Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

I've always felt that poetic short forms like the 1-6-1 and 1-9-1 sound and read much more smoothly when they're written as one continuous train of thought.
Just like yours.
Well done!

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018

Thanks a lot for the good review. I appreciate it.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This one-nine-one, Tomorrows, has the correct format and puts a new spin on the proposal line. I wonder if it would work? Or did?

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018

Thanks for the good review and comments.

Comment from rheabug

Excellent

Great entry in the 1-9-1 contest. The picture you chose is excellent to enhance your poem. You said a lot in this poem with hope of a future in this life. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing! Hugs

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018

Thank you for your good review and comments.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a good entry for the '1-9-1 Life' writing prompt.
Well said and well told in your few words.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thank you.

Comment from Lakieshae

Exceptional

Love it! It's great the picture and the words complete the entire story.... three lines that expresses a full paragraph.... nice work

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks again!

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Looks a bit like Lake Michigan on a breezy day. A good picture helps. The one nine one with life in it's body looks excellent to me, but I'm not a wizard on short forms.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks so much!

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very sweet and well written 1-9-1 poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good wording and great imagery that all went together well. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018

Thank you for your comments and good review.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a very fine poem, but the rule states you must use the word "life"
Syllables are good at 1-9-1
and the picture is perfect
Perhaps use "future life" instead of tomorrows
Best wishes in the contest
RS

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018

Thanks so much. I?ll correct it.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image.
-Syllable count is good.
-The question you pose is
a good one and shows
how he cares for her.
-The only problem is you
did not follow the prompt
and use the word "life" where indicated.
-I am awarding the rating, as otherwise,
the entry will be disqualified without the change.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018

Thanks so much. I?ll change it.

reply by Pam (respa) on 04-Feb-2018

You are very welcome; good job with the change. Good luck.

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks for pointing it out!!!

reply by Pam (respa) on 04-Feb-2018

You are very welcome.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

What a nice way to put it 'build our tomorrows' ??- the proposal that can change forever ones life journey- with the joy of no longer walking alone -lovely pic

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 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018

Thank you for the wonderful review and comments.