The Sweetest Kiss
When your soulmate comes along12 total reviews
Comment from Judvan2
Beautiful. Simple, to the point. Well written. You brought enough negative, the rain, with the positive. It is a beautiful story and I want to believe it really happened so don't tell me if it wasn't real!!! J
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Beautiful. Simple, to the point. Well written. You brought enough negative, the rain, with the positive. It is a beautiful story and I want to believe it really happened so don't tell me if it wasn't real!!! J
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thank you for your kind review and your encouraging words.
Comment from angel123
I really liked your wedding story. It flows nicely with a good beginning. You used descriptive words to describe the rainy day of the wedding. I enjoyed reading your story and I have just one comment. You misspelled church in your second-to-last paragraph. I also like your ending. Not many people stay married these days, so I like that the characters in your story were married for more than thirty years. Best wishes!
angel123
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2018
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I really liked your wedding story. It flows nicely with a good beginning. You used descriptive words to describe the rainy day of the wedding. I enjoyed reading your story and I have just one comment. You misspelled church in your second-to-last paragraph. I also like your ending. Not many people stay married these days, so I like that the characters in your story were married for more than thirty years. Best wishes!
angel123
Comment Written 06-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2018
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Thanks for your kind words and the correction. No matter how many times I proofread I miss something.
Comment from Liberty Justice
You received my thumbs up, but you were already winning by yourself in 1st place. Congrats! Such a sweet accounting of a story of a couple who has stayed together 32 years. You are so blessed, because thousands are not so lucky. WELL DONE. liberty justice
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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You received my thumbs up, but you were already winning by yourself in 1st place. Congrats! Such a sweet accounting of a story of a couple who has stayed together 32 years. You are so blessed, because thousands are not so lucky. WELL DONE. liberty justice
Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the read and your kind words. And you are correct, I do feel blessed.
Comment from Marge Setzer
A very sweet love story. Of course, everyone wants a beautiful sunny day on his wedding day. You produced those rays beautifully by starting the story with an overcast sky and producing the sunshine at just the right time to illuminate the new beginning. Nicely done. There is a little confusion as to tense changes - end of paragraph one: "But now, rain is threatening..." might be smoother in the past tense. "But the rain continued ot threaten..." or something like that. The rest of the piece, except for "Oh, no, not today, "etc. is in past tense. Thanks for sharing your happy time. Marge
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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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A very sweet love story. Of course, everyone wants a beautiful sunny day on his wedding day. You produced those rays beautifully by starting the story with an overcast sky and producing the sunshine at just the right time to illuminate the new beginning. Nicely done. There is a little confusion as to tense changes - end of paragraph one: "But now, rain is threatening..." might be smoother in the past tense. "But the rain continued ot threaten..." or something like that. The rest of the piece, except for "Oh, no, not today, "etc. is in past tense. Thanks for sharing your happy time. Marge
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Comment Written 05-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2018
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I will edit. Thanks.
Comment from Sherman541
Congratulations on 32 years! That was a very heartfelt and beautiful story. Interesting how people meet and how things happen. What a beautiful picture you painted of the church. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Congratulations on 32 years! That was a very heartfelt and beautiful story. Interesting how people meet and how things happen. What a beautiful picture you painted of the church. Good Luck and Best Wishes in the Contest! Sherman541
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the read and the kind words.
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you are very welcome
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Finding Love again or for the first time is refreshing, invigorating, and just Awesome. I like the storyline and flow very much. Thanks for sharing this. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Finding Love again or for the first time is refreshing, invigorating, and just Awesome. I like the storyline and flow very much. Thanks for sharing this. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the read and the encouraging words.
Comment from James H. Oldfield
Excellent, and I particularly loved the final paragraph, a lovely memory.
Nothing at all to fault, precisely the kind of tale to bring a smile to anyone's face.
Great job, and best of luck in the contest.
Take care.
-James
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Excellent, and I particularly loved the final paragraph, a lovely memory.
Nothing at all to fault, precisely the kind of tale to bring a smile to anyone's face.
Great job, and best of luck in the contest.
Take care.
-James
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you, James, for the read and the encouraging words.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You have a good memory but you could never forget your lovely wedding day and now you can look back with fond memories after thirty-two together, a beautiful remembrance and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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You have a good memory but you could never forget your lovely wedding day and now you can look back with fond memories after thirty-two together, a beautiful remembrance and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Dolly, for the read and the encouraging words.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You shared a sweet kiss, unforgettably it was the best time of your life; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck for the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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You shared a sweet kiss, unforgettably it was the best time of your life; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this with us; good luck for the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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Thank you for the read and the encouraging words.
Comment from Mrs. KT
A fine piece of writing that commemorates your wedding...just a few years ago... :)
This would be a lovely piece to share with children and grandchildren - especially in this day and age when so many marriages do not endure.
Best Wishes,
diane
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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A fine piece of writing that commemorates your wedding...just a few years ago... :)
This would be a lovely piece to share with children and grandchildren - especially in this day and age when so many marriages do not endure.
Best Wishes,
diane
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Diane, for the read and the encouraging words.
