Silent Scream
This is a true story and proclaims my faith in God.36 total reviews
Comment from Sis Cat
Brigitte, of the stories I have read in this contest so far, yours is the best. It is real and based upon your experiences. This lends your story a gravitas that others lack. I have heard of such coming-back-from-the-brink-of death narratives such as yours, and yours is compelling. The central question is not only "Did you hear that?" but "Why did God bring me back?" You answer, "to continue my journey of faith walking with you."
While your true story is compelling, it has minor grammar errors.
Close the gap after the quotation marks: " We're losing her,
Add a period and a hyphen: anesthesiologist were loud and clear(,) absorbed by her mind in its drug(-)induced catatonic state.
Add a blank space: "I'm breathing and living,"( )she
Your story celebrates the joy and gratitude you felt when discovering that God granted you more life so your could continue your journey of faith.
Thank you for sharing your story. I wish you much success in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Brigitte, of the stories I have read in this contest so far, yours is the best. It is real and based upon your experiences. This lends your story a gravitas that others lack. I have heard of such coming-back-from-the-brink-of death narratives such as yours, and yours is compelling. The central question is not only "Did you hear that?" but "Why did God bring me back?" You answer, "to continue my journey of faith walking with you."
While your true story is compelling, it has minor grammar errors.
Close the gap after the quotation marks: " We're losing her,
Add a period and a hyphen: anesthesiologist were loud and clear(,) absorbed by her mind in its drug(-)induced catatonic state.
Add a blank space: "I'm breathing and living,"( )she
Your story celebrates the joy and gratitude you felt when discovering that God granted you more life so your could continue your journey of faith.
Thank you for sharing your story. I wish you much success in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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I appreciate this supportive review. You took the time to help me make this contest entry better and I like that in a review.
A nomination has been made.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from apky
A truly wonderful story, especially because it is true or based on what happened to you at some time.
It is not untrue when we speak of raith or belief "moving a mountain".
A little correction below.
My daughter said,"Mom, you died on the table and they brought you back." I told her in no uncertain terms," God brought (me) back to you, hon."
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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A truly wonderful story, especially because it is true or based on what happened to you at some time.
It is not untrue when we speak of raith or belief "moving a mountain".
A little correction below.
My daughter said,"Mom, you died on the table and they brought you back." I told her in no uncertain terms," God brought (me) back to you, hon."
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Thank you for this supportive review. I edited, thanks again.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from Mabaker
I believe it is everyone's nightmare about being awake on the table and feeling everything and hearing the conversations. I go for surgery on 21-12-17 I hope I'm well and truly asleep the entire time. Sincerely Anne
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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I believe it is everyone's nightmare about being awake on the table and feeling everything and hearing the conversations. I go for surgery on 21-12-17 I hope I'm well and truly asleep the entire time. Sincerely Anne
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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The best of luck to you on your upcoming surgery. May God be with you ,as he was with me. Prayers being said.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow, this DOES sound like unimaginable terror and angst for your poor family, not to mention YOU lying on a hospital gurney.
Sounds like a miracle to me!
I'm sure your strong faith never wavered.
Well written with a great starting sentence!
Cheers P
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Wow, this DOES sound like unimaginable terror and angst for your poor family, not to mention YOU lying on a hospital gurney.
Sounds like a miracle to me!
I'm sure your strong faith never wavered.
Well written with a great starting sentence!
Cheers P
Comment Written 10-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and your kind comments. It was a day to remember, for sure.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from B.B. Rose
Oh, my gosh. What an experience. You tell it quite well so that the reader can feel the fear and horror of not being able to physically shout out NO I'm here.
Fine work.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Oh, my gosh. What an experience. You tell it quite well so that the reader can feel the fear and horror of not being able to physically shout out NO I'm here.
Fine work.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and the kind comments.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brigitte, it sounds as if it was a close call, but whatever or whoever was looking after you that day decided it was not time for you to depart with this world just yet. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Hi Brigitte, it sounds as if it was a close call, but whatever or whoever was looking after you that day decided it was not time for you to depart with this world just yet. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, I give credit to God who wasn't ready for me yet.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment from jenintorre
My goodness what an awful experience you must have had. I found your story very gripping and well written. I wish you good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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My goodness what an awful experience you must have had. I found your story very gripping and well written. I wish you good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and the kind review. It was day I won't ever forget.God is there for us when we least expect his presence, he guided the doctors of that I am sure.
Have a great weekend,
Brigitte
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wow!
Only by the grace of God did you manage to make it through the surgery I'm sure, Brigitte.
I awoke during my defibrillator surgery; right in the middle of the surgeon putting it inside my chest cavity.
I could feel him pushing the thing in the pocket they'd cut in my chest wall, but I felt no pain. The operating room was all abuzz with idle banter, laughter, and chit chat.
When I spoke, saying--"Uh, excuse me, I can feel that!", it got as quiet as a church during the pastor's funeral service.
I'm sure God had something to do with that too!
Great story.
I'm glad you made it! (but not as happy as you are about it, I'm quite sure, lol).
~Dean ;)
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Wow!
Only by the grace of God did you manage to make it through the surgery I'm sure, Brigitte.
I awoke during my defibrillator surgery; right in the middle of the surgeon putting it inside my chest cavity.
I could feel him pushing the thing in the pocket they'd cut in my chest wall, but I felt no pain. The operating room was all abuzz with idle banter, laughter, and chit chat.
When I spoke, saying--"Uh, excuse me, I can feel that!", it got as quiet as a church during the pastor's funeral service.
I'm sure God had something to do with that too!
Great story.
I'm glad you made it! (but not as happy as you are about it, I'm quite sure, lol).
~Dean ;)
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Yes, Dean I can " hear" the silence when you spoke. God works in mysterious ways. I think hell was probably full and the Almighty wasn't ready to deal with me ( or you) yet, lol.
Thanks for reading and your comments. Glad we are both still here; there must still be tasks to perform and words to pen in our future.
Blessings,
Brigitte
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There must be, Brigitte.
You're very welcome. :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What an amazing story, Brigitte! It brought me out in goose bumps! I love a true story like this, it is so heartwarming. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
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"Did you hear that?[",] [m]My thanks to you for watching over me and waking me up to continue my journey of faith walking with you.(") Add closing speech tags.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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What an amazing story, Brigitte! It brought me out in goose bumps! I love a true story like this, it is so heartwarming. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
[] remove () add.
"Did you hear that?"[,] she screamed to God. remove comma.
"Did you hear that?[",] [m]My thanks to you for watching over me and waking me up to continue my journey of faith walking with you.(") Add closing speech tags.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and these helpful edits. I am blessed to have faithful readers, such as you.
Have a great weekend.
Brigitte
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This non-fiction is an easy-read.
Faith in God is expressed well.
I liked organisation of facts.
I enjoyed the beginning and conclusive ending.
DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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This non-fiction is an easy-read.
Faith in God is expressed well.
I liked organisation of facts.
I enjoyed the beginning and conclusive ending.
DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 09-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thank you for reading and the supportive comments. This was one from the heart and faith the foundation. This was a day I will never forget.
Have a great weekend,
Brigitte
