Royal Missive
Use these words3 total reviews
Comment from D.F. Wood
Excellent. I feel you worked the required words in very well and made a charming story as well. There was a spelling error on Switzerland. Also, I am curious if when Elizabeth was speaking, that a paragraph separation was necessary. I do get messed up with dialogue sometimes. After ". . . . Elizabeth remarked", she continued to speak two more sentences. Is it required to separate each of her sentences, especially when you do not identify that it is her speaking. I am just curious? Good job regardless.
'Helena has enjoyed her time in finishing school in Switerland and many years at court ,' Elizabeth remarked.
'Her young woman's life will be miserable and deprived of royal company, why it is totally preposterous'.
'Dearest Richard, why do I feel the need to scream, though I would be utterly averse to upsetting the servants below stairs'.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Excellent. I feel you worked the required words in very well and made a charming story as well. There was a spelling error on Switzerland. Also, I am curious if when Elizabeth was speaking, that a paragraph separation was necessary. I do get messed up with dialogue sometimes. After ". . . . Elizabeth remarked", she continued to speak two more sentences. Is it required to separate each of her sentences, especially when you do not identify that it is her speaking. I am just curious? Good job regardless.
'Helena has enjoyed her time in finishing school in Switerland and many years at court ,' Elizabeth remarked.
'Her young woman's life will be miserable and deprived of royal company, why it is totally preposterous'.
'Dearest Richard, why do I feel the need to scream, though I would be utterly averse to upsetting the servants below stairs'.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Thanks for taking time to read and critque fulsomely - much appreciated zanya
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the 'Use These Words' writing prompt.
A story well told in a short piece.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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This is a good entry for the 'Use These Words' writing prompt.
A story well told in a short piece.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about wrong guesswork, decision later a good suggestion coming an early morning drink and a shot of brandy would be preferable, words would be believable; DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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This speaks about wrong guesswork, decision later a good suggestion coming an early morning drink and a shot of brandy would be preferable, words would be believable; DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reading and critique zanya
