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A lot can change with a phone call.20 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Your response was perfect. It's just what he needed. This is a phone call that lot of parents receive. Unfortunately, most parents rush to get the kid out of the pokie.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Your response was perfect. It's just what he needed. This is a phone call that lot of parents receive. Unfortunately, most parents rush to get the kid out of the pokie.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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I let him smolder.
Thanks for the review!!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a cute entry for the 100 word story prompt.
A story well told.
The picture is a good match.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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This is a cute entry for the 100 word story prompt.
A story well told.
The picture is a good match.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Sharon! I appreciate the feedback, and the time you took with this silly little story!
Take care
Comment from Mabaker
I had that phone call as well. I was in a different State. As my lad was seventeen, the police kept him in a single cell, so I knew he was safe. It can be a shock, or the best news ever! I don't know that it made any difference to my son. How about your boy?" Sincerely Anne
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I had that phone call as well. I was in a different State. As my lad was seventeen, the police kept him in a single cell, so I knew he was safe. It can be a shock, or the best news ever! I don't know that it made any difference to my son. How about your boy?" Sincerely Anne
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Well, I'd say it helped, and I think it did. He's not in jail now, but he's still a mess.
Thanks for the review and the comments. Raising the wild sort isn't easy. His brother and sister have pretty much kept themselves out of trouble. There's always that one...
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day Anon.
I'd let them keep him as well for using those colours! What ever happened to black and yellow lol.
A very good contest entry with a nice(peaceful) twist the the end.
All the very best of luck in the contest.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Hahahaha! G'day Anon.
I'd let them keep him as well for using those colours! What ever happened to black and yellow lol.
A very good contest entry with a nice(peaceful) twist the the end.
All the very best of luck in the contest.
Great job.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Padna!
Purple and orange are Joker's signature colors! Not my choice....
Thanks for the wonderful review!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hahahaha!
Ya know, Anonymous Author, if more parents did this kind of thing to their kids when they decide that they wanna act out a little, then perhaps they wouldn't act out at all. At least not as much.
As for me, I can't blame this parent for going back to bed.
A little peace and quiet can be very relaxing when we can get it.
Good job with this. It's very well written and funny too.
Best of luck!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Hahahaha!
Ya know, Anonymous Author, if more parents did this kind of thing to their kids when they decide that they wanna act out a little, then perhaps they wouldn't act out at all. At least not as much.
As for me, I can't blame this parent for going back to bed.
A little peace and quiet can be very relaxing when we can get it.
Good job with this. It's very well written and funny too.
Best of luck!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Dean!
I would say it was a fun write, but that it struck rather close to home. haha.
Comment from Wetbelly01
This is great!.... Reminds me of what my folks would have
done, back in MY youth... You were able to convey your message in so few words.
I'm impressed.... I would think you'll do well in the contest....
Well Done!!.... And Good Luck!!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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This is great!.... Reminds me of what my folks would have
done, back in MY youth... You were able to convey your message in so few words.
I'm impressed.... I would think you'll do well in the contest....
Well Done!!.... And Good Luck!!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Jim! I appreciate the review and comments!
Comment from Mimi Linny
Great 100 word story! Well written with wonderful use of the required words. I loved the dialogue sequence and the perfect "mom" response: "Keep him!" Great job and much luck in the contest!
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Great 100 word story! Well written with wonderful use of the required words. I loved the dialogue sequence and the perfect "mom" response: "Keep him!" Great job and much luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much! I actually did that to my son once, but my mother went and bailed him out. Grandmothers!!
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LOL!
Comment from pome lover
wow - I'm speechless - though I guess not totally.
Of course, I'm wondering how loosely this is based. At first, I thought this was a humorous piece, but seems not. Although, the more I think about it, you probably did the right thing to teach him a lesson. At any rate, it's a good piece - you build suspense and finish with a surprise ending. well done.
pome lover
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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wow - I'm speechless - though I guess not totally.
Of course, I'm wondering how loosely this is based. At first, I thought this was a humorous piece, but seems not. Although, the more I think about it, you probably did the right thing to teach him a lesson. At any rate, it's a good piece - you build suspense and finish with a surprise ending. well done.
pome lover
Comment Written 29-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much.
It was pretty loosely. He does love Joker, and got hauled home in handcuffs by the police. He and his friends got caught before they did too much damage. It taught him a good lesson!
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I bet it did!
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, I am still having a chuckle, and understand, for your peace and his learning path, more Mums should act like Mrs Evans, very well done****kahpot
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Excellent, I am still having a chuckle, and understand, for your peace and his learning path, more Mums should act like Mrs Evans, very well done****kahpot
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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He learned his lesson!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about predictability in living, when we think of peace, bad news come on telephone call and everything change, point of view life is unpredictable; I like. DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks about predictability in living, when we think of peace, bad news come on telephone call and everything change, point of view life is unpredictable; I like. DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the wonderful review!
