Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hey, Craig,

Been catching up on the days I missed, mostly for the enjoyment of reading your stuff. The pace of this poem has a ditty appeal about it. Snappy. Free and loose with a pleasing rhyme scheme and story-joke appeal with a satisfying punchline end. The teacher's day was spike-boggled, and though her name changed from Mrs. Wainwrite to Wendy... actually that's the only wondering that I left the poem with... her name. ... which means wagon builder, it being changed to Wendy ... by the second set, I realized that Wendy was mrs. Wainwrite.


Only one suggestion from me:

Said Johnny to Wendy(,) (suggest the comma, even with the turn of phrase, because ... same reason as Johnny said, "Hi." Even if there's not a heard pause)

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018

Hi Turtle,

You do seem to have had a busy reviewing day! I'm always pleased to get your reviews (is it sad to say I look forward to them?)

I've inserted the suggested comma - thanks again, for a great review.

Craig

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

OK so we can expect one of these a day for a while - that sounds like a challenge for you. Let's hope you're not found deficient and sent packing.

Actually, I do a challenge like this occasionally in an English class when we have spare time. I challenge the kids to use a dictionary to find a word that I can't spell or define. Mostly I come out on top - they almost always think that long words are the most difficult when often they're the easiest. It's the little obscure ones that are trickiest.

Anyway, your poem is lots of fun with the inherent humour of the student outwitting the teacher. I look forward to the next instalment.

And what a great Christmas present!

Steve

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

I'm not confident of making it to the end of the week :)

I do like stories with a touch of the mutine about them.

Thanks for a fun review, Steve.

Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well- a written poem and explanation of the meaning of the word spike-boggle and to use it in your poem to make it an excellent example how to use this rare word.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks for the kind review, Sandra. Much appreciated, as always. Craig

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

LOL ... you never know what sassy students get up to at school.

Love the humor, Craig. My favorite part is:

"her confusion soon made the class goggle:
"A switch has a toggle
each boyscout a woggle ...
what the dicken's in all's a spike boggle?"

(Excellent mono-rhyming, and "woggle" made me laugh. I had to look up that word. So, you've taught me two new words today.) ~~ Connie

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

What were you expecting to find for "woggle", Connie? Shame on you! Thanks for the great fun review. All the best, Craig

reply by bichonfrisegirl on 04-Jan-2018

Hahaha, you read my mind. :)

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Craig;
Another great word!! I envy you that book. Using a new word in a poem is more difficult than prose, I think. However, spike-boggle is one of those words that really fits here on FanStory.

Thank you so much for sharing,

~patty~

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks so much, Patty. It was a bit of a cheat, I'll admit - and there'll probably be more cheating before I'm done :) Much appreciated - Craig

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Craig,

Well that would have been a difficult one to shoe-horn into the piece under other circumstances...lol

If these are the early ones I can't wait for some of the later ones.

Nice job
LOL
G

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

There are some doosies in there, Gman - that's for sure. Thanks for the fun review - Craig

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi CD. Oh yeah I am so on board with this concept. I love these cool words and to see them revived and put to use again is not only smart but a great way to expand vocabulary.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Just ask me in 12 months how many of them I remember, Kiwi. On second thought - maybe don't! Thanks for the kind review - Craig

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Wow! I like the sound of that book, I may get it! A delightful write and I just love words and their meanings and to learn more of them would be great, you have made my day, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks for the lovely review, Dolly. I can definitely recommend the book - there's a lot more to the descriptions than I can use here. All the best - Craig.

Comment from apky

Excellent

Great poem and I like the way you have a go
at social ciriticism. I've often felt very much like
that poor teacher when my son comes at me with
what I call social networks language that do indeed
leave me wondering who, between us, is the idiot.

Johnny laid the word down,
Wendy started to frown--
her confusion soon made the class goggle

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks for the thoughtful review - much appreciated :) Craig

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

This is a well written and fun poem with a clear story.
Good new word usage, good rhyming.
Very nicely done.
Thank you for sharing these with us.
Sharon

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 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018

Thanks for the kind words, Sharon. Much appreciated - Craig