Looking back from a train
Have to move on. Never to return.9 total reviews
Comment from Mark Valentine
What an awesome nonet! Wish I had a six left to appropriately reward it. It's hard to write one of these that evokes as much emotion as yours does. You can almost feel the heartbreak of a child leaving behind everything he/she has known, for reasons he/she can't understand. The image of those things literally getting smaller through the train window is a wonderful way to portray this.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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What an awesome nonet! Wish I had a six left to appropriately reward it. It's hard to write one of these that evokes as much emotion as yours does. You can almost feel the heartbreak of a child leaving behind everything he/she has known, for reasons he/she can't understand. The image of those things literally getting smaller through the train window is a wonderful way to portray this.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much Mark for your wonderful comments.Take care Jen.
Comment from Mara Coy
How hard is to move on from the places we have known. Somehow a part of us stays behind, while we keep the memories in our minds. Same ideology applies to other aspects of our life, not only letting go a place, but a person, or a situation. Always with a new landscape at a view.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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How hard is to move on from the places we have known. Somehow a part of us stays behind, while we keep the memories in our minds. Same ideology applies to other aspects of our life, not only letting go a place, but a person, or a situation. Always with a new landscape at a view.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from angel123
I really enjoyed reading your Nonet poem. It flows well and held my attention progressively with the moving of the train. Leaving all things behind starting anew. Your poem is very well written and well received. I also like your great artwork choice.
Angel123
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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I really enjoyed reading your Nonet poem. It flows well and held my attention progressively with the moving of the train. Leaving all things behind starting anew. Your poem is very well written and well received. I also like your great artwork choice.
Angel123
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Nonet and a magical trip on a train where landscapes pass us as we go to another place far away. We leave behind friend and foe to start a new life.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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A very well-written Nonet and a magical trip on a train where landscapes pass us as we go to another place far away. We leave behind friend and foe to start a new life.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Many tbanks for your comments
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
Very moving. Creative as well with using a train and looking back from said train on one's life/mistakes.
If I may: The first line isn't parallel. Easy fix: churches
Best wishes,
diane
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello!
Very moving. Creative as well with using a train and looking back from said train on one's life/mistakes.
If I may: The first line isn't parallel. Easy fix: churches
Best wishes,
diane
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Many thanks for your comments.
Comment from tfawcus
An emotive poem that strikes to the heart of the issues involved in making a fresh start. Looking backwards, there is all the regret, and there are all the memories of happiness. I guess the only way forward is to climb on that freight train, taking no baggage, and to head out west without looking back! Or east, as the case may be! LOL
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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An emotive poem that strikes to the heart of the issues involved in making a fresh start. Looking backwards, there is all the regret, and there are all the memories of happiness. I guess the only way forward is to climb on that freight train, taking no baggage, and to head out west without looking back! Or east, as the case may be! LOL
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Many thanks for your review.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Nonet Poetry writing prompt.
Well said and a good and clear message.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Nonet Poetry writing prompt.
Well said and a good and clear message.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from RodG
An interesting way to look at changes, as viewed from a train traveling a different direction from where you've been. The Speaker seems realistic: one has to move on. The nonet format is a perfect fit for this.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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An interesting way to look at changes, as viewed from a train traveling a different direction from where you've been. The Speaker seems realistic: one has to move on. The nonet format is a perfect fit for this.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Many thanks.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a fine move on and never to return Nonet poem, well said, well done, thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This is a fine move on and never to return Nonet poem, well said, well done, thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you. Much appreciated.
