Ode to the Captured Mountain Lion
I left my dart in San Francisco.38 total reviews
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Poor Kitty got too close to Man and will never be free of him again. An excellent free verse reminding us that the wildlife was here first. We are the Invaders. We'll done. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Poor Kitty got too close to Man and will never be free of him again. An excellent free verse reminding us that the wildlife was here first. We are the Invaders. We'll done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Oh, thank you, Nancy, for your review of my poem about invaders--the human kind.
Comment from mermaids
As an advocate for big cats, I applaud your poem. Your words show the modern world and the conflict between mountain lions and humans. It is true, the pumas were here long before us. Excellent free verse form and a great subject that needs to be heard.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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As an advocate for big cats, I applaud your poem. Your words show the modern world and the conflict between mountain lions and humans. It is true, the pumas were here long before us. Excellent free verse form and a great subject that needs to be heard.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Oh, thank you, Mermaids, for your review of my free verse on a subject that needs to be heard.
Comment from Pantygynt
There are certain species that should, in my opinion stay well apart from one another. As you say, who is invading whose territory and who has more rights to it. Written in non-rhyming free verse tercets that nevertheless are not totally lacking in metre. This technique is most appropriate for presenting both sides of a contentious question.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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There are certain species that should, in my opinion stay well apart from one another. As you say, who is invading whose territory and who has more rights to it. Written in non-rhyming free verse tercets that nevertheless are not totally lacking in metre. This technique is most appropriate for presenting both sides of a contentious question.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Oh, thank you, Jim, for your generous review of my poem about an ongoing issue. I worked on this on and off for three months before it arrived at its present form. I still have six pages of deleted lines and I may carve out a fourth and fifth poem from those. Once again, thanks.
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Tricky subject.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think that this is a good entry for the Free Verse Poetry writing prompt.
Well done, your story is well told in your verse.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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I think that this is a good entry for the Free Verse Poetry writing prompt.
Well done, your story is well told in your verse.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Sharon, for your review and for wishing me luck in the free verse contest.
Comment from CD Richards
Well, I'm pleasantly surprised they didn't just blast it to kingdom come for having the temerity to encroach on human territory. Things could have ended far more badly for this fellow sentient being, but as you point out, there always seems to be a cost for the other inhabitants of our planet when humans are in any way involved. Where are they to go when we destroy their habitats?
Reading your last stanza again, another thought sprang to mind. That is our fate now, too. In many cases, we are tracked everywhere we go, whether by CCTV or satellite. Welcome to the 21st!
Excellent, thought-provoking piece of free-verse. Well done.
Craig
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Well, I'm pleasantly surprised they didn't just blast it to kingdom come for having the temerity to encroach on human territory. Things could have ended far more badly for this fellow sentient being, but as you point out, there always seems to be a cost for the other inhabitants of our planet when humans are in any way involved. Where are they to go when we destroy their habitats?
Reading your last stanza again, another thought sprang to mind. That is our fate now, too. In many cases, we are tracked everywhere we go, whether by CCTV or satellite. Welcome to the 21st!
Excellent, thought-provoking piece of free-verse. Well done.
Craig
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Yes, Craig, it?s sad that animals and humans alike our tracked. My cellphone and FitBit bracelet has the same technology in the GPS collar on the mountain lion. Thank you for your review of my thought-provoking free verse.
Comment from Alec Gould
What can I say my friend that has not been stated already?
This is a very powerful poem.
I felt close to this, as here in Wisconsin, we are seeing these cats closer and closer. It is not their fault we took their habitat, yet, they pay the price for our "expansion".
Sad.
As for you my friend, I hope the week has been going great for you.
~Alec
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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What can I say my friend that has not been stated already?
This is a very powerful poem.
I felt close to this, as here in Wisconsin, we are seeing these cats closer and closer. It is not their fault we took their habitat, yet, they pay the price for our "expansion".
Sad.
As for you my friend, I hope the week has been going great for you.
~Alec
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Oh, thank you, Alec, for your generous, six star review. I am heartened by reviewers? response to my poem about this troubling issue of our times.
Comment from Thesis
I enjoyed this poem. You combined history and current practice to portray a very compelling question of who is invading who's territory. You also put into perspective the fate of this creature had it crossed a state line, just for trying to live how it was born to live.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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I enjoyed this poem. You combined history and current practice to portray a very compelling question of who is invading who's territory. You also put into perspective the fate of this creature had it crossed a state line, just for trying to live how it was born to live.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Yes, Thesis, if this puma lived in the next state over, they would have killed it. Thank you for your review. This poem almost did not happen. I began it in November but abandoned it when I wrote two new poems from the notes. I returned to the scraps of deleted lines and discovered how to shape them into this poem. Thanks again.
Comment from Cedar
This is a great entry for the contest. It's sort of a story in a poem but done in free verse style.
I'm glad this mountain lion could be captured and taken care of before someone got seriously hurt or even killed. We have a large population of coyotes, bobcats and a few bears in the area where I live.
Good luck in the contest...Bill
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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This is a great entry for the contest. It's sort of a story in a poem but done in free verse style.
I'm glad this mountain lion could be captured and taken care of before someone got seriously hurt or even killed. We have a large population of coyotes, bobcats and a few bears in the area where I live.
Good luck in the contest...Bill
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Bill, for your review and contest well wishes. Yes, I?m glad no one and no puma were hurt. Thanks again.
Comment from tfawcus
Loved that little pun in your subtitle and would ave given you six stars for just this one simile, "like a fog-cloaked coyote" - not only a brilliant visual image but a wonderfully well arranged set of words. What to do with all those leftover lines? It's interesting how often they can spark a new poem, especially when you come back to them after a while.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Loved that little pun in your subtitle and would ave given you six stars for just this one simile, "like a fog-cloaked coyote" - not only a brilliant visual image but a wonderfully well arranged set of words. What to do with all those leftover lines? It's interesting how often they can spark a new poem, especially when you come back to them after a while.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Yes, Tony, I still have 1,200 leftover words I can craft into new poems. Thanks for noting that line about the fog-cloaked coyote. People had speculated that the puma had crossed the Golden Gate like the coyotes. When I watched a video of coyotes crossing the Bridge in fog, I was astounded and included that image. Thank you for your generous six star review.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Sis, some very good points made in this poem. Thankfully we are recognising that we are not the most important person on the planet - we are beginning to realise that we are just custodians. Well written, good picture and I particularly like - 'Count yourself lucky
you live in a state that banned
sport hunting of cougars,.......... hard to understand man could see this as a sport!
I left my dart in San Francisco..... clever play on words.
Well done. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Hi Sis, some very good points made in this poem. Thankfully we are recognising that we are not the most important person on the planet - we are beginning to realise that we are just custodians. Well written, good picture and I particularly like - 'Count yourself lucky
you live in a state that banned
sport hunting of cougars,.......... hard to understand man could see this as a sport!
I left my dart in San Francisco..... clever play on words.
Well done. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Oh, thank you, Dorothy, for your sensitive review. Many reviewers love the pun in the subtitle and was moved by the plight of wildlife in our midst.
