Comment from --Turtle.

Exceptional

Super job with this poem. It starts out tense, giving the impression of full on combat ... each line giving great descriptions, strong verb choices and rhymes. The end twist lightens the poem. Strong alliteration.

imagine their shock to find {they were}(themselves)? outgunned!
(I figured to suggest, but not a strong suggestion)

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018

Thanks so much yet again, Turtle, for the wonderful analysis, and the very generous rating. I'll give some thought to the line you pulled forward. Much appreciated! Craig

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Good alliteration here Craig with, "Murderous mission, cruel camisado", just to name a couple.
I enjoyed the good end rhyme and meter you employed throughout this write.
The de Havilland DH.98 Mosquito was strictly a British twin-engine shoulder-winged multi-role combat aircraft. The crew of two, pilot and navigator, sat side by side. It served during and after the Second World War. Having said that I suppose this was written from the viewpoint of the Nazis and the Third Reich.
Good work.
~Dean

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018

Hi Dean,
Well, I certainly wouldn't want to be responsible for downing any British planes. The RAAF had a couple of hundred of them, but far more Spitfires and Kittyhawks. I wasn't thinking in anything other than the most general terms of a night air raid, the aim being the "gotcha" at the end. Thanks for reviewing - Craig

reply by Dean Kuch on 23-Feb-2018

My pleasure, as always.

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Oh those mosquitoes are annoying. There's a good reason for me to be thankful it's winter and I can't go outside. I like the sound of that word, "camisado". It sounds much different than it's meaning. That's quite a picture. Good poem about our word of the day lessons.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018

Thanks very much, Joy. I like the word, too. I think it sounds appropriate, as it sounds a bit like kamikaze :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from Katie Solis

Excellent

I loved it,, I loved the imagery, and I was able to laugh at the end. Good job on this work, and thank you for helping me learn a new word.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018

Thanks very much for the kind words, much appreciated :) Craig

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Craig;
Wonderful metaphors as we thought we were watching and feeling the pangs of a war and found that though it was a war of sorts - the worse thing about it was a few bites and the death of a troop of troublesome critters.

Thank you for sharing,

~patty~

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018

Thanks very much, Patty. Yes, it wasn't quite as bad as it might have been :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This sounds like the Blitz on London by the Germans during WW2, the enemy was unseen with much loss of life and devastation, good use of your new word here, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018

Indeed, that was a terrible time, Dolly. Many thanks - Craig

Comment from TPAC

Exceptional

Excellent. This write captures a true poetic heart, word selection making its ingredients stir wonderful, delighting presentation explosive to mind. All stated in my opinion of this work.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for the very kind review and the wonderful rating. I'm most grateful - Craig

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

LOL! You did good. At first, I was worried it was about a human war, but you surprised me. This would have been a good entry to 'A story in a poem'. I don't know why I advertise, I never win. :D
Thank you, for the smile.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018

Haha yeah, I thought it might be fun to enter it, but I'd already put one in. I'm sure that won't get anywhere either lol Many thanks for the kind review. Cheers, Craig

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

I really enjoyed reading your poem, especially the surprise ending and the illustration was good as it didn't give anything away. Excellent rhyme. Nice one. Jen

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018

Thanks very much, Jen. Much appreciated - Craig

Comment from Zue65

Excellent

That's a refreshing idea and the readers will learn much from that bright and innovative purpose in writing your poem. Keep writing so that we'll new words from your posts. Very well done and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2018

Thanks for the kind review. Your remarks are very much appreciated. Craig