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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Chapter 9: Cochise Canyon"Ride the trail with Wyatt and the Bar JS Wranglers
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Comment from Zue65
I enjoy reading too, about the stories of adventure and the struggles of the people living in the West. The period of cowboys, horses and women in this era is truly exciting and interesting. Your characters are quite credible which made your story more adventurous. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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I enjoy reading too, about the stories of adventure and the struggles of the people living in the West. The period of cowboys, horses and women in this era is truly exciting and interesting. Your characters are quite credible which made your story more adventurous. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from friartuck
Very nice! It made me want to read more. It's hard to judge from one chapter, but the characters seemed to need a bit more filling out, But as I said, it's only one chapter, and I'll certainly be looking for more! Thanks!
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Very nice! It made me want to read more. It's hard to judge from one chapter, but the characters seemed to need a bit more filling out, But as I said, it's only one chapter, and I'll certainly be looking for more! Thanks!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks, rightly conceptualized and expressed the plot, developed so keenly to mature the thematic platform, thrill is there, mysteries continue; guesswork, process of investigation begins, lawful atmosphere retained; murder accusation, justice point of view, naturally plotted; well written, well done. B A CHANGE INSPIRER-WRITER -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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This speaks, rightly conceptualized and expressed the plot, developed so keenly to mature the thematic platform, thrill is there, mysteries continue; guesswork, process of investigation begins, lawful atmosphere retained; murder accusation, justice point of view, naturally plotted; well written, well done. B A CHANGE INSPIRER-WRITER -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate the review.
Comment from c_lucas
Loose tongues have caused the death of many good men. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Loose tongues have caused the death of many good men. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate your comments and review
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You're welcome.
Comment from apky
The story continues to develop forward building enough of the plotting to make this a very interesting story. I like how you depict those bygone days of your country and the vivid characterization and writing make me see the "people" who populated this country, their mental makeup and what they had to do to survive.
I'm beginning to see why such a country would have characters like the man in the White House.
Great story.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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The story continues to develop forward building enough of the plotting to make this a very interesting story. I like how you depict those bygone days of your country and the vivid characterization and writing make me see the "people" who populated this country, their mental makeup and what they had to do to survive.
I'm beginning to see why such a country would have characters like the man in the White House.
Great story.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from Ricky1024
This chapter by Brett West was wonderfully created with great Time and Imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks for this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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This chapter by Brett West was wonderfully created with great Time and Imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks for this and have a blessed day.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
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Thanks. Appreciate your review.
Comment from Wetbelly01
Yeah, I'm still like watching this story unfold.
Got some very opinionated folks in this part of the story.
Didn't come across any prolems. My compliments!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Yeah, I'm still like watching this story unfold.
Got some very opinionated folks in this part of the story.
Didn't come across any prolems. My compliments!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my story.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent work. Interesting things can happen on a stagecoach ride. Laurel wants to believe that the man she is going to marry may be responsible for murders in Cochise Canyon. When she hears about the crimes, Ernestine is quick to accuse Hayden, her fiancé, of them. Apparently he doesn't have the best of reputations. After hearing about the murders and hearing Ernestine sound off, poor Laurel is beginning to wonder what she's gotten herself into. Oh, don't tell me! Tom Ens was one of the murdered? How will FS ever get founded? It sounds like Wyatt is going to get to go with the men if they go on the mission that Cottom has called on them for--going after the bad gang. Wyatt will certainly be excited about that development, but how will he and Cottom get along? Excellent development. judi
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Excellent work. Interesting things can happen on a stagecoach ride. Laurel wants to believe that the man she is going to marry may be responsible for murders in Cochise Canyon. When she hears about the crimes, Ernestine is quick to accuse Hayden, her fiancé, of them. Apparently he doesn't have the best of reputations. After hearing about the murders and hearing Ernestine sound off, poor Laurel is beginning to wonder what she's gotten herself into. Oh, don't tell me! Tom Ens was one of the murdered? How will FS ever get founded? It sounds like Wyatt is going to get to go with the men if they go on the mission that Cottom has called on them for--going after the bad gang. Wyatt will certainly be excited about that development, but how will he and Cottom get along? Excellent development. judi
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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We all know Tom must have reincarnated and founded FanStory for us writers. Readers have gotten a charge out of me using his name in vain for this character. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale and appreciate your comments.
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You're welcome. So fun that you used Tom's name. I've heard of writers using a person's name in a story if that person makes a significant contribution to a charity the writer supports. Sounds like you have lots of action coming up. judi
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Tom Ens, really? You killed him? Do I detect something simmering below the surface? At times we all feel the contest voting is rigged, but kill him? Seems drastic.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Tom Ens, really? You killed him? Do I detect something simmering below the surface? At times we all feel the contest voting is rigged, but kill him? Seems drastic.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Granted "Tom Ens" is not very original, but readers have gotten a charge out of that one. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale.
Comment from Sankey
ha ha Tom Ens...this will be good.
I am a ljiuttle confused as to whom is speaking out of Cottom and Shelton at the end. Good chapter anyway. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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ha ha Tom Ens...this will be good.
I am a ljiuttle confused as to whom is speaking out of Cottom and Shelton at the end. Good chapter anyway. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my story.
