Spider and the Fly
A fable38 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
A classic tale of intrigue, brilliantly told, cleverly sold.
Step into my parlor sad the spider to the fly
The fly said no, no, because if I do then I'm gonna die
The spider said, aw girl, now you know that is just a lie
As the fly lay dying, she said, one of these days, you are gonna get your due
The spder grinned and said, that may be so, but it won't be from you.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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A classic tale of intrigue, brilliantly told, cleverly sold.
Step into my parlor sad the spider to the fly
The fly said no, no, because if I do then I'm gonna die
The spider said, aw girl, now you know that is just a lie
As the fly lay dying, she said, one of these days, you are gonna get your due
The spder grinned and said, that may be so, but it won't be from you.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Wow! Thank you so much for the six star review! I am honored.
Comment from oliver818
I love the way you used description in this poem. It is very evocative and flows very well. I particularly enjoyed the end. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
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I love the way you used description in this poem. It is very evocative and flows very well. I particularly enjoyed the end. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for your time and kind review.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Clockwise: amazing poem about the spider and fly.
I like the mystery. Did the spider get eaten or the fly?
I think you're the spider and the fly got twisted up. Clever.
Happy New Year. flylikeaneagle - nancy
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Clockwise: amazing poem about the spider and fly.
I like the mystery. Did the spider get eaten or the fly?
I think you're the spider and the fly got twisted up. Clever.
Happy New Year. flylikeaneagle - nancy
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for your time and kind review.
Comment from mermaids
I see no need for improvement here. You have created a clever and unique poem. I am cheering for the spider, flies are annoying. You have a smooth flow of words that makes this poem fun to read out loud. I also admire your use of rhyming words.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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I see no need for improvement here. You have created a clever and unique poem. I am cheering for the spider, flies are annoying. You have a smooth flow of words that makes this poem fun to read out loud. I also admire your use of rhyming words.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for your time and kind review.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Excellent. Blends beauty with the fright of the predator and prey. This writer knows how to use creativity in a most unusual and unique way. I enjoyed this poem and the choice of the photo that is matched to it. Good job!
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Excellent. Blends beauty with the fright of the predator and prey. This writer knows how to use creativity in a most unusual and unique way. I enjoyed this poem and the choice of the photo that is matched to it. Good job!
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your time and lovely review.
Comment from Janet Foor
A very clever and creative poem full of twist and turns. I enjoyed the ride.
Excellent presentation, rhyme and alliteration for a fun fable (maybe).
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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A very clever and creative poem full of twist and turns. I enjoyed the ride.
Excellent presentation, rhyme and alliteration for a fun fable (maybe).
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your time and lovely review.
Comment from dragonpoet
It sounds to me like the fly returned unknowingly because it was dark and got caught in the mended web. Maybe the fly just thought it was his time to die so he got caught again. I like the shore lines and the every other line rhyme scheme,
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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It sounds to me like the fly returned unknowingly because it was dark and got caught in the mended web. Maybe the fly just thought it was his time to die so he got caught again. I like the shore lines and the every other line rhyme scheme,
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your time and lovely review!
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No problem.
dragonpoet
Comment from Joy Graham
That is a gorgeous picture. It's a great advertisement for your poem. I haven't met you before, Clockwise. Nice to meet you.
Wow! This is extraordinary poetry. You write with ease and tell a fascinating story. Your picture choice is brilliant and I was not disappointed when I read your poem. I love your lines and format. It's unique and refreshing. You have fine rhymes that was more than satisfying to a rhyme lover like me. If you write like this all the time, you'll get tired of my reviews lol!!! I'll pester you.
Six stars because this is amazing and I'm in love with your words.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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That is a gorgeous picture. It's a great advertisement for your poem. I haven't met you before, Clockwise. Nice to meet you.
Wow! This is extraordinary poetry. You write with ease and tell a fascinating story. Your picture choice is brilliant and I was not disappointed when I read your poem. I love your lines and format. It's unique and refreshing. You have fine rhymes that was more than satisfying to a rhyme lover like me. If you write like this all the time, you'll get tired of my reviews lol!!! I'll pester you.
Six stars because this is amazing and I'm in love with your words.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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The pleasure of meeting you is mine, Joy. Thank you so much for the six star review. I am honored. Its true, I write with my ear instead of my eye, so I tend toward rythmn and rhyme.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the spider and the fly. Each have a role to play. The spider is higher ranked on the food chain so the fly becomes the prey in the spider's web.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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A very well-written poem about the spider and the fly. Each have a role to play. The spider is higher ranked on the food chain so the fly becomes the prey in the spider's web.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
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Thank you for your time and lovely review.
Comment from frogbook
This is a great write-so clever and enthralling. Twists and turns and thoughts that churn. Great question-the spider or the fly? Sometimes hard to tell. Simple elegant and excellent.
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This is a great write-so clever and enthralling. Twists and turns and thoughts that churn. Great question-the spider or the fly? Sometimes hard to tell. Simple elegant and excellent.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018
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I am honored by your six star review. Thank you so very much!
