Comment from aryr

Excellent

Awww such a brave time for Helen but such a sad time for her imaginary friend who is no longer needed. I am so glad that these friends are there when needed and the nice thing is that even as adults if we need them they are there. Great job Maria.

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for reading, Aryr.

reply by aryr on 07-Dec-2017

most welcome.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

What a clever twist Maria Jose Garcia
so to me Helen has made up her mind at the age of nine she doesn't need an invisible friend she likes to make her own chose

Gert

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for reading, Gert.

reply by Gert sherwood on 07-Dec-2017

Smiles Maria
You are welcome
Gert

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

did you mean taking or making a decision

I have always thought of imaginary friends as angels that walk with us and when we reach a certain age, they become hard to contact. Nicely done

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

They are both possible, Barb. Must be a regional variation, though some people say the meaning is slightly different.
Thanks for reading.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Maria Jose, this is a very good little flash with quite a clever twist. She didn't need her imaginary friend anymore and killed it off without looking back. I liked it. All the best, and good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for your review, Ulla.

Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

Very nice work on this dribble entry, Maria. I enjoyed this piece and wish you the best of luck in the contest.

I only found one thing for your consideration. Dessert instead of desert.

Take care,
Russell

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for noticing, Russel. I always correct my students when they make that mistake. There's a big difference between a desert and a dessert. ;)

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

AW, that's sad. I had an imaginary friend in childhood. I'm sure it was not imaginary! Just a non-physical entity...

Good flash fiction.

Well paced. Fine use of dialog too.

Good twist.

Good luck!


Warmly, rd

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks so much for reading.

reply by rama devi on 07-Dec-2017

My pleasure. :)

Comment from SLMorrical

Exceptional

A very cute story of how an imaginary friend feels as the child grows. I just love the flow and I understood right away it was from the point of view of the imaginary friend. Very well done.

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for your kind review and generous rating.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a sweet write about a child's imaginary friend disappearing! A sweet and warm write that is ideal for the contest, I wish you luck, best wishes, love Dolly x

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks so much, Dolly.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

As a dad, and now a grandad, I have been blessed and problem end to experience the bitter sweetness of little ones growing up, but being enriched by the process. Wonderful entry in this contest Maria. Good luck, blessings, Roy

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks for your review, Roy.

reply by royowen on 07-Dec-2017

My pleasure

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

A very clever write Maria. I think though that you meant "before MAKING a ..." instead of taking. I love these tiny bits of story lines ... Good luck. xoxo deborah

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 Comment Written 07-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

Thanks, I meant taking. They are both correct. Thanks for noticing, anyway.

reply by kiwigirl2821 on 07-Dec-2017

oops sorry ... d

reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017

No problem. 😊