A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
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Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Craig;
Great way to use your new word. I love a good pirate story. Your alliteration and hitching meter made me feel like I was onboard a ship. Well done,
~patty~
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hi, Craig;
Great way to use your new word. I love a good pirate story. Your alliteration and hitching meter made me feel like I was onboard a ship. Well done,
~patty~
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thanks very much Patty, I appreciate the kind comments. Craig
Comment from Pearl Edwards
When I got down to manubiary I figured that would have to be today's word. I'm sure I won't remember that one. This was a great tale of piracy even though it ended in sadness. Personally I'm glad your alliteration button broke, well done with this one Craig. Really good fun,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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When I got down to manubiary I figured that would have to be today's word. I'm sure I won't remember that one. This was a great tale of piracy even though it ended in sadness. Personally I'm glad your alliteration button broke, well done with this one Craig. Really good fun,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2018
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You were on the side of the pirates, Valda??? (Yeah, you're not the only one). Thanks for the lovely review! Craig
Comment from Gloria ....
No fair! You have an alliteration button? Is it on the regular keyboard or have you got one of those souped up ones?
All jokes aside, this is a well-crafted poem with all the allits in the right place and the defining characteristics contained within their right manubiary clarity.
Excellent job, Craig.
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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No fair! You have an alliteration button? Is it on the regular keyboard or have you got one of those souped up ones?
All jokes aside, this is a well-crafted poem with all the allits in the right place and the defining characteristics contained within their right manubiary clarity.
Excellent job, Craig.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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My keyboard has fuel injection, a four barrel Holly carburettor and turbocharger! (Spot the deliberate error). It not only has an alliteration button, but an ejector seat button, and yes, you guessed it... THAT big red button!
Many thanks for the lovely review, Gloria :)
Craig
Comment from Dawn Munro
Okay, here's my thing - I like alliteration, when it's done properly of course, and you don't use any. I need to ask, WHY NOT? !!! (HAHAHahahahahahaha! OMG, perfect - simply amazing alliteration, and smooth as Yul Brynner's scalp. Adorable story, too.)
(Wadda ya mean, you don't know who Yul Brynner is?) LOL
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Okay, here's my thing - I like alliteration, when it's done properly of course, and you don't use any. I need to ask, WHY NOT? !!! (HAHAHahahahahahaha! OMG, perfect - simply amazing alliteration, and smooth as Yul Brynner's scalp. Adorable story, too.)
(Wadda ya mean, you don't know who Yul Brynner is?) LOL
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Isn't Yul Brynner the worst product representative ever? I have no idea what Brylcreem were thinking offering him that multi-million dollar contract. He should have stuck to singing "Shall We Dance" with Deborah Kerr on The Magnificent Seven.
Many thanks for the wonderful review, Dawn :)
Cheers,
Craig
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Comment from --Turtle.
Hi, Craig,
This poem was an entertaining exercise for mouth and ear. Playful, silly ... and easy to read. I actually could picture this in print. Inappropriate bedtime stories for toddlers, just like cartoons, with things going over the kids heads. All the delicious vocabulary and sounds and alliteration.
Yeah, you can only read so many cat in the hat books, and when your kid is verbal, you want something that sounds fun... but also entertains you, to read.
That's probably why I enjoyed reading the old school, unsanitized fairy tales,
Read aloud, this poem is high-sea adventuring, taken down by the law. I really enjoyed this one, and even though it's silly, it's packed with images.
Nigel gave them notice,
(the only thing I paused for myself was wondering if it would make sense to use: Nigel gave the notice) Not that I think it should change, but the thought passed my mind, and I figured to share my thought.
I had a lot of fun reading this though, and was very pleased with the alliteration and flow, and I also might be partial to pirates...
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Hi, Craig,
This poem was an entertaining exercise for mouth and ear. Playful, silly ... and easy to read. I actually could picture this in print. Inappropriate bedtime stories for toddlers, just like cartoons, with things going over the kids heads. All the delicious vocabulary and sounds and alliteration.
Yeah, you can only read so many cat in the hat books, and when your kid is verbal, you want something that sounds fun... but also entertains you, to read.
That's probably why I enjoyed reading the old school, unsanitized fairy tales,
Read aloud, this poem is high-sea adventuring, taken down by the law. I really enjoyed this one, and even though it's silly, it's packed with images.
Nigel gave them notice,
(the only thing I paused for myself was wondering if it would make sense to use: Nigel gave the notice) Not that I think it should change, but the thought passed my mind, and I figured to share my thought.
I had a lot of fun reading this though, and was very pleased with the alliteration and flow, and I also might be partial to pirates...
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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"Inappropriate bedtime stories for toddlers" - I love it! How are your illustrative skills? We could start tomorrow!
I'm considering "N-navy on starboard bow," Nigel gave notice, Would that work better?
Many thanks for the lovely review, Turtle. As for being partial to pirates, who'd have thought you'd like the bad boys?
Cheers,
Craig
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: D Some days, I'm pretty art savvy,
And yes for the Nigel gave notice. It does sound better that way. I like it better than with the 'Nigel gave the or them notice'
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Terrific story in a super-alliterative poem. You must have an amazing imagination to shoot out these stanzas in rapid fire, one after another. You are really getting good mileage from that book! :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Terrific story in a super-alliterative poem. You must have an amazing imagination to shoot out these stanzas in rapid fire, one after another. You are really getting good mileage from that book! :)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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I'm getting good headaches from that book, trying to come up with something every day! Thanks for the lovely comment, Phyllis - much appreciated. Craig
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I know there is a form for the words you used in each stanza but I don't remember what it is called but it truly makes description take on a whole new meaning. Nicely done
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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I know there is a form for the words you used in each stanza but I don't remember what it is called but it truly makes description take on a whole new meaning. Nicely done
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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I don't know either. I didn't even know it was a "thing" lol Many thanks, Craig
Comment from Joy Graham
This is fun :) Who can resist a good pirate gang? Not me! All this came out of the word of the day, manubiary.
My favorite line:
- "Danny the deckhand was dirty and dangerous..." - I can picture this guy on his hands and knees scrubbing the deck while at sea and going over his skills and plans for the next death by derringer.
This was most enjoyable.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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This is fun :) Who can resist a good pirate gang? Not me! All this came out of the word of the day, manubiary.
My favorite line:
- "Danny the deckhand was dirty and dangerous..." - I can picture this guy on his hands and knees scrubbing the deck while at sea and going over his skills and plans for the next death by derringer.
This was most enjoyable.
Joy xx
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Thanks very much, Joy. It's the quiet ones you've got to watch. Cheers, Craig
Comment from Carolyn Shelton
What a creative way to use your new book. Sounds like a great gift!
Enjoyed the poem.
Very well done at using the same letters in each stanza.
Looking forward to seeing more creative use of rare words from your book.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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What a creative way to use your new book. Sounds like a great gift!
Enjoyed the poem.
Very well done at using the same letters in each stanza.
Looking forward to seeing more creative use of rare words from your book.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Thanks very much, Carolyn. I appreciate the lovely comments. Craig
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and a very strange word that you worked in very well in the poem. Great alliteration right through. All of our lives are a daily struggle to get through the month.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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A very well-written poem and a very strange word that you worked in very well in the poem. Great alliteration right through. All of our lives are a daily struggle to get through the month.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Thanks very much Sandra. I really appreciate your continued support in reviewing my poems. Cheers, Craig
