The Blackbird is Flown
A short rhymed poem41 total reviews
Comment from Bucketlist
You had my last six before! It's a sad poem, about health , but I share your fears about aging. You are not saying you have dementia are you?
Thanks for sharing, Tony, take care
Hug
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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You had my last six before! It's a sad poem, about health , but I share your fears about aging. You are not saying you have dementia are you?
Thanks for sharing, Tony, take care
Hug
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Very many thanks, Trisha, for your review and comments. No, this isn't autobiographical - at least, not yet! LOL All the best, Tony
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Thank God! You are so welcome
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Thank God! You are so welcome
Comment from Pearl Edwards
The blackbird has flown and the ravages of old age seem to be upon them, though he still hears the song, just a little more forlorn. This is a pensive write, (my take anyway) and an enjoyable read. Some days age seems a burden some days not. Good one Tony,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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The blackbird has flown and the ravages of old age seem to be upon them, though he still hears the song, just a little more forlorn. This is a pensive write, (my take anyway) and an enjoyable read. Some days age seems a burden some days not. Good one Tony,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Yes, some days are like that! On the whole things are pretty good though! Thanks for the review! Tony
Comment from Leftkansas
An unnerving look at age and inevitability through echoes of the sound of the blackbird. Unnerving because it is a journey we all make if we live long enough.
You have a real gift with the mastery of words. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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An unnerving look at age and inevitability through echoes of the sound of the blackbird. Unnerving because it is a journey we all make if we live long enough.
You have a real gift with the mastery of words. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Very kind of you to drop by to review. Thank you both for the six stars and your generous comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Tony
A wonderfully well stitched poem with great musical elements, a lovely picture is given within your words, another memorable write.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hi Tony
A wonderfully well stitched poem with great musical elements, a lovely picture is given within your words, another memorable write.
Mitchell
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Very kind of you, Mitchell, to drop by to review. Thank you for your generous comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and presentation.
-You write an excellent
commentary on aging, Tony,
and I was really glad to read
that it was not autobiographical.
-The imagery is very profound:
with the 'forlorn' song of the blackbirds.
-The concluding thoughts show
the sadness of being alone.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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-Good image and presentation.
-You write an excellent
commentary on aging, Tony,
and I was really glad to read
that it was not autobiographical.
-The imagery is very profound:
with the 'forlorn' song of the blackbirds.
-The concluding thoughts show
the sadness of being alone.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Very kind of you, Pam, to drop by to review. Thank you for your generous comments. A poem that is not yet autobiographical! Best wishes, Tony
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You are always welcome, Tony. I looked at some reviews to see that the poem was not autobiographical, as I didn't know what to think. The beauty of poetry is creativity and imagination.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Another fine rhymed poem that conveys the idea of lose very well
Perhaps the Blackbird is meant literally or maybe symbolic
The bird and song I will miss is the brown striped wren
that greets me each morning and evening, too
Excellent choice of art work to accompany your verse
Nicely done
RS
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Hello Tony,
Another fine rhymed poem that conveys the idea of lose very well
Perhaps the Blackbird is meant literally or maybe symbolic
The bird and song I will miss is the brown striped wren
that greets me each morning and evening, too
Excellent choice of art work to accompany your verse
Nicely done
RS
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Many thanks, Robert. The blackbird is intended to be both literal and metaphoric. I think that we must all have our favorite birds in the local landscape surrounding places that have a special call on our heart. All the best, Tony
Comment from Sis Cat
Superb poem, Tony, on how the memory of sound lingers after "my hearing is gone."
There is an energy about your poem that is distinct. If I could put my finger on it, I would say that it is the richness of your language and imagination, as displayed in such delicious lines as:
amid atrophied layers
of my temporal lobe,
I feel a bump up in craft and execution when I read your poems, even a short rhymed one such as this.
This poem is a song of parting not only from sound itself, but from life. The narrator concludes with words that ache in a "jumble of fears":
I journey alone...
I shall miss you, my dears.
This appears simple but it reveals your mastery of form. I always feel richly rewarded when I read your work.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Superb poem, Tony, on how the memory of sound lingers after "my hearing is gone."
There is an energy about your poem that is distinct. If I could put my finger on it, I would say that it is the richness of your language and imagination, as displayed in such delicious lines as:
amid atrophied layers
of my temporal lobe,
I feel a bump up in craft and execution when I read your poems, even a short rhymed one such as this.
This poem is a song of parting not only from sound itself, but from life. The narrator concludes with words that ache in a "jumble of fears":
I journey alone...
I shall miss you, my dears.
This appears simple but it reveals your mastery of form. I always feel richly rewarded when I read your work.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Very kind of you, Andre, to drop by to review. Thank you both for the six stars and your generous comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Gloria ....
You know, these shorter forms are becoming my absolute favourites. Tony you have such a wonderful way with words. And I picture these poems going alongside beautiful paintings or photographs.
An excellent job for those of us of a certain age.
Thanks Tony. You're great!
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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You know, these shorter forms are becoming my absolute favourites. Tony you have such a wonderful way with words. And I picture these poems going alongside beautiful paintings or photographs.
An excellent job for those of us of a certain age.
Thanks Tony. You're great!
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Very kind of you, Gloria, to drop by to review. Thank you for your generous comments. Thank goodness that neither of us have quite reached that age yet! LOL Best wishes, Tony
Comment from His Grayness
Dear Tony, please forgive me for not having the sixth star this lovely work really deserves. I really enjoyed it from start to finish and I'm truly impressed at how you have delivered such powerful emotion through the appreciation of these so often (denigrated by many) , birds! You truly have a gift of creating 'GRIP" of the reader in your works. It's always a true delight to hear from you. Blessings and thanks always! Vance
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Dear Tony, please forgive me for not having the sixth star this lovely work really deserves. I really enjoyed it from start to finish and I'm truly impressed at how you have delivered such powerful emotion through the appreciation of these so often (denigrated by many) , birds! You truly have a gift of creating 'GRIP" of the reader in your works. It's always a true delight to hear from you. Blessings and thanks always! Vance
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Very kind of you, Vance, to drop by to review. Thank you for your generous comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from catch22
Hi T, this is a lovely poem that expands on the bird of youth metaphor and links it with age related afflictions, like memory loss and a general loss of adventurous spirit as caution sets in through experience. How is your dream journal coming along for Jeff's class? I am struggling to remember all of my dreams, but I have recalled two vivid ones so far.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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Hi T, this is a lovely poem that expands on the bird of youth metaphor and links it with age related afflictions, like memory loss and a general loss of adventurous spirit as caution sets in through experience. How is your dream journal coming along for Jeff's class? I am struggling to remember all of my dreams, but I have recalled two vivid ones so far.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2018
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Many thanks, Pam. I am having considerable trouble with the dream journal, as I am simply unable to recall my dreams! I am, however, keeping a journal of sorts, and hope that, in due course, we'll have the opportunity to share the journey with one another. I'm not sure of Jeff's intentions in that regard. I have just reviewed "Selah", which also seems to treat of "a general loss of adventurous spirit as caution sets in through experience". However, I am holding the review back for a few more hours in order to award the six stars it so richly merits. Did it arise out of your dream journal?
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Hi T, yes, the imagery and link to the concept of selah grew from a dream I had recently. I appreciate the thought, but six stars are unnecessary for me. I would rather have a thoughtful critique any day.
I do hope I can remember more of my dreams with practice. I don't know either what the next assignment will be for the class...
