Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

This s a great Acrostic about 'our home' Craig and all that it means. The home and those whose lives are shared. AC lovely read and lovely sentiments too.Love the picture of the home, is that your home?
Great job,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018

Be it ever so humble - yes that is our house. It didn't seem appropriate to put a picture of someone else's :) Many thanks for the lovely review, Valda.

Craig

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Craig, This is a very lovely and well written poem you have penned about your house. I love the picture you used and the great descriptive words. It made m feel very calm and serene as I read it and look at the picture! Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018

Thanks so much, Teri. Be it ever so humble, there's no place like home lol Cheers, Craig

Comment from --Turtle.

Exceptional

Hey, Craig,

I read through your romance wish Valentine, a smooth acrostic that incorporates something often seen as less than the more sturdy... weathered, enduring aspects of love in relationships... When really, it could be the spice between the lines. (Infatuation being like the peppy cheerleader, and love being the guru grounded monk. I also say... heck-yeah, hand that monk a pom-pom!

Let this, our home, a peaceful haven be;
(I really like the turn of phrase with the start of this acrostic)

Each of life's challenges shall we embrace.
(This ties well with the first line, and without overdoing the turns of phrases, providing balance to the poem, and a smoothness to the acrostic.)

Exuding limerence, let love evolve.
(I enjoy the aspect of limerence being a healthy aspect of love in a relationship... Why wouldn't there be? In fact, just the other day, I was following my male around staring at his head. He was getting self-conscious, trying to shoo me away, but I was infatuated with him, chasing him around marveling at how he was making me feel, even after all this time. Sometimes I just like to stare at him when he sleeps. (okay, I'm really, really kidding about the last part, but I do catch myself staring at him like a love struck school girl from time to time.)

Each day[,] providing shelter from the storm
( not sure about this comma, I pull it forward for you to check on if it is needed... my gut says each day is the subject, and it's verb is 'providing'... )

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the wonderful review, Turtle. My other half likes to stare at my head too - but I know she's just picturing it mounted on the wall. I'm kidding! I didn't even particularly notice until I read this how often I'd employed my Yoda voice in this. I do think it's important to keep the spark alive. Your thoughtful reviews are always very much appreciated - Craig

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Never heard of limerance or chimerical. You are amazing me with all the words I have never heard of. Happy Valentines day would never be the same if we called it Happy Limerance day lol!

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Now there's a thought. I actually looked up how St Valentine's Day started - with the execution of a couple of men named Valentine by a Roman Emperor. So maybe we need a new name!

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I love the word 'limerence.' Wonder why no one uses it? We use 'infatuation' a lot, so another word is needed, and there it is!

Regrets and bitterness will have no place <--favorite line, so important!

Is that a photo of your house by any chance?

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

That is indeed my humble abode. I think limerence is a nice word - it has a sort of a "shiny" sound, to my ears. Many thanks, Phyllis. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Valentine's acrostic poem. When we choose a lifetime partner it is up to both to make their connection harmonious and loving for both of them, or they can make their life together a living hell.

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018

Thanks for the kind review, Sandra. Both are indeed very possible. Cheers, Craig

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi CD. Love does not dissipate simply because one or the other loses interest. If anything love evolves and if it is true it either comes back to you or you keep a nice warm spot for it in your heart always. Well done. Loved the new word. xx d

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks so much for the kind and thoughtful review, Kiwi :)

Comment from Quoiky

Excellent

I enjoyed your writing.

It flowed well and told a nice story. Peace and harmony...what a concept!

The only thing I would change might be to change 'inciting' to 'enticing'. Otherwise, nice read.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks for the thoughtful review. I understand your point about "enticing"; however from several possible words, I chose "inciting" deliberately, specifically because it is an active verb, rather than passive, and is often used in an "evil" context, as in "inciting violence". So I wanted to indicate affirmative action in promoting peace. I'm not defending, just explaining the thought process. Your comments are gratefully received :) Craig

reply by Quoiky on 14-Feb-2018

That IS what I thought when I read your work. When I read inciting, I immediately thought of a riot. It does work well. You're right.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks we wish our house to be a family of love, peace, happiness and harmony but we are not careful in love, rather we manifest romantic infatuation; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thank you for the kind review - Craig

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

Very good acrostic. I learned a new word with this poem. Thank you for defining it in your notes. I'm here to learn, so I always appreciate when poets take an unconventional approach. I also appreciate the heavy notes. Limerence is an absolutely perfect word for this competition, especially since you say that love is much deeper than that. Good job.

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 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks very much for the kind review, I'm glad you found the poem useful :) Much appreciated, Craig