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Tomorrows

A 1-9-1 poem

11 total reviews 
Comment from Dean Kuch
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I've always felt that poetic short forms like the 1-6-1 and 1-9-1 sound and read much more smoothly when they're written as one continuous train of thought.
Just like yours.
Well done!
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 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
    Thanks a lot for the good review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This one-nine-one, Tomorrows, has the correct format and puts a new spin on the proposal line. I wonder if it would work? Or did?

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
    Thanks for the good review and comments.
Comment from rheabug
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Great entry in the 1-9-1 contest. The picture you chose is excellent to enhance your poem. You said a lot in this poem with hope of a future in this life. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing! Hugs

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
    Thank you for your good review and comments.
Comment from Sharon Meda
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I think this is a good entry for the '1-9-1 Life' writing prompt.
Well said and well told in your few words.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
    Thank you.
Comment from Lakieshae
Exceptional
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Love it! It's great the picture and the words complete the entire story.... three lines that expresses a full paragraph.... nice work

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
    Thanks again!
Comment from LIJ Red
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Looks a bit like Lake Michigan on a breezy day. A good picture helps. The one nine one with life in it's body looks excellent to me, but I'm not a wizard on short forms.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
    Thanks so much!
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very sweet and well written 1-9-1 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good wording and great imagery that all went together well. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
    Thank you for your comments and good review.
Comment from rspoet
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This is a very fine poem, but the rule states you must use the word "life"
Syllables are good at 1-9-1
and the picture is perfect
Perhaps use "future life" instead of tomorrows
Best wishes in the contest
RS

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
    Thanks so much. I?ll correct it.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Very nice image.
-Syllable count is good.
-The question you pose is
a good one and shows
how he cares for her.
-The only problem is you
did not follow the prompt
and use the word "life" where indicated.
-I am awarding the rating, as otherwise,
the entry will be disqualified without the change.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
    Thanks so much. I?ll change it.
reply by Pam (respa) on 04-Feb-2018
    You are very welcome; good job with the change. Good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
    Thanks for pointing it out!!!
reply by Pam (respa) on 04-Feb-2018
    You are very welcome.
Comment from zanya
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What a nice way to put it 'build our tomorrows' ??- the proposal that can change forever ones life journey- with the joy of no longer walking alone -lovely pic

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 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
    Thank you for the wonderful review and comments.