A Night In Hell On Earth
Observation of a third kind37 total reviews
Comment from rjuselius
This is a powerful piece of poetry dear tom! I think you have the talent to write absolutely outstanding poems! And they really are so very profound and compelling!
Thanks for sharing!
Virtual sixer..
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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This is a powerful piece of poetry dear tom! I think you have the talent to write absolutely outstanding poems! And they really are so very profound and compelling!
Thanks for sharing!
Virtual sixer..
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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Thank you Rebekka. Most honored. tom
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt sad poem. We all have our own struggles on earth to overcome. The man on the street struggles to survive from day to day, with all his belongings right by his side, where the rich man has the struggle to keep track of his possessions. Neither has a proper night's sleep.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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A very well-written heartfelt sad poem. We all have our own struggles on earth to overcome. The man on the street struggles to survive from day to day, with all his belongings right by his side, where the rich man has the struggle to keep track of his possessions. Neither has a proper night's sleep.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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Thank you Sandra. tom
Comment from amahra
Wow, I am so glad I had another six. It would have been ashamed to have given this awesome writing a merger five, though five is good. I loved the line; maggot white'. The poem captured the gloom of homelessness and many things you have observed throughout your life.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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Wow, I am so glad I had another six. It would have been ashamed to have given this awesome writing a merger five, though five is good. I loved the line; maggot white'. The poem captured the gloom of homelessness and many things you have observed throughout your life.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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I am most honored amahra. Thank you very much for this outstanding review. tom
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This resonated with me tonight ... I don't particularly enjoy these poems because they give you to thought about the darker harder sides of what living is. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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This resonated with me tonight ... I don't particularly enjoy these poems because they give you to thought about the darker harder sides of what living is. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2017
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Thank you Kiwi. Most honored. tom
Comment from Janilou
The children are the innocent who die
In agony beyond their painful cry.
Let all men know each loss is on their soul
To be adjudged when death calls in the toll.
Just loved these lines. What a powerful statement this poem makes. I found no errors. It's very good. Such vivid imagery.
Jan
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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The children are the innocent who die
In agony beyond their painful cry.
Let all men know each loss is on their soul
To be adjudged when death calls in the toll.
Just loved these lines. What a powerful statement this poem makes. I found no errors. It's very good. Such vivid imagery.
Jan
Comment Written 07-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Hi Jan and thank you very much my friend. I am most honored. tom
Comment from GWinterwin
Not completely sure of the message here, whether blaming the world for loss or gain. Too many make their life bad and then want to blame others. God did not leave man, man left God. To always blame others like bible thumping preachers is just passing the buck. We need to love each other and help each other but not blame others for our condition. Yes our country is in terrible shape partly because man has abandoned God.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Not completely sure of the message here, whether blaming the world for loss or gain. Too many make their life bad and then want to blame others. God did not leave man, man left God. To always blame others like bible thumping preachers is just passing the buck. We need to love each other and help each other but not blame others for our condition. Yes our country is in terrible shape partly because man has abandoned God.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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It's a poem GW. I am not blaming anyone for anything. But the "blame" for the dire conditions some children face, all around the world, I was raised to believe it is the responsibility and, yes, sometimes the blame of the human race for misguided priorities. I think bible thumping preachers are still, if on the margins, members of the human race. And as far a God being abandoned, as the Buddha said, that is way above my pay grade. Maybe you have information I am lacking GW. I can only speak from my experience and not for anyone else. That's how I feel. Thank you so much for a nice review. easyeverett
Comment from c_lucas
Yes, children are marked for death in a world where violence rules. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Yes, children are marked for death in a world where violence rules. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Hi Charlie. Thanks you very much friend. tom
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how we live in hell on this earth, poet once lived a night in hell and found our state of living in excess refuge or homeless or child abuse; advices gives; I like. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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This speaks how we live in hell on this earth, poet once lived a night in hell and found our state of living in excess refuge or homeless or child abuse; advices gives; I like. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Thank you ALD. Most honored my friend. tom
Comment from MelB
Hi EasyEverett, very nice abab rhyme and flow to this poem. It's a heavy poem, but great description and imagery of the dark days we are in and facing ahead.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Hi EasyEverett, very nice abab rhyme and flow to this poem. It's a heavy poem, but great description and imagery of the dark days we are in and facing ahead.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Hi MelB. Thanks a million for the read and review. I am honored. tom
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You're welcome, Tom.
Comment from beizanten
gotham isn't that batman's city and not exist? an interesting and intriguing beginning. great second poetry, the emption rang well and it is so true about the excess of the rich and the needy poor people that need help.every stanza rang true, this poetry is amazing
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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gotham isn't that batman's city and not exist? an interesting and intriguing beginning. great second poetry, the emption rang well and it is so true about the excess of the rich and the needy poor people that need help.every stanza rang true, this poetry is amazing
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2017
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Wow, beizanten, what a great review my friend. I am most honored. Thank you very much. tom
