Bittersweet Revenge
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Hidden Secrets"She's back ready for revenge.
7 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Technically sound write this instalment. I don't think there's any basic alterations in need of attention. Nice one.
The balance is good in this part in regard to the two scenes portrayed.
Nice one
GMG
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2018
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Hi there,
Technically sound write this instalment. I don't think there's any basic alterations in need of attention. Nice one.
The balance is good in this part in regard to the two scenes portrayed.
Nice one
GMG
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2018
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Thank you for such a fantastic review. No markups this time? I finally did it? I'm doing one heck of a happy dance. You made my week.
Thank you so much for all your help and support, I couldn't have done it without you, take care.
Comment from apky
Fabulous chapter, very well written, engaging, pacey and I enjoyed reading it. Your dialogue here was even more authentic-sounding and partinent. I really found nothing to correct or critique in this post, Misty..
Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Fabulous chapter, very well written, engaging, pacey and I enjoyed reading it. Your dialogue here was even more authentic-sounding and partinent. I really found nothing to correct or critique in this post, Misty..
Well done!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your six-star and your wonderful review. I was worried about the reaction on the Max and Rachel part. Since it didn't move the story along, didn't have any great value.
Thank you again, for all your encouragement, help and support, it means a lot to me, take care.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
So Rachel has an alibi, but Walter's neighbor says the only person at his house was a woman. Gets more confusing every day. We need a hint. I'd like to buy a vowel for 200. :)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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So Rachel has an alibi, but Walter's neighbor says the only person at his house was a woman. Gets more confusing every day. We need a hint. I'd like to buy a vowel for 200. :)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your wonderful review and all your support it means a lot to me. Hint huh, I'll see what I can do. Maybe I'll tell you the hint, keep Gerty in the dark. I'm determined to stump her. Miss, I already have it figured out, yeah we'll see lol.
Thanks again for all your support, take care
Comment from Ric Myworld
This is one of those chapters that just about anyone who reads it will be able to relate in some way or another. Fun and slap happy, then, right back to the serious makes for a nice break from the action. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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This is one of those chapters that just about anyone who reads it will be able to relate in some way or another. Fun and slap happy, then, right back to the serious makes for a nice break from the action. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 26-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your review I am so glad you liked it. The Webbs are a fun-loving happy family. A favorite I've used in a lot of my older stories.
Thanks again for all your support, take care.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
I liked.
Dr Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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This was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
I liked.
Dr Ricky 1024
Comment Written 26-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your great review. I'm so glad you're enjoying the story. Because it was my first story (edited countless times after.) It has a special place in my heart.
Thank you again for your wonderful review, take care.
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R have a beautiful day my dear dr. Ricky 1024
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Always a pleasure.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today.
Comment from royowen
So Joe and Jerry are on the trail of the murderer, and Joe investigates Rachel, getting her to describe where and when she was about the time of the murders, deciding that she feels for Max. Then they question Mrs Bennett to find out more on the description and car of the visitor to Walter, well done , excellent progress, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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So Joe and Jerry are on the trail of the murderer, and Joe investigates Rachel, getting her to describe where and when she was about the time of the murders, deciding that she feels for Max. Then they question Mrs Bennett to find out more on the description and car of the visitor to Walter, well done , excellent progress, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your review, I'm so glad you liked it. The killer is getting too confident and a little sloppy.
Thank you again for all your support, it means a lot to me, take care.
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Most welcome
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Yes she is
Comment from Henry King
As I am starting several chapters into this mystery, I had to reread what is offered two times to get a partial feel for the characters. I like the twists on Rachel, she was nervous while being questioned. She wanted the love that her father and Bonnie demonstrated. Something is going on there. The odd clues and type of body wounds are striking. Does the description fit Rachel and her car? Excellent writing with the possible direction diverting.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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As I am starting several chapters into this mystery, I had to reread what is offered two times to get a partial feel for the characters. I like the twists on Rachel, she was nervous while being questioned. She wanted the love that her father and Bonnie demonstrated. Something is going on there. The odd clues and type of body wounds are striking. Does the description fit Rachel and her car? Excellent writing with the possible direction diverting.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your kind review. Yes, Rachel does own a blue neon and she does have short brown hair. She was sexually abused by her real mom's boyfriends often as a child. Bonnie is her stepmom, Max her real dad, but he didn't know about Rachel until Jeanie, Rachel's real mom passed from a drug od. There have been six killings four fits the same MO. The other two was only stabbed 22 times, not 33. Max Rachel's dad was the first to be attacked, the reason why he's in the hospital. The only clues so far are the neon, description, dress, wig, makeup and they all somehow tie into Jeanie and Frank's bar. the rest has been speculation on the cops part.
Hope that helps. Thanks again for the great review, take care.
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L.C. Hayden was my writing instructor. I better get a mystery right.
