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A Cold Winter's Day

A Love Poem

8 total reviews 
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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Hello Mystery Poet. Well you definitely have warmed up the fire with this beauty. You make your reader taste the hot chocolate and the silky feel of your lover's hair. Well done and good luck. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018


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Comment from nbonner
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The imagery used brings the poem alive. Nicely written. It speaks of passion and warmth, love and strength. Thank you for sharing. NB

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017


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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Nothing like love to warm the cockles of your heart and give you peace of mind! That's what your poem did, it soothed and gave me a tranquil feeling, happy new year, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017


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Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Passionate Love in Black and White' writing prompt.
Well written, easy to read and understand.
Your story is well told in your poem.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017


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Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

of course it is entirely up to the author how they display or present their work but I found the structuring of this a little odd. Starting new sentences with word at the end of one line gives an odd flow to the piece.

For example, I think something like this may be smoother in the first verse -

The smell of the fireplace burning,
to warm the cold chilled air.
The flames, and the crackling of fire,
soothes the mind,
while you
run your fingers through my hair.

This can be any style so you're not stuck with trying to wrangle it into a particular format.

The words are great and the theme speaks well.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017


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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks how the feeling, romantic essence and manifestation, sweet is and scintillating, touch and smell, all remind passionate love, in black and white, I liked the sense and sentiment shared. DR ALCREATOR Happy New Year 2018

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017


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Comment from oliver818
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I like this sweet, winter poem. I agree, there's nothing like snuggling up with your lover on a cold winter evening. Your poem flows well and i really like the imagery. Thanks for sharing and have a really great day

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017


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    Thanks so much for your kind words.
Comment from zanya
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It's refreshing to read a poem about love and its true manifestation in all its profundity, symplicity but most of all its mystified'your eyes speak to me silently'

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017


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    Thanks so much for your kind words.