Ode to Sandy Lee (Happy 70th)!
Sweet & sassy, loves her Redskins, Happy Hour and Placemats!3 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is an excellent entry for the Ode Poetry contest.
Well done.
Sandy Lee sounds like a hoot, even at her age.
You go girl!!
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
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This is an excellent entry for the Ode Poetry contest.
Well done.
Sandy Lee sounds like a hoot, even at her age.
You go girl!!
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 27-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
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Hi, Sharon! Sandy Lee is adorable and quite unique and youthfully active for her age! Thank you so much for the great review and wonderful comments! Have a beautiful day!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This appears to be an ode to a friend. (At first I thought you were saying Sandy DEE, and was so confused. haha!)
A cute tribute and one I am SURE your friend will ADORE -- who wouldn't??
Some notes:
1.) For wherever she'll go
(it's) her placemat, she won't leave without.
2.) So (m)ischievous...
3.) in the third stanza, the rhyme scheme drops and startles the reader, who has grown used to that sing-song rhythm. I would suggest either making it like the others OR offering a tiny ( * ) or something between it and the others. Just a thought - yours to ignore -- *smile*
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the voting!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This appears to be an ode to a friend. (At first I thought you were saying Sandy DEE, and was so confused. haha!)
A cute tribute and one I am SURE your friend will ADORE -- who wouldn't??
Some notes:
1.) For wherever she'll go
(it's) her placemat, she won't leave without.
2.) So (m)ischievous...
3.) in the third stanza, the rhyme scheme drops and startles the reader, who has grown used to that sing-song rhythm. I would suggest either making it like the others OR offering a tiny ( * ) or something between it and the others. Just a thought - yours to ignore -- *smile*
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the voting!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the great review and comments, Robyn! Yes... this was written for a dear work friend when she turned 70! She is quite the character - Absolutely adores her Redskins cannot go out to eat anywhere (including fast-food) without using a placement (and she definitely improvises if she doesn't have one)! LOL.... This was originally written as a song, utilizing the tune of "Les Poison" from the Little Mermaid - I will definitely review the poem and consider your suggestions to make it read a little smoother... I'm sure most people will read instead of "singing" to the song! LOL... Thanks again for the great review and have a wonderful day!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks an ode to Sandy Lee on her happy seventieth birthday, her habit, passion, love of customers, fun making, skin, physical look and everything so sweetly appreciated; I like DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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This speaks an ode to Sandy Lee on her happy seventieth birthday, her habit, passion, love of customers, fun making, skin, physical look and everything so sweetly appreciated; I like DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 26-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for the great review! I'm so happy that you enjoyed this one... It was a fun one to write! Have a wonderful day!
