Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Hi Craig,

I'm behind with reviewing. Sorry about that. I had three days with the grandkids and am now trying to catch up.

I'm not sure I'd read this poem to kids for a bedtime story. It's kind of depressing to me. I have come across a few depressing poems today. Ilook forward to the happier ones you're promising to write.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018

Thanks Joy, appreciation for the review. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

Yikes! Not exactly a 'cheery bedtime rhyme for children' - LOL. But perhaps a great learning opportunity...

As always, flawless meter, wonderful rhyme and a pointed message, beginning with that marvelous first stanza. Wow. What a mental image - 'the kings of planet Earth'...

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

I promise to redeem myself in the next couple - if not exactly childrens' bedtime reading, they'll be a tad less "dark" lol

Many thanks for the lovely review. Very much appreciated!

Craig

reply by Dawn Munro on 12-Feb-2018

I've been away, and I can't promise I'll be here long... STILL no results from Amazon. I just wrote another email (scathing) - the promos are now over on Kindle, too. I am NOT impressed! (But I thank you for bringing it to my attention.)

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Are you letting life get in the way of Fanstory? Shame on you! No worries, I held off in case you had some success, but it doesn't appear they are coming to the party. It makes me believe I might need to rethink Amazon as an option if I ever get around to releasing anything.

reply by Dawn Munro on 12-Feb-2018

Did you read my profile page about my two books of short stories? I discovered - after nearly a year - they were on Amazon priced at over $100 for PAPERBACK books I was selling for less than $7. I am disgusted. They allow book dealers to set their own price without even proving they have the author's book to sell. :(((

reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

I saw that - it's vile.

reply by Dawn Munro on 12-Feb-2018

I wonder how many potential readers I lost, never mind sales. If I saw something like that (without knowing Amazon' policy) I sure wouldn't be keen to check out the author again.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem. Everything we do on earth is only temporarily. Nothing we build will stand forever, there will only be ruins left as proof that we once were here.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks for the positive review, Sandra. Much appreciated - Craig

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Good one! All animal dominion is transitory. The dinos are gone. We'll be gone one day, probably replaced by our own AI-bots once they get so powerful they can up their own intelligence, but we'll stay the same lazy beings and just be in their way.

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks for the supportive comments. There'll be a change of tone for the next couple. I thought I might make them darker - JUST KIDDING! Cheers, Craig

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks a short-lived changes, a bedtime rhyme interestingly retold, well said, well done, thank you for sharing this with us. WRITE CHANGE. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks for reviewing - Craig

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

What a sad commentary on the state of mankind. Your poem is full of truth though. In our treatment of Earth, we are nothing short of foolish, and arrogant about our actions to boot. Good job on the poem.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks very much for the supportive remarks :) Craig

Comment from frierajac

Excellent

You keep writing very thoughty poems and enhancing them with odd words and I like this. This is one of your better ones, well thought out. An interesting word and
I do hope you keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thanks very much. I'll try - only 322 days to go! Cheers, Craig

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Reading the description in the line under the title, I was misled into thinking this was a children's poem...a little dark for that but so true none the less. Excellent ABAB

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018

Sorry, I was being sarcastic, but only towards myself. I shouldn't. Less dark ones in days to come :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

So true, Craig. It's a pity that our brain so-called intelligence will turn out to be our demise. It could've been different, but it's never been worse because we just seem to prefer lies to truth.

Anyway you've done well in working your word evanid into your perfectly metred and rhymed poem. Nice. It rolls off the tongue delightfully so.

Can't wait for the brighter ones. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018

Thanks so much Gloria. I'm looking forward to a change of pace from the last couple too :)

Cheers, Craig