Annaâ??s Drawer
My Biggest Mistake27 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Rhyming Poetry writing prompt.
Well said, well rhymed and a nice verse.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Rhyming Poetry writing prompt.
Well said, well rhymed and a nice verse.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 11-Feb-2018
Comment from Bichon
A good descriptive poem that was enjoyable to read.
Watch the title, it's come out as "Anna�¢??s Drawer" seems to have glitched. Fanstory does that sometimes when you add apostrophes etc.
Chloe.
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A good descriptive poem that was enjoyable to read.
Watch the title, it's come out as "Anna�¢??s Drawer" seems to have glitched. Fanstory does that sometimes when you add apostrophes etc.
Chloe.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
Comment from Mark Valentine
A classic premise for a poem - reflecting on an object (in this case objects) that evoke memories. You tell it wonderfully, letting the story unfold slowly - the picture adding a thousand words. I like that Ann does not end up being the villain of the story - even though it's not a happy ending, there's something comforting about the poet realizing that Ann had not betrayed her.
As for the writing, great rhymes and meter. I love that the poem begins and ends with statements about cleaning the drawer.
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A classic premise for a poem - reflecting on an object (in this case objects) that evoke memories. You tell it wonderfully, letting the story unfold slowly - the picture adding a thousand words. I like that Ann does not end up being the villain of the story - even though it's not a happy ending, there's something comforting about the poet realizing that Ann had not betrayed her.
As for the writing, great rhymes and meter. I love that the poem begins and ends with statements about cleaning the drawer.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your being inspired by the contents of a jewelry box. Your storytelling in rhymed quatrains is very effective, and your personification of "jealousy" intensifies the tale. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
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I admired your being inspired by the contents of a jewelry box. Your storytelling in rhymed quatrains is very effective, and your personification of "jealousy" intensifies the tale. Best wishes in the competition- Joan
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
Comment from Alec Gould
Six stars I give for your writing because it moved me so. Very nice tempo and the words "heart-felt". I felt as if I was there, living the words. Thank you my friend for writing this. Nicely done. Have a great weekend now. ~Alec
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Six stars I give for your writing because it moved me so. Very nice tempo and the words "heart-felt". I felt as if I was there, living the words. Thank you my friend for writing this. Nicely done. Have a great weekend now. ~Alec
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
Comment from Ella Gott
How sweet! This was such a cool poem to read, I hope you entered in into a competition! Fanstory has the best poets jeez! 5 stars for sure !! Keep posting!
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How sweet! This was such a cool poem to read, I hope you entered in into a competition! Fanstory has the best poets jeez! 5 stars for sure !! Keep posting!
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
Comment from Liberty Justice
Jealousy and scorn certainly will break up friendship. Messing with someones lover or boyfriend will cause that person to hate you. What happened to Ann? That is the mysterious thing happened. Nicely wtitten. liberty justice
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Jealousy and scorn certainly will break up friendship. Messing with someones lover or boyfriend will cause that person to hate you. What happened to Ann? That is the mysterious thing happened. Nicely wtitten. liberty justice
Comment Written 10-Feb-2018
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like your poem, LoannaLois. I love the photo and your notion that each piece of jewelry tells a tale. Novel idea and one that really appealed to me. I was a little surprised at the path that your poem took. Your title gives it away a little, but I did not pick that up. I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
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I like your poem, LoannaLois. I love the photo and your notion that each piece of jewelry tells a tale. Novel idea and one that really appealed to me. I was a little surprised at the path that your poem took. Your title gives it away a little, but I did not pick that up. I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
Comment from Janet Foor
A well told story in a rhyming poem. It is always fun to find treasures and an old box filled with jewelry would be one of those times.
Very nicely done with lovely alliteration a good abcb rhyme.
Blessings
Janet
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A well told story in a rhyming poem. It is always fun to find treasures and an old box filled with jewelry would be one of those times.
Very nicely done with lovely alliteration a good abcb rhyme.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
Comment from misscookie
I remember going through the same thing and till this day I don't understand
The only difference is One day I couldn't take those memories any more and divide my jewelry between my children
to see them enjoy while I'm living
and they don't have to wait until I dead and have sad memories o every time they wore them
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I remember going through the same thing and till this day I don't understand
The only difference is One day I couldn't take those memories any more and divide my jewelry between my children
to see them enjoy while I'm living
and they don't have to wait until I dead and have sad memories o every time they wore them
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
