Comment from ChuckB

Excellent

A good one, Rhonda. No doubt about it. Took me a moment to get into the story and who everyone was, but that aside, it was an enjoyable read. I didn't see any technicals, either. Well done. Chuck

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you, Chuck! I'm so glad you took the time to read my book, and I hope you can continue to do so. I appreciate the time and effort,
Rhonda

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice artwork.
-A good chapter with some
interesting surprises and good description:
"...galloped a fiery red horse with a rider cloaked in crimson robes."
-Very good rapport between Lightning and Nara, Rhonda.
-The biggest surprise was Lightning's transformation;
your description made him sound beautiful.
-Even Nara's courage prompts her into quick action;
however, the efforts of both horse and rider
weren't enough this time.
-Now we await the fate of both.
-A virtual six for this chapter.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you for the virtual six. I appreciate the detailed review.
I sort of took a step into the unusual, but I had planned it in advance.
You're right, for all Lightning's best efforts, and for all Nara's efforts, they fell anyway.
I'm working on the next chapter, but not sure when I'll post it.
You're the only one who's remarked on the rapport between Nara and the horse. I had tried to build that into it. I love horses!
I had hoped to pull off the surprise on Lightning, but was afraid some people had caught on a bit that he wasn't what he seemed to be.

Thanks again, my friend,
Rhonda

reply by Pam (respa) on 10-Mar-2018

You are very welcome and deserving, Rhonda. I feel as long as you have something planned, and not just thrown in, it will more than likely work, and I thought it did. I appreciate you telling me about picking up on the rapport between Nara and the horse. Your love of horses comes through well, too. Do you ride?

reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018

I used to ride a lot, but it's been a few years. Right now, we have cattle, and for some reason, that satisfies my need for large animal contact.

reply by Pam (respa) on 12-Mar-2018

Thanks for sharing, Rhonda.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

Rhonda
Aught oh, looks like we've definitely left reality behind.
The previous fantasy was just the stories of Ole Riley,
but now we're in for a dose of Dare Devil Girls.
Perhaps the three brothers will be three Jedi Knights,
instead of the three musketeers.
There is no doubt from this point on,
we are definitely in fantasy land.
An exciting action packed chapter with an early win for the dark side,
but there is much more to come, of that I'm sure.
Sorry I have no sixes left, my friend.
Well done
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RS

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you for the virtual six, Robert. It means a lot.
Did, definitely, leave reality behind. I've meant to all along, and some people got a bit of a hint of it, and have gotten close on comments. Those who know my work, couldn't have been too surprised.
I like to mix fantasy with real life settings, or as mentioned, the Daredevil Girls. I try to anchor fantasy.
Any way, I'm pretty sure the Three Musketeers will be found to be more than they seemed to be as well, though definitely not Jedi Knights... close, but not them.

Thanks again, my friend,
Rhonda

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Rhonda. Your story is very well described and action keeps the reader marveling at your knowledge of the flying horses and their power. Interesting throughout. Marilyn

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you, Marilyn! I love Greek Mythology, which will be evident as this story continues, and Pegasus horses even more so. It mixes my favorite animal with one of my interests. lol

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing,
Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

Lightning lunged upward, but not fast enough. Nara felt him shiver as the arrow found a spot in his flawless white wing. He faltered, tipping his rider to one side and forcing her to slide from the saddle.' So beautifully written, a tremendous fantasy write this is awesome and was so enjoyable to read well done superb and I look forwardto reading more kindest regards and warmest wishes Meia x

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you, Meia. The pace picked up a bit in this chapter, so I hoped that worked out well for the reader.

Enjoyed your review.

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

Ah now, wait a second. I want a Pegasus.
You definitely had my heart racing with this one and to find out ole Lightning isn't what he seemed is a fantastic twist to this story.
But Nara's fate remains to be seen.
Very nice job!
Michael

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thank you, Michael. I could use a Pegasus myself! Yes, he was deftly disguised, and for a good reason, which will be more evident later.
Thanks for the wonderful review,
Rhonda

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

You wrote a very vivid, fast paced story that rivets the reader's attention. You wrote a good tale that was balanced and had strong characterization. Well done.

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018

Thank you so much for the review. I appreciate your time and comments.

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from jlsavell

Excellent

Rhonda, this is what happens when one has been gone too long. Love this chapter and hope to go back and catch up. Your story-line is captivating. Exceptional character development and stark imagery.
I do hope to catch up. you are such a gifted writer..

jimi

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018

Thank you, Jimi! What a kind thing to say.
The chapters preceding this one were intentionally a bit bland and misleading as to the nature of the book. It sets up like a Western, which is sort of is, but leads to fantasy.
I love to integrate fantasy and reality anyway.

Thanks for reading, and good to see you back,
Rhonda

Comment from jdrhye

Excellent

Interesting story...I have not read any of the previous chapters. However, I was able to easily follow the events taking place. The descriptions are good as is the imagery. It has me intrigued and I will try and go to the previous chapters in order to catch up. Keep writing.
J

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018

Thank you, J, for the wonderful review. I do hope you'll read more. I appreciate all the eyes I can get on this!

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from emptypage

Exceptional

Well, I wasn't expecting any of this.

Well-written, incredibly creative, excellently structured. I love it. I worry for horse and woman (wonder at that abuse she shoves down with her boot), want to know where Henry went.... so much to find out and understand.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018

Thank you, Marla! I appreciate the six stars and the personalized comments!
Yes, Nara had a lot of pent up rage stomping the kidnappers hand. Can you sympathize? I can. lol
Good questions, all answered in time.

Thanks again,
Rhonda