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Matthew, Nancy, and Sarah

A love story with a twist.

3 total reviews 
Comment from D.F. Wood
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I gave it five stars but didn't really care for it. It's just my opinion. I am not so certain this person would go from very mad to a silly calm person as soon as receiving the coffee. The garbled speech is okay, I just feel there was a loss of reality. Again, I gave it 5 stars because I found no SPAG. Good luck.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2017

Comment from Paul Bownas
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I think it should be 'brakes' not breaks. This paints a good picture of an inebriated lady, but I sort of felt it needed a bit more? You certainly made me feel quite sorry for Matthew though.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2017

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
    Thanks for catching the error, Paul. What do you mean by it needs a bit more? More what? I appreciate your input!
reply by Paul Bownas on 05-Dec-2017
    I am now interested in finding out what happened, both to Matthew and to Nancy? It sort of left me up in the air.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
    Matthew, the Rock of Gibralter, took Nancy home to sober up and play with their dog, Sarah.

    What is missing from the poem, Paul?
    I must have screwed up, if the piece
    isn't clear.

    Don

reply by Paul Bownas on 05-Dec-2017
    This poem to me sounded as though it was the forerunner of further poems or stories. I think I am in error here, not you Don, and I apologise if I caused you any bad feeling, and hope that you will forgive me on this occasion?
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
    There's nothing to forgive, Paul. I didn't mean to give the impression that I was disturbed. I appreciated your letting me know that I might have misjudged the clarity of the poem.
reply by Paul Bownas on 06-Dec-2017
    Again, I apologise, and will make sure that I read your future works with more care.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2017
    Cool.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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This speaks a love story, family love, mom and daughters, all in action, a specific day, after the outing, parental advice, all now go home following chit-chats, I like. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
    Huh? This story is about a man , wife, and dog. No daughters, no outing, no parental advice. I think you're commenting on a different story.