Pecos Valley
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16 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Brett,
Another carefully plotted chapter which follows on well from the last.
The pace is well set and a sense of building tension is depicted with word choices and descriptive character settings.
I do enjoy a fine western tale.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Hi Brett,
Another carefully plotted chapter which follows on well from the last.
The pace is well set and a sense of building tension is depicted with word choices and descriptive character settings.
I do enjoy a fine western tale.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I enjoyed this chapter, as I have the other. I got a little confused though. First, there needs to be something to indicate total change of scenery. Are there three different scenes? Verne's place, the criminals, and the stagecoach? There just needs to be some spacing here to help us readers. Otherwise, a great job.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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I enjoyed this chapter, as I have the other. I got a little confused though. First, there needs to be something to indicate total change of scenery. Are there three different scenes? Verne's place, the criminals, and the stagecoach? There just needs to be some spacing here to help us readers. Otherwise, a great job.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale.
Comment from apky
One of the things i admire most about your story, apart from your excellent writing, Brett, is the way these rather simple people managed to live a life full of dignity and honour. They were more upright in those days, even those in lowly station in life, than most Americans today in the higher echelons.
I have to give due to that.
Excellent writing as always.
Just out of my own curiosity, what does "hold candle in my wind" mean?
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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One of the things i admire most about your story, apart from your excellent writing, Brett, is the way these rather simple people managed to live a life full of dignity and honour. They were more upright in those days, even those in lowly station in life, than most Americans today in the higher echelons.
I have to give due to that.
Excellent writing as always.
Just out of my own curiosity, what does "hold candle in my wind" mean?
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale.
Comment from The kurlman
Brett Matthew West, you continue to have a 5star story easy to follow and easy to read. The jargon this chapter seemed a tad heavy but still understood it. I like it you have actors listed. Keep up the good work. The kurlman
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Brett Matthew West, you continue to have a 5star story easy to follow and easy to read. The jargon this chapter seemed a tad heavy but still understood it. I like it you have actors listed. Keep up the good work. The kurlman
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale.
Comment from judiverse
Interesting development with Cottom showing up. Wyatt doesn't want anything to do with him even if he's his father. He wouldn't go back with him, but that's not what Cottom is after. Cottom doesn't seem to treat his horses well and he's considered a loose cannon. He does have a summons from the governor for Sheldon and Verne to help track down a violent gang. I'd suggest some kind of line break or heading when you get to the portion about Laurel Cordova. It promises to be an interesting story that ties in with Sheldon's mission, but you might do something to set it apart. judi
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Interesting development with Cottom showing up. Wyatt doesn't want anything to do with him even if he's his father. He wouldn't go back with him, but that's not what Cottom is after. Cottom doesn't seem to treat his horses well and he's considered a loose cannon. He does have a summons from the governor for Sheldon and Verne to help track down a violent gang. I'd suggest some kind of line break or heading when you get to the portion about Laurel Cordova. It promises to be an interesting story that ties in with Sheldon's mission, but you might do something to set it apart. judi
Comment Written 01-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Your insightful review is much appreciated.
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You're welcome. Have a great day. judi
Comment from LaRosa
I'm enjoying the western colloquialism. It's quick reading and yet I find myself slowing down to savor it all.
'he didn't hold no candle in my wind.'
I'd never heard this one before. Awesome.
You have a good sense for describing and developing characters as well as the tension between them.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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I'm enjoying the western colloquialism. It's quick reading and yet I find myself slowing down to savor it all.
'he didn't hold no candle in my wind.'
I'd never heard this one before. Awesome.
You have a good sense for describing and developing characters as well as the tension between them.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from Sankey
Another excellent Chapter old friend. I will miss all my favourite writers in here but hopefully once I am gone we can keep in touch elsewhere. No spags and a good storytelling as usual. I have promoted the INtro chapter to my Rants and Raves book today you have probably seen it before. This will be my last round on my Rants book.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Another excellent Chapter old friend. I will miss all my favourite writers in here but hopefully once I am gone we can keep in touch elsewhere. No spags and a good storytelling as usual. I have promoted the INtro chapter to my Rants and Raves book today you have probably seen it before. This will be my last round on my Rants book.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. As always, appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This chapter doesn't seem to follow the previous chapter. As chapter seven ended Cottom and Sheldon were ready to draw on each other. The action has shifted with no hint of what happened.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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This chapter doesn't seem to follow the previous chapter. As chapter seven ended Cottom and Sheldon were ready to draw on each other. The action has shifted with no hint of what happened.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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The story will come out. Gotta build suspense somehow. Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate you reading and reviewing it.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Good chapter, moving right along. I suggest you make some sort if break when you switch scenes from one place to another or one situation to another. It saves a lot of confusion on the reviewers part. Well done Brett. Nancy
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Good chapter, moving right along. I suggest you make some sort if break when you switch scenes from one place to another or one situation to another. It saves a lot of confusion on the reviewers part. Well done Brett. Nancy
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Comment from Mrs. KT
She wondered to herself, 'Was she making a mistake coming this far to marry a man she'd not seen in six months?'
Well, Brett, something tells me Laurel Cordova is going to regret her decision!
Another finely crafted chapter; that is for certain. I am intrigued by your characters, as I have shared with you previously. And of course, the plot line. I always thought that I was meant to have lived out west during the 1800s...Maybe not! :)
So well-crafted! Thank you for sharing. Looking forward to the next chapter!
diane
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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She wondered to herself, 'Was she making a mistake coming this far to marry a man she'd not seen in six months?'
Well, Brett, something tells me Laurel Cordova is going to regret her decision!
Another finely crafted chapter; that is for certain. I am intrigued by your characters, as I have shared with you previously. And of course, the plot line. I always thought that I was meant to have lived out west during the 1800s...Maybe not! :)
So well-crafted! Thank you for sharing. Looking forward to the next chapter!
diane
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of my tale. Appreciate your comments and support.
