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A Difference of One

After releasing grief Rose learns life can have purpose.

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Comment from estory
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I thought you did a great job with this story. it has it all; pointed and telling dialogue, transcendent images, and a great movement from despair to hope. I think the scene of Christmas, all the uplifting symbols of the holiday, contrasted with the sad and abandoned mood of Rose, who feels alone and that no one loves her. The twitching face of the postmaster, Smythe, is that sinister element that seeks to manipulate her life. And then there is the moment when she goes into the church, at the point of despair in the wintery landscape, and has that epiphany moment that brings peace into her soul, as she realizes God loves her. And then Christmas morning her stepson shows up and transforms her life, and the treachery of the postmaster is revealed and she is released from it. Great narrative, great use of symbolism, and terrific use of dialogue make the characters come alive and create energy in the story, drawing us into the action. This is on another level from most of the stories I have read here. estory

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
    Thank you for taking the time to read my story and for your insightful and in-depth review. Your encouraging words made my day!
reply by estory on 27-Dec-2017
    Thanks so much for the member cent pump and the reviewing contest vote. It was a pleasure to read this and I wish you lots of luck with it. your writing is a little further along than most on this site. estory
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
    You're welcome.
Comment from apky
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I think this story presents and represents a very good image and realities of Christmas alone. The story is touching to the reader, reminds us all that out there, while we're showing off the best decorated tallest Christmas tree, too many of us are out in the cold.

Well done.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
    Good point taken - quite apropos. Thanks for taking the time to read my story and your kind words.
Comment from giraffmang
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Hi there,

A nice piece in the spirit of Christmas indeed.

Another Christmas alone, sighed Rose - this made me wonder if it was thought or dialogue. If dialogue it needs the marks. if thought, sighed is an odd choice.

She wouldn't be utterly alone, for sorrow, grief and loneliness were daily companions. - I would suggest leaving out loneliness here as it strikes odd as she wouldn't be lonely because she was lonely.

"Mrs. Fletcher, would you like . . ." Bertie stopped abruptly - the dash may be better than the ellipsis here for signalling an abrupt halt.

She traveled back in time in her mind. Memories flooded her soul - the first sentence here is almost made redundant by the second.

Life isn't fair, Rose quietly murmured - should be some speech marks here.

in neglecting her the ast two holidays - last.

You have a tendency to rely on adverbs, especially around the speech tags.

Although she loathed going to the post - post office?

So the boys turned up anyway, nice.

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 Comment Written 27-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
    I appreciate your kind and insightful review. Thanks so much. Corrections made.
Comment from Liberty Justice
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Yeah, Rose did learn "that life has purpose." This story almost made me cry reminding me of myself sitting lonesome, depressed and sad looking out of the Christmas window, reflecting on loves and loved ones I've lost. A person has to be strong to survive holidays, because its so easy to fall into a deep depression and feel like life isn't worth living and commit suicide. Check out mine, also. WELL DONE. liberty justice

 Comment Written 26-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 26-Dec-2017
    Thank you for your keen observations and encouraging review!
reply by Liberty Justice on 26-Dec-2017
    You're so welcome, and check out my profile, right now, too, please! lol liberty justice
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This Christmas story speaks life means plethora of struggles and problems to face at every moment, still there is a definite purpose of life, so well propagated; I like. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 26-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 26-Dec-2017
    Thanks for your insightful review. Appreciate it!
Comment from Cheryl Gilmore
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Hi! This is a great story! I enjoyed it, and even felt a little teary-eyed at one point. great job on it. Good luck in the contest!
Cheryl

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 26-Dec-2017
    I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks for your kind encouragement.
Comment from Ricky1024
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Well written rich and semen imagery flood well read well no grammar issue so to speak ejective content object accountant or excellent descriptive measures in place thanks for this and Merry Christmas talk to Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 26-Dec-2017
    Thanks so much for your kind review and encouragement! I hope you enjoyed a pleasant Christmas.
Comment from Mabaker
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A lovely story with a happy ending, just what we need at Christmas time. In those days life would have been extremely hard for a widow woman. There was no aid extended back then. Sincerely Mabaker

 Comment Written 24-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 26-Dec-2017
    Thanks so much for your encouraging review. I appreciate it so much!
Comment from Sharon Meda
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This is a good entry for the 'Christmas Story' writing prompt.
Very nicely told, it's a good story.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Merry Christmas.
Sharon

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 Comment Written 24-Dec-2017


reply by the author on 24-Dec-2017
    Thanks so much for the encouraging feedback, Appreciate it!

    Merry Christmas to you and yours.