Comment from Natali Holden

Excellent

This story just keeps getting better and better! I love it! The thing that's got me confused is if it's her mom where was she all those years? Wouldn't she have kept her daughter and made sure those men didn't touch her? I can't wait for more! Keep up the awesome writing!
Natali ;)

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for your wonderful review I'm so glad you're enjoying the story. All your questions will be answered not in this chapter, but the next. This chapter being posted today will only add to the questions, lol. I did it to set up the twist at the end.
Thank you again for all your support, take care.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

"Rachel's real mom, that Jeanie McCarthy?"
"That's what he said."
"How can that be when she's been dead for years?"

WOW! Makes sense if it's her, but she's dead... or IS she???? Very good twist! Love it! :)

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for a fantastic I'm so glad you're enjoying it. You think that twist is good, wait until you read the one at the end. It's leaning towards the long side, approximately 2000 words so I'm not sure if I should split it in two or keep it as one. What do you think?
Thank you again for such a wonderful review and all your support, take care.

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 08-Feb-2018

I would split it. I think 800 words is enough for a post if you must split it unevenly. Can't wait to find out how it ends. You're a tease! :)

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Now, I'm just wondering what happened to the security guard who was doing the chasing. He might even be the next victim, I suppose. Plenty of action. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for your review and for all your encouragement and support. You're right he could be the next victim.
Thank you again for all your support, encouragement it means a lot to me, take care.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Well, advancement on all fronts here. Now they have to catch her...

I'm way to kool for them - there's no value on changing the spelling of cool here as the pronunciation is identical.

Come on, Mr. Kool shit - same thing here.

"What is it now? - need closing speech marks here.

"Late forty's I'd say." - forties.

Would Wilson sneak out and murders him - murder.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for a great review, and for all of your help. I was a little closer to perfection, still no cookie.
Thank you again for your kind review and all your help, it really means a lot to me, take care.

Comment from apky

Excellent

Wow, this really is "the plot thickens", Misty.

So Rachel's mother maybe alive after all. I'm curious to know for sure.
Great write with plot twists galore. You're doing a great job with this story. Never a dull moment, and the pace is murderous. Excellent.

I'm way to(too) kool(did you deliberately want to spell this with a K instead of a c?) for them punk ass losers."

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for your wonderful review and all of your encouraging words. Look out MR. Patterson, here I come (I hope.) I'd probably be so darn tongue-tied if it did happen I'd look like a studdering idiot, or faint.
Thank you again for all your help support and encouragement, it means so much to me, take care.
Yes, the Kool was purposely done, I was told the younger generation spells it that way.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

There seems to be a narrowing of the gap between who the murderer is, that would certainly explain why the identification by Jiimmy of someone who looks like Rachel, but older. The killer in order to escape, has to submerge herself in.muddy water, she is getting slack! Well done, Rachel's mum? Blessings, Roy
Typo "I'm way too (kool) cool?

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thank you for your wonderful review and for all your help and support. DNA doesn't lie, or does it? Can it be fabricated? If so who would do it, why? I gave you something to think about until the next post, didn't I? I'm such a little stinker, lol.
Thank you again for all your help and support, take care.

reply by royowen on 08-Feb-2018

Well done

Comment from Ella Gott

Excellent

Wow very cool! I love murder mysteries, but they are hard to come by sometimes for sure! I wish I was good at writing those things, but as I am not, I will keep reading yours!

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for your wonderful review. You want a murder mystery, well you found the right gal. That's pretty much all I write. I'll warn you they do get a little violent, bloody at times. Occasional sex and
some cussing.
I'm sure you could write a mystery. Start off with what if? then let your idea the problems they encounter escalate from there.
Thank you so much for such a kind review, take care.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This is a filmy worth fiction with professional criminal's psychology, escaping from the grip of law, but caught in the police nabbing following thorough teamwork of investigation, realistic characters, secrets reveal at the end; curious ending; well said, well done. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for such an encouraging review, I'm so glad you're enjoying the story. I hope you'll stick around for the twist at the end.
Thank you again for all your support it means a lot to me, take care.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

A nice cover for the book that complements your chapter very well. One of the workers got stabbed and died. They start investigating, not getting anywhere quickly. They suspected someone first who claims to be innocent. But when they receive the DNA results bring a surprise. The DNA is from Jeanie McCarthy, Rachel' real mum. They don't understand how that can be. I felt especially at the start a bit too much dialogue.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for your kind review, I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. That darn dialogue gets me every time. I'm seriously thinking scripts would be a better forte since I struggle so much with description. I've posted one on fan story and it received exceptional reviews.
Thanks again for a wonderful review take care.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hi Missydawn
Now just one thing that keeps me wondering what happened to the woman who ran into the woods and submerged her self in the creek?
You are clever now it seems we have another
suspect Rachel's read mother!
Gert

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018

Thank you so much for your kind review and all your support. It's always greatly appreciated. DNA doesn't lie. How is that possible if she's been dead for years? I've had a blast coming up with ideas, trying to keep you guessing. I hope the ending will take you by surprise.
Thank you again for all your support friendship it means the world to me, take care.

reply by Gert sherwood on 08-Feb-2018

You are welcome Mistydawn
Good the suspense of who the killer is getting to me
Gert