exceptional visual imagery created. Creative. Fun. I think it could qualify as a haiku. Fantastic work :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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My friend, I am pleased to read your wonderful review; thank you very much.
