Another Jackie O
Written in Chicago doing the beat clubs 196362 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Tom,
This is a nicely formatted rhyming free verse about how the Beat Generation succumbed to drugs and just seemed to get lost. I like the internal rhyme and alliteration. Il like how it is broken up between the speaker and subject.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good rest of the week.
Joan
Hi Tom,
This is a nicely formatted rhyming free verse about how the Beat Generation succumbed to drugs and just seemed to get lost. I like the internal rhyme and alliteration. Il like how it is broken up between the speaker and subject.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from Douglas Goff
Oh my, my, my but this was intense!
The last paragraph was a hoot, but this one really sounded like a song:
saddle-strapped sad hag
gone insane,
never gonna' lose
'cause she's never in the game.
This is a great one.
D
Oh my, my, my but this was intense!
The last paragraph was a hoot, but this one really sounded like a song:
saddle-strapped sad hag
gone insane,
never gonna' lose
'cause she's never in the game.
This is a great one.
D
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from Realist101
Describes many people who inhabit the streets of cities nowadays. Sadly there are more and more. It's too bad we can spend and send trillions to other countries and not save our own first. I like your alliteration! :)
Describes many people who inhabit the streets of cities nowadays. Sadly there are more and more. It's too bad we can spend and send trillions to other countries and not save our own first. I like your alliteration! :)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Jackie Onassis sad story but many women wanted to be like her. She was so grateful and suffered so much during her husband, Kennedy 's assassination. I keep seeing the video of the shooting and her trying to get out of the car. The whole world watched and grieved the loss.
Your poem has a sixties feeling when hippies rebelled against authority and the status quo.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Jackie Onassis sad story but many women wanted to be like her. She was so grateful and suffered so much during her husband, Kennedy 's assassination. I keep seeing the video of the shooting and her trying to get out of the car. The whole world watched and grieved the loss.
Your poem has a sixties feeling when hippies rebelled against authority and the status quo.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from Iza Deleanu
" brain-drained, insane, dissipated plain,
a bucket full of truth even Jesus wouldn't claim
so crucify your comfort, your gentrified name,
then bring it to the street, bitch, let me see your shame." sometimes we fell for it, we fell for the self-pity, and we feel lost if we don't open our heart to the beauty that God put in each of us. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
" brain-drained, insane, dissipated plain,
a bucket full of truth even Jesus wouldn't claim
so crucify your comfort, your gentrified name,
then bring it to the street, bitch, let me see your shame." sometimes we fell for it, we fell for the self-pity, and we feel lost if we don't open our heart to the beauty that God put in each of us. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from QC Poet
Wow. It definitely has an old sixty's sort of beat I'm guessing referring to Jackie Onassis'? Been away from this site for awhile due to health reasons. I have always enjoyed reading and reading your poetic works and hope to come across more of your unique styles.
Wow. It definitely has an old sixty's sort of beat I'm guessing referring to Jackie Onassis'? Been away from this site for awhile due to health reasons. I have always enjoyed reading and reading your poetic works and hope to come across more of your unique styles.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I noticed sometimes you capitalized 'I'm' and sometimes you didn't. I would keep it unformed throughout the entire time. Thank you for reposting this for us. Your descriptions and story telling are great.
I noticed sometimes you capitalized 'I'm' and sometimes you didn't. I would keep it unformed throughout the entire time. Thank you for reposting this for us. Your descriptions and story telling are great.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from royowen
I can remember living and growing up in the 60s, it was a naive time but a good time, although that naivety was bubble that burst with assassinations etc. the coffee clubs were dark cavernous holes in the ground, but I didn't have a clue about poetry, if God hadn't ave taught, I would still be ignorant, well done, blessings Roy
I can remember living and growing up in the 60s, it was a naive time but a good time, although that naivety was bubble that burst with assassinations etc. the coffee clubs were dark cavernous holes in the ground, but I didn't have a clue about poetry, if God hadn't ave taught, I would still be ignorant, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from Lisasview
Well, another marvellous one from you to enjoy this quiet evening while I recuperate from getting a new knee, here in Spain...
I hope you plan to put all these poems into a book???
Lisasview.....
Well, another marvellous one from you to enjoy this quiet evening while I recuperate from getting a new knee, here in Spain...
I hope you plan to put all these poems into a book???
Lisasview.....
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
Comment from Lea Tonin1
That was a hard and deep read but you have held up the mirror to show the world the ugliness that exists. And a sad story of one woman. It dredged up many feelings I connected to it which obviously is excellent writing very well done. I see no issues with grammar aesthetic subject matter or sentence structure I think that once again you've got an amazing entry I hope your day is great!
That was a hard and deep read but you have held up the mirror to show the world the ugliness that exists. And a sad story of one woman. It dredged up many feelings I connected to it which obviously is excellent writing very well done. I see no issues with grammar aesthetic subject matter or sentence structure I think that once again you've got an amazing entry I hope your day is great!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024