The Painting
Capturing a scene13 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about two white ducks mildly moving on calm lake water, under the clear sky, that appears so beautiful like a picture captured on canvas; I like. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017
This speaks about two white ducks mildly moving on calm lake water, under the clear sky, that appears so beautiful like a picture captured on canvas; I like. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2017
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Thank you .
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line / syllable count and nature theme. In terms of haiku (not the primary rules) the first two lines provide a connected and cohesive image with the seasonal reference or kigo implied and a satori that encapsulates the observation. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line / syllable count and nature theme. In terms of haiku (not the primary rules) the first two lines provide a connected and cohesive image with the seasonal reference or kigo implied and a satori that encapsulates the observation. All the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
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Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a nice attempt at a 5-7-5 poem for the writing prompt.
The picture is nice and a good match.
But your second line has 6 syllables instead of 7.
Otherwise, well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
This is a nice attempt at a 5-7-5 poem for the writing prompt.
The picture is nice and a good match.
But your second line has 6 syllables instead of 7.
Otherwise, well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much, I've changed it now. I hadn't checked it.