Comment from tempeste

Exceptional

A great essay ..love the deception idea. ( And what a coincident I just wrote something yesterday using the same method ...biggrin )


The first paragraph I thought you were talking in a poetic way about a man entering in a woman's life / heart ..

The second people's gossip , warnings that he is not someone for her....a charmer yes but also a drifter .. Someone without roots.

Then of course the surprise in the third paragraph ..

The "overly long hair "... that was misleading ..the biggest deception and it kept me in the dark a little bit longer.

Yes strays have a way to steal one's heart.

We ended up with two and both made their way with their charms into our lives.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2019

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reply by the author on 16-Nov-2019

Haha... I am delighted, Franca, that you found this one and enjoyed it. I did enjoy writing one with a surprise ending. It was fun. Thank you very much.

Melissa

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Well now, isn't this adorable? Just a couple of quick suggestions - first paragraph - instead of making it a simile ("like"), why not "...in it came (with) a stormy day?
Next - "Her life was too busy..." - omit "this" so that it's grammatically correct. The meaning doesn't change. Just be sure to place a comma after 'busy', yes?

I loved it - great 'twist' ending. :) Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thanks for the great suggestions and good review. Really appreciate it!

reply by Dawn Munro on 06-Jan-2018

Very much my pleasure.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

Nice job here. The reader is led to believe you are referring to a metaphorical door, letting love in but it flips round to be something much more physical.

very nice job
GMG

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

Cute :) You had me wondering until the end. I raised my eyebrows when she brought out the towel and rubbed him down. Then when you mentioned he was a dog, well, I'm all about the awwwwwwww's. This is cute, you made me smile. Best wishes in the contest.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the good review. Regards!

reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018

Thanks so much for the good review. Regards!

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

Oh, this is really excellent. I love the surprise twist at the end. To find out that it was a dog made me smile. Very well written and presented, and a pleasure to read! ~~ Connie

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!

Comment from clsandau

Excellent

What a neat story to go with this writing prompt. You had me wondering for awhile, but I was pleasantly surprised to see what actually did wander into your place. Well done! It reads very smoothly and leads up to a surprise ending. Perfect. Carol

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Dear Anonymous Author;
Thank you for sharing this delightful story with a slight twist at the end. Dogs are indeed one of those creatures that can make you fall in love at first sight. Well done and good luck in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

This is a good entry for the 'She Didn't Lock Her Door' writing prompt.
Well done, with a nice twist at the end.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!

Comment from Cass Carlton

Excellent

I have read little stories like this before, but still the ending came as a delightful surprise. It is well written with carefully chosen words that don't give the ending away, but become clear when they are read again. I can see quite clearly the small dog, sitting at the door peering in hopefully, his brown eyes full of longing, but resigned to being shoo-ed away as had happened so many times before. Then suddenly he is enveloped in a warm, human smelling towel. A voice speaks soft words to him and suddenly he knows . He is home at last. Cheers Cass

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This is a nice romantic story, well done, she forgot to close the door, at night the rascal appeared and they had a lifelong love affair in cold rainy night; nicely stated. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks so much!