Broken Trust
What goes around comes around...8 total reviews
Comment from emptypage
Oh, God... that's the worst. Telling them and then having them take off is bad enough, but to go and tell everyone what you said... despicable. Deplorable.
My brother did that to me. When I was 27 I told him that my mother and her brothers had sexually abused me all my life. He pretended to care, but as soon as we parted, he told my mother, my uncles, my sister, my dad, everybody. Not to help, but to decry it all as untrue. He hated my uncles, yet he talked to them too.
I'm so sorry for what you've endured.Didn't mean to blab on. Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Oh, God... that's the worst. Telling them and then having them take off is bad enough, but to go and tell everyone what you said... despicable. Deplorable.
My brother did that to me. When I was 27 I told him that my mother and her brothers had sexually abused me all my life. He pretended to care, but as soon as we parted, he told my mother, my uncles, my sister, my dad, everybody. Not to help, but to decry it all as untrue. He hated my uncles, yet he talked to them too.
I'm so sorry for what you've endured.Didn't mean to blab on. Excellent writing.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Thank you for taking time to read my poem. I'm so sorry for what you went through, you must be a very strong person.I hope all is well with you now.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was very good and the story it tells was well conceived. I did feel the impeccable rhyme scheme and great meter you managed to create in all of the stanzas preceding the very last was excellent, but to me it seemed to deteriorate just a bit in the very last stanza.
Still, it's an excellent entry in the contest and should be a top contender.
Good luck!
~Dean ð???
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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This was very good and the story it tells was well conceived. I did feel the impeccable rhyme scheme and great meter you managed to create in all of the stanzas preceding the very last was excellent, but to me it seemed to deteriorate just a bit in the very last stanza.
Still, it's an excellent entry in the contest and should be a top contender.
Good luck!
~Dean ð???
Comment Written 02-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to read my poem.I always appreciate hearing from fellow writers.
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Sure thing, that's what we're here for.
~Dean :)
Comment from jenintorre
Hey that certainly is betrayal. This is a very well crafted poem with excellent rhyme and rhythm. Great artwork too. I wish you the best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Hey that certainly is betrayal. This is a very well crafted poem with excellent rhyme and rhythm. Great artwork too. I wish you the best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Thanks so much for the great review, it's always appreciated.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written poem about betrayal you have penned for the writing prompt. You used good wording and the art work went fine with it too. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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This is a very well written poem about betrayal you have penned for the writing prompt. You used good wording and the art work went fine with it too. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Thank you, I always like to hear the opinions of fellow writers.
Comment from Debbie Pope
Excellent entry for the betrayal contest. This woman has experienced the ultimate betrayal. I can feel her hurt, walk through her emotions with her. Your poem does this. The second part shows the perfect response for betrayal. I might even leave off the last three lines. It's your last stanza. You could take liberties. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Excellent entry for the betrayal contest. This woman has experienced the ultimate betrayal. I can feel her hurt, walk through her emotions with her. Your poem does this. The second part shows the perfect response for betrayal. I might even leave off the last three lines. It's your last stanza. You could take liberties. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Thanks,I really appreciate you taking time to read and review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks despite imposing trust upon, he acted betrayal, broken trust, now again poet trusts the same person; well said, well done; Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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This speaks despite imposing trust upon, he acted betrayal, broken trust, now again poet trusts the same person; well said, well done; Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018
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Thank you, it means a lot to hear from you:)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Betrayal Poetry' writing prompt.
Well written and a clear picture in your verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Betrayal Poetry' writing prompt.
Well written and a clear picture in your verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thanks for such an excellent review. It's always appreciated.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like the message that your work is saying. Trust that's breached is hard to regain again. You stayed on point of the message of this throughout. I enjoyed reading and thinking on the truths that this poem displayed. The artwork was spot on. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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I like the message that your work is saying. Trust that's breached is hard to regain again. You stayed on point of the message of this throughout. I enjoyed reading and thinking on the truths that this poem displayed. The artwork was spot on. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2018
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Thank you, I appreciate you taking time to read and review my poem.
