When Buffalo Ran
An end-of-the-world story10 total reviews
Comment from Alexander Morales
This story speaks to me. I admire the way you use imagery and sounds to express what might have happened to the ancient peoples. Thank you for posting.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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This story speaks to me. I admire the way you use imagery and sounds to express what might have happened to the ancient peoples. Thank you for posting.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
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Thank you so much, Alexander, for taking the time to find and read this story. It was fun to write. I truly appreciate your kind praise and the six-star bonus. Rod
Comment from LIJ Red
Tribal migrations have been caused by volcanoes and earthquakes,some extreme ones like Krakatoa...excellent story for a prompt called Sunday Monday Doomsday.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Tribal migrations have been caused by volcanoes and earthquakes,some extreme ones like Krakatoa...excellent story for a prompt called Sunday Monday Doomsday.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for sharing my story and your kind praise.
Comment from Beck Fenton
You have a gift for mixing factual (even scientific) writing with spooky/spiritual and serving it up nicely on a dish of fiction. This is a great approach to the contest prompt. Good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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You have a gift for mixing factual (even scientific) writing with spooky/spiritual and serving it up nicely on a dish of fiction. This is a great approach to the contest prompt. Good luck.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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I am delighted you enjoyed my approach to this prompt. Thank you very much for sharing.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this piece very much. A very different take on it and a welcome one.
these images from a distance? close-up? - close-up should start with a capital here as it's a new sentence.
The dream stalled . . . jumped like an errant old-time film on broken sprockets . . . resumed . . . but it was much later, perhaps years.- the dream sequence is qqritten in italics but this isn't part of the sequence but rather a commentary from the narrative. As such it would probably be better not to italicise it.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Hi there,
I liked this piece very much. A very different take on it and a welcome one.
these images from a distance? close-up? - close-up should start with a capital here as it's a new sentence.
The dream stalled . . . jumped like an errant old-time film on broken sprockets . . . resumed . . . but it was much later, perhaps years.- the dream sequence is qqritten in italics but this isn't part of the sequence but rather a commentary from the narrative. As such it would probably be better not to italicise it.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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I truly appreciate your taking the time to review my story and make specific suggestions, GMG. I am very pleased you like it.
Comment from Zue65
The author complied with all the requirements in writing "Sunday, Monday Doomsday writing prompt". The entry is a well done story and the author's notes lend credence to this flash fiction. Keep writing and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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The author complied with all the requirements in writing "Sunday, Monday Doomsday writing prompt". The entry is a well done story and the author's notes lend credence to this flash fiction. Keep writing and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thanks for reading and commenting on ?When Buffalo Ran.?
Comment from Rasmine
Good story. The writing was awesome.
In your author's notes are some 'a's' with question marks, I take is this site not transferring your typing correctly.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Good story. The writing was awesome.
In your author's notes are some 'a's' with question marks, I take is this site not transferring your typing correctly.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Rasmine, for your wonderful praise of ?When Buffalo Ran.? Indeed, this site does not copy some characters correctly, nor does it let me edit them.?
Comment from BeasPeas
A very good job with this flash fiction. The mystery of the Anasazi will go far into the future and we may never know what happened. Your story is well written and interesting. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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A very good job with this flash fiction. The mystery of the Anasazi will go far into the future and we may never know what happened. Your story is well written and interesting. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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I am delighted you enjoyed the story, Marilyn. Thanks so much for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a fantastic entry for the Doomsday competition. I enjoyed reading this and I'm glad you pulled in all of the history that you did. It is a well-developed story and leaves the reader wanting more. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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This is a fantastic entry for the Doomsday competition. I enjoyed reading this and I'm glad you pulled in all of the history that you did. It is a well-developed story and leaves the reader wanting more. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for your high praise of ?When Buffalo Ran,? Sugarray.. I am delighted you enjoyed it.
Comment from apky
I think you did an absolutely marvellous job of "re-constructing" the story of the this culture and made it seem so real even in Dr Morris' dream. It felt like the dream was some supernatural message that whatever power that be wanted Dr Morris 'Asher to remember and write down for future generations.
I hope the wind did take the message to the People.
Very well done.
...rapid movement and panic, especially in their eyes. ~ This perfectly reflects the artwork you chose for your piece, complementing it with perfection.
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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I think you did an absolutely marvellous job of "re-constructing" the story of the this culture and made it seem so real even in Dr Morris' dream. It felt like the dream was some supernatural message that whatever power that be wanted Dr Morris 'Asher to remember and write down for future generations.
I hope the wind did take the message to the People.
Very well done.
...rapid movement and panic, especially in their eyes. ~ This perfectly reflects the artwork you chose for your piece, complementing it with perfection.
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much, apky, for your wonderful praise and comments. I am very pleased the supernatural elements came across. When my wife was working on her B.S. in anthropology, I used to edit her papers about the Anasazi. I never lost my interest in these Ancient Ones.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Sunday, Monday, Doomsday writing prompt.
Your story of an architect imagining the final days of the Anasazi people is clear and well told.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Sunday, Monday, Doomsday writing prompt.
Your story of an architect imagining the final days of the Anasazi people is clear and well told.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you for commenting on my short story, Sharon.
