haiku (apricot sun)
sunset--today's gift6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Apricot Sun, with its twelve syllables, captures what must be a breath-taking scene of morning sun bursting on a reflective and colorful world. Nice.
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This haiku, Apricot Sun, with its twelve syllables, captures what must be a breath-taking scene of morning sun bursting on a reflective and colorful world. Nice.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The work reminisces a preponderance of mee-scattering in the sky occasioned by sun set.
The work highlights and likens the sun as a gift unfolded by the sky, which the writer sees as synonymous with ribbons.
The work earns its texture through the use of metaphors.
Outstanding work! Keep the flag flying!
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The work reminisces a preponderance of mee-scattering in the sky occasioned by sun set.
The work highlights and likens the sun as a gift unfolded by the sky, which the writer sees as synonymous with ribbons.
The work earns its texture through the use of metaphors.
Outstanding work! Keep the flag flying!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2018
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful haiku you have penned for the prompt. You used very good descriptive words and lovely art work to go with it! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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This is a very beautiful haiku you have penned for the prompt. You used very good descriptive words and lovely art work to go with it! Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 06-Feb-2018
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the sun looks like an apricot (whitish flower) spread over the sky (ribboned in colours) and makes a gift yet unwrapped (dime light); well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks the sun looks like an apricot (whitish flower) spread over the sky (ribboned in colours) and makes a gift yet unwrapped (dime light); well said, well done. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Feb-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Sunset Haiku writing prompt.
Well done, you've described the sunset beautifully.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Sunset Haiku writing prompt.
Well done, you've described the sunset beautifully.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
Comment from robina1978
An excellent photo of a sunset that complements your tiny poem very well. One suggestion the title should be: Haiku (apricot sunset). You used the right syllable count, present tense. My guess is the first two lines are a satori. Best wishes for the prompt.
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An excellent photo of a sunset that complements your tiny poem very well. One suggestion the title should be: Haiku (apricot sunset). You used the right syllable count, present tense. My guess is the first two lines are a satori. Best wishes for the prompt.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
