Comment from RGstar

Excellent

VIRTUAL SIX
You moved me with this, Ricky. no strings or thrills attached.
Yes an account, yet the aura, the truth, the emotions were as natural as the beauty you just described, and to top it all you did not look for sympathy, for the deaths were mentioned, really, in notes.

My respect and dignity goes out to you with a little tear in eye, author. My condolences, as well my respect for what you did and do.

Good luck with this in the competition, though that does not paint the whole picture.

My best wishes to you and family.
Have a great new year you all.

RGstar

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018

Thank You store for your wonderful insightful review the next one even better possibly entitled...
"Blessed and Peaceful Bliss?"
Dr Ricky 1024

Comment from Halfree

Average

The story, heart rendering, presentation needs some work. Question, "Why all the quotation marks, are they necessary?
I think this is a story that suffers in the poetic form. It would be better served as straight narrative.
And I think it is a story that needs to be told...the poetic form detracts from the story, does not flow smoothly.
Needs work. Try a rewrite as a straight narrative.



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 Comment Written 05-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018

Hello and thanks for your review but fanstory seems to have disagreed with this average three star review since they just gave it a blue ribbon but in return I reviewed one of your peace is also so again thanks for your review and enjoy mine dr. Ricky 1024

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This seems like a prose poem. I like the family history in it but I don't think you need all the years. It is good that you gave organs. Sorry for your losses.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018

Thanks Dragon toilet cuz I only need a few more reviews to get a blue ribbon on this and it's I've already gotten to this morning talk to Ricky 1024

reply by dragonpoet on 05-Jan-2018

You're welcome, Ricky.

dragon

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

Hi Ricky. I think it is an incredibly generous and compassionate thing to do when you donate organs to give someone else a chance. Your son would have been so proud of you! xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018

I do believe that people who passed away can still see what happens below rather their spiritual children ghosts aberrations circular orbs on a picture I still believe the present is this even as gods were angels I think my son Jason is Rock more than any of his friends below here would ever be able to give me credit for dr. Ricky 1024 and thanks for the review

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Organ transplants are now an everyday occurrence. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018

Thanks Charlie for this doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

(An apparent double Heart attack, self-induced, suicide."
"As a result and caused by lack of her medications."
As always I feel so sad reading this. It always reminds me how lucky I am not to have passed in the same way but makes me wonder how the good die so young, it's heart-breaking that you lost your two beloveds but through them people have lived and your story is amazing. I am so sorry though for your great loss. Love and regards Meia x

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018

My deceased wife Carolyn and son Jason and myself appreciate this kind review dr. Ricky 1024

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I am so sorry to hear your tragic story Ricky and your write is heartfelt and its difficult to comprehend what you must be going through, I wish you luck in 2018, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2018

Hi Dolly funny how you just picked this up because I just reposted and pump it up and there's like a hundred and forty five other pieces before it on the page in the book answer book probably like on Page 6 walls Forever at the end but I'll work on that reset it up again try to get in all time best I think I got a blue ribbon but anyhow thanks for your time and keep warm have a wonderful and happy New Year talk to Ricky 1024

Comment from Brigitte Elko

Excellent

Wow, an incredible story to lift the reader up. The organ donation suggestion is relevant and hopefully taken to heart.
Blessings and a Happy New Year,
Brigitte

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2017

Thanks Bridget you don't know how much I appreciate that this was one of my many many dedications to him talk to Ricky 1024

reply by Brigitte Elko on 31-Dec-2017

I am actually going to register due to your inspiration.
Brigitte

reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018

Thanks for that Bridget just go to Gift of Life. Com and on the website explain to you how to do it all talk to Ricky 1024

reply by Brigitte Elko on 01-Jan-2018

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello author
YES you wrote a very up lifting spiritual free verse poem
about your Son Jason that with out a doubt uplift lonely hearts calm ones soul

Gert

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017

Thanks again Kirk for enjoying this poem about my son Jason dr. Ricky 1024

reply by Gert sherwood on 28-Dec-2017

You are welcome Ricky
GERT

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written heartfelt poem. Jason become the hero you dreamed of your whole life. He saved four other lives while he lost his own. A modern hero indeed and I am sure his soul is not lost.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017

Thanks Andrew that means a lot to me and congratulations on being in the top 10 code list for year 2017 dr. Ricky 1024